New Life
Contest Entry30 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, A wonderful ABC contest entry. Terrific flow from line to line. I especially liked:
Caressing the horizon, until
Dawn fades its shine.
(Beautiful imagey)
Perfect complementary artwork choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Hello author, A wonderful ABC contest entry. Terrific flow from line to line. I especially liked:
Caressing the horizon, until
Dawn fades its shine.
(Beautiful imagey)
Perfect complementary artwork choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Oh thanks a lot for the excellent review, and the lovely stars. I'm so pleased and it means a lot to me. All the best.
Comment from tony bronk
A beautiful, colorful, vivid celestial poem that carries the reader away into space and beyond the planets and galaxies. creative write. Good luck! Tony
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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A beautiful, colorful, vivid celestial poem that carries the reader away into space and beyond the planets and galaxies. creative write. Good luck! Tony
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much and very appreciated. All the best.
Comment from L.lora
Very nicely done, you've followed
the rules and presented us with
this delightful easy flowing
poem. The artwork is a nice touch.
No nits etc. Best of luck with your
contest. Lora
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Very nicely done, you've followed
the rules and presented us with
this delightful easy flowing
poem. The artwork is a nice touch.
No nits etc. Best of luck with your
contest. Lora
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Lora.It means a lot to me that you like it. All the best.
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You are most welcome...Lora
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my! What a whimsical, lovely ABC poem, my friend. You've done beautifully with this form, and I wish you luck in the contest. Ulla, the artwork you chose is fabulous too! Gorgeous work!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Oh my! What a whimsical, lovely ABC poem, my friend. You've done beautifully with this form, and I wish you luck in the contest. Ulla, the artwork you chose is fabulous too! Gorgeous work!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi Dawn, I love that you call it whimsical. Great. I'm glad you like it. By the way, I haven't yet answered your very informative answer to me on the how actually construct a poem. I am writing it all dowm and am still looking at it. So it is by no means ignored. I'm so grateful for all your help. Ulla:)))
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Oh, don't worry at all - I'm just happy you're pleased. :)
Comment from kiwisteveh
Not to spoil the romanticism, but isn't a shooting star more likely to be a star dying?!
A sound entry for the ABC contest. Your words paint quite a vivid picture of the shooting star against the darkness of early dawn. I like 'caressing' and 'dawn fades its shine'.
I felt your first line was perhaps the weakest. 'light' is not that strong here, when there are plenty of other words you could choose and the passive construction 'can be seen' might also be better turned around. How about something like
'A fiery streak I see...'?
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Not to spoil the romanticism, but isn't a shooting star more likely to be a star dying?!
A sound entry for the ABC contest. Your words paint quite a vivid picture of the shooting star against the darkness of early dawn. I like 'caressing' and 'dawn fades its shine'.
I felt your first line was perhaps the weakest. 'light' is not that strong here, when there are plenty of other words you could choose and the passive construction 'can be seen' might also be better turned around. How about something like
'A fiery streak I see...'?
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Hi steve, you are so right, a shooting star is a dying star. Added some notes and changed the first line into being more active. Thanks for the great review. All best.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-You followed the directions for the prompt.
-Well written with good imagery.
-An effective image is
"Bright against the darkened sky"
-Good use of personification.
-Good conclusion:
"A new star has been born."
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-You followed the directions for the prompt.
-Well written with good imagery.
-An effective image is
"Bright against the darkened sky"
-Good use of personification.
-Good conclusion:
"A new star has been born."
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thank you very much. Great review. All best.
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You are very welcome. I am glad you appreciated the review.
Comment from William Ross
very nice great job on the abc for the prompt new stars born all the time. it's the falling ones I worry about. good luck on this and have a great day.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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very nice great job on the abc for the prompt new stars born all the time. it's the falling ones I worry about. good luck on this and have a great day.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2016
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Thanks a lot for the great review. All best.
Comment from jlsavell
Author, I actually never understood an abc poem until now. Beautifully executed in form and sentiment. Well done... jlsavell
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Author, I actually never understood an abc poem until now. Beautifully executed in form and sentiment. Well done... jlsavell
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Ah, what can I say. I'm so glad that I've succeeded. Thanks for a great review. All the best
Comment from Natalie Walker
This is a good poem for this form. It follows the ABC guidelines. The imagery is great, and it flows nicely one line to the next. I see no errors. Nice work.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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This is a good poem for this form. It follows the ABC guidelines. The imagery is great, and it flows nicely one line to the next. I see no errors. Nice work.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks a lot for this great review, Very much appreciated. Al the best.
Comment from djeckert
Nice. I sonetimes have wondered if stars snd human souls are somehow intertwined. astro physics and Gods greatness seem to suggest that there may be something like that going on. Being science admits that it only can find about 5 percent of matter. just a thought. Nice poem. it nspures for sure. God Bless
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Nice. I sonetimes have wondered if stars snd human souls are somehow intertwined. astro physics and Gods greatness seem to suggest that there may be something like that going on. Being science admits that it only can find about 5 percent of matter. just a thought. Nice poem. it nspures for sure. God Bless
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Oh, I don't know but I do think there is a connection. Thanks ever so much for this great review. Much appreciated. All the best.
