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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Margarite"Revenge for molestation
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Comment from Ulla
Hi jusylee, this is quite a set up with manipulating so, everyone things so very well of him while he all the time has an ulterior motive. Well done. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 05-May-2016
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Hi jusylee, this is quite a set up with manipulating so, everyone things so very well of him while he all the time has an ulterior motive. Well done. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 05-May-2016
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thank you, Following novels on this site is a little hard to do as they get disjointed with one chapter at a time. on the other hand receiving all the great comments and suggestions helps each chapter. I am continuing to read your story. What an amazing one it is.
Comment from Joan E.
What a dedicated student Joe was and what a disciplined executor with his six-step plan to play the "perfect son" for the neighbors! It sounds as though he may have committed the perfect crime. Fascinating! I liked the way the artwork you selected helped to establish the mood. -Joan
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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What a dedicated student Joe was and what a disciplined executor with his six-step plan to play the "perfect son" for the neighbors! It sounds as though he may have committed the perfect crime. Fascinating! I liked the way the artwork you selected helped to establish the mood. -Joan
Comment Written 03-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
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Thank you so much, I have written 6 chapters now , this is fun.
Comment from Douglas Paul
I like the implications in this chapter about what Joe's intentions might be. Still haven't had a chance to backtrack and read the first chapter - need to do that soon
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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I like the implications in this chapter about what Joe's intentions might be. Still haven't had a chance to backtrack and read the first chapter - need to do that soon
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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thank you so much. I am having a great time writing this, I don't know exactly where this is going, but we will all find out.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
He's a real piece of work isn't he.
I congratulate your unique story line
and interesting characters. The buttons
and the button factory are a stroke of
genius. I'm hooked. Nancy
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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He's a real piece of work isn't he.
I congratulate your unique story line
and interesting characters. The buttons
and the button factory are a stroke of
genius. I'm hooked. Nancy
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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thank you Nancy, This is going to be a wild ride, I don't even know where it is going yet.
Comment from pattipac
Judy, your story about an abusive mother is well penned. It is filled with bread crumbs of clues from the first paragraph on, that leads one to decide who the murderer is. (choirs- chores)
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Judy, your story about an abusive mother is well penned. It is filled with bread crumbs of clues from the first paragraph on, that leads one to decide who the murderer is. (choirs- chores)
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thank you so much. Yes, I still have so much editing to do. You all are a great help.
Comment from winnona
This is very good. You set the stage for what is to come. Giving just enough details to make it very realistic. In just a few lines you manage to paint the picture accurately of an alcoholic mother in any small town in America.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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This is very good. You set the stage for what is to come. Giving just enough details to make it very realistic. In just a few lines you manage to paint the picture accurately of an alcoholic mother in any small town in America.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thank you , I am enjoying writing this way
Comment from Helen Bach
This chapter perfectly illustrates how a psychopath thinks and how intelligent they think they are.
Your characters are developing nicely and are becoming well rounded. I shall look forward to your notifications and your writing.
This is exactly the kind of writing I enjoy. X
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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This chapter perfectly illustrates how a psychopath thinks and how intelligent they think they are.
Your characters are developing nicely and are becoming well rounded. I shall look forward to your notifications and your writing.
This is exactly the kind of writing I enjoy. X
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thank you so much. I am enjoying your reviews. I hope life is treating you well.
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Life is good. If you posted your whole book I would probably be settled for the day x
Comment from foxangie123
Gosh this is powerful writing you have done here. It is of superb quality and so entertaining as it is always. The twists and curves are so clever and brilliant. Fantastic.
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Gosh this is powerful writing you have done here. It is of superb quality and so entertaining as it is always. The twists and curves are so clever and brilliant. Fantastic.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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thank you fox, you make me believe in myself. i am still developing ideas and I am not yet sure where this is going but I am having fun on the journey.
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
Unique story line and very articulate.I loved your introduction it aroused my interest and help me concentrate on the story.Great writing skills .
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Unique story line and very articulate.I loved your introduction it aroused my interest and help me concentrate on the story.Great writing skills .
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thank you so much. I am learning so much from all of you on this site
Comment from aryr
Rather interesting well planned plot. It is amazing what the thinking process can produced. It actually sounds like a fool proof plan but I am sure that Joe will become the victim of his crime. It was enjoyable to read and easy to follow regardless of the deep thoughts of planning. Thank you.
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reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Rather interesting well planned plot. It is amazing what the thinking process can produced. It actually sounds like a fool proof plan but I am sure that Joe will become the victim of his crime. It was enjoyable to read and easy to follow regardless of the deep thoughts of planning. Thank you.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-May-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Thank you , I am sure Joe is not going to get away with everything he has done. The reasons behind his revenge are explained in the first part of buttons.
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ahaaaa I will have to research it more, thanks.
