Comment from essence56

Excellent

I have been gone from the fanstory table for awhile and I return and you are still going strong. I love reading any and every story you write and it is truly worth waiting on. So don't worry about how long it takes for you to finish or post a chapter, book or create a the basis, I will wait. Just keep writing please.

 Comment Written 08-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 08-May-2016

Thank you for taking time to review this after the money was gone. I appreciate it. Thank you, also for the encouraging words.

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

Well hello there. Yup, me again. Some things will be changing soon, and I hope to be here more often and get to writing again. Hopefully. Sorry I hadn't caught any other chapters. But this is interesting. Found one minor nit.

He nodded at (the) men who had followed Soni. "How's Tatiana?"
I renewed membership for two more years. Can't leave. been here ten years.
Have a great weekend
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 06-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 07-May-2016

I am looking forward to your wonderful writing. Thank you for the kind review. I will fix that error.

reply by bookishfabler on 07-May-2016

It is always a pleasure seeing you. I actually just posyed a short poem for a contest.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, another well written chapter, and now it is revealed that Jim is working for the government and has a different. Name. And we still don't know about the 125,000 acres of land. All best. Ulla:)

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 07-May-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Smooth post with the answer about the land still hanging. :)

A couple of wee things:

He nodded at (the) men who had followed Soni. - missing a word, I think.

"What were you arguing about this time(?)" teased Alex. - needs question mark.

Well done, Barbara.

Av

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 07-May-2016

I will fix those things. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Hi Barbara, your story line is moving along nicely...it will be interesting to see where the 125,000 acres went missing. Alex seems yo think it will be dangerous to pursue it. :-)

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 07-May-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from elgone

Excellent

Killed over a argument as a result of gambling, no doubt. It will be good story, I'm sure. I didn't see anything needing correction. End of the school year is approaching. I figure you'll finish this one soon.

E

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 04-May-2016

Thank you for the encouraging review.

Comment from jane.fallon

Excellent

Excellent.

I just have a couple of questions:

Apart from sitting straighter in their chairs, did they do anything else to show their curiosity?

Who were the men who followed Soni?

Well done.

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 04-May-2016

Thank you for the interesting questions.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

I've heard of losing a few feet of land over time along fence lines and what not, but losing 125,000 acres would be harder than hiding a semi in a matchbox. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you for the kind review. I hope I have an interesting way to find that 125,000 acres.

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

Well things are definitely developing and it will be interesting to see how this all resolves. It seems to me Soni is going to be in the middle of a love triangle with Jacob and Alex, perhaps? You do a great job of describing the scene and the mood for conversation among the characters.

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Alex and his wife, helped raise her after her mother died. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Romantic and lovely how Jacob and Soni meet. Dangerous that Soni has land that highway crosses and drug traffickers use. Jacob also has dangerous job as ICE. Very graphic and Suspenceful. Check me out also. Good luck contest. liberty justice

 Comment Written 03-May-2016

---

reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thank you for the kind review. What contest?

reply by Liberty Justice on 03-May-2016

Hi! Check mine out too
today!