Comment from bmethner

Excellent

Intriguing story. You are a good storyteller; it flows every well. The characters are interesting and very believable. It will be interesting to see how they all tie together.
The detail in the story keeps the reader wanting to know what comes next.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017

thank you , were you able to read the first chapter? it explains so much. Thank you so much for your support on this story. iJudy Your words truly help me.

reply by bmethner on 02-Apr-2017

I enjoy reading it. Good luck with it

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

You have structured the begining of this story so that you draw the reader into the plot. I like the characters that you are developing. I will read on.

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

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reply by the author on 04-May-2016

thank you so much. I have written a total of 6 chapters now. I so appreciate you reading this.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi jusylee, This is a very good chapter. It's true that the FS format calls for shorter chapters, but I do think this could have been just a tad longer. A very interesting story and I'm looking forward to reading more. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you so much. I am truly having a great time with these characters.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Well done Judy but in my opinion the chapter could be longer than this. It doesn't give a reviewer much to comment on. I am enjoying your story very much. Well done. Nancy

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

thank you Nancy, I will put more into the next one. I think that is a great idea.

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

No matter what r how many times it is a pleasure to read your work. You have a most outstanding insight and pen. You move your readers and I'm a big fan..

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Thank you so much, I am not sure where this story is going, but I am going to keep writing it.

Comment from Helen Bach

Excellent

I didn't mind that the first part was long, in fact I reread so I could enjoy these chapters in sequence. A most enjoyable read at the hands of your able penmanship.

You are creating a believable story that is both imaginative and disturbing. I look forward to reading he whole thing x

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

thank you so much, With encouragement like you just gave me I will continue to write. I appreciate you so much and congrats on your recent win. I thought it was wonderful.

reply by Helen Bach on 02-May-2016

Thank you so much. You words to me were heartfelt and so meaningful. Deeply touched me x

Comment from Lannell912

Excellent

This a very good write , hooked all ready hope can go back and catch up with the previous chapters. You have a nice way of putting yourself in some ones shoes and letting the reader know the feelings. Not all writers can do that a sell it good
that's very important. A touchy subject so many artist avoid proud to see you tackle it brave heart , great job your friendLANNELL912

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Thank you so much. I really want to do this . Since I am a teacher I will have time this summer to work on it.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A well-written story. The youngsters don't realize the consequences of their actions before it is too late. The boy can just deny it, but the girl is the one who have to take the blame.

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Thank you Sandra, Always like hearing from you.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

Well written with enough details to make it very realistic. I do not think I read the first part. I will when you repost it. The story captures the reader right away and keeps them reading to the end.

 Comment Written 01-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

thank you winnona. I will repost soon. The book is called Buttons, It is a story of revenge and renewel.

Comment from candyfink

Excellent

You are a fabulous writer. You are also very inspiring to me. You make me want to write more. Thank you for sharing your talent

 Comment Written 01-May-2016

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reply by the author on 01-May-2016

Thank you so much, I hope you have time someday to read the first chapter( Which is too long for this format, I didn't understand when I came on fanstory, it really is about 8 chapters.' Tha