Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
It's a nice piece in continuation taking the story forward in an interesting way.
Wording is impressive and matching the theme.
Smooth and natural flow throughout from the beginning to the end.

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you for the encouraging rage.

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Now I'm wondering if we are ever going to find out about that extra land. Sounds like those brothers were a pair of adventurers. Looking forward to meeting Tatiana again, Giddy

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Heidixoxo

Excellent

Hello my dear friend, Barbara
It has been awhile since I've been on here reading or writing so it was very refreshing to find some of your wonderful work. I truly enjoyed this entire story from the beginning to end, as I always do. I have always liked your technique and way of putting your stories together, Amazing characters too. Thank you for sharing with us all and best of luck to you with all your future posts. I hope we can catch up sometime soon as well.
Heidixoxo

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Thank you for the encouraging review.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Barb

= Good conversation between Soni and Alex.
= Bit by bit, the pieces are coming together.
= Will be interesting to see what's in store, or not with Jim and Soni.
= Good chapter.

<> Comma with direct address.
= "Oh(,) honey, that's a heated

=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)

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amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

I will make that correction. Thank you.

Comment from Ima L. Ami

Excellent

I am picking this up at Ch. 27, but the story is good. It sounds like you are very busy so I will be brief.

First, in your "Author's notes", you say: "Thank you Google Images for "imagine" of a helicopter". Try "...the image of a helicopter".

Now the story:

He nodded at men who had followed Soni.
---"the men" maybe?

"What were you arguing about this time," teased Alex.
---Should there be a question mark after "time" instead of a comma?

he is," blurted Soni.
---unnecessary space between opening quote and 'blurted'.

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

You are so right. I will make those corrections. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Ima L. Ami on 02-May-2016

You are very welcome!

Comment from L.lora

Excellent

Oh darn, I just can't wait till
school is out for the summer...
This is so well written and keeps
the reader on the edge of their seat
wanting more. As always, your dialogues
are superb and natural and the descriptions
compliment your scenes. Now I will wait with
baited breath till your next post. (smiles) Lora

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

reply by L.lora on 02-May-2016

You are most welcome. Lora

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Barb now I see you have about of investing that might be going on when you wrote this part-

I guess his name's Jacob Blackwood and he works for the government."

"I suspected he was a government man. Just didn't know what branch. Did Littleton say what branch and why he's sharing this information with you?"

Gert

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.

Comment from Kooky Clown

Excellent

I will have to go back and find the pages or chapters I have missed as I enjoyed this part and it sounds like a good story. Hope I am not to late to catch up to speed on it.

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I'm surprised that Soni and her family didn't have deeds to all the land, but then it had been a long time. I guess such things are just taken for granted. But why kill over some acreage? Should be an interesting story. :)

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

I hope it comes together like I want it to. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Good continuing chapter, Barbara.

He nodded at (the) men who had followed Soni.

"You take care of the others(,) and I'll have food waiting for you.

Soni, Kuruk, and Jim watched Alex pet the two large white dogs,(no comma) before he went into his and Tatiana's room.

"What were you arguing about this time,(?)" teased Alex.

"I guess his name's Jacob Blackwood(,) and he works for the government."

Did Littleton say what branch(,) and why he's sharing this information with you?"

In the process(,) we did rescue Tatiana and shut down a meth lab.

I wish Kuruk (had) packed three sandwiches instead of two."

 Comment Written 02-May-2016

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reply by the author on 07-May-2016

I am off to make the changes. I appreciate your help.