New Life
Contest Entry30 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
A beautifully written ABC about stars. Very serene feeling. It is written in perfect form and I wish you well in the contest.
~~Teresa~~
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
A beautifully written ABC about stars. Very serene feeling. It is written in perfect form and I wish you well in the contest.
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Teresa, So pleased that you liked it. all the best.
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Ulla,
So you're a star-watcher too? I enjoyed this poem of the night and new creation of a new star--a new life. This is a lovely metaphor for the poem's ending.
You've used enjambment well, thus allowing the poem to read more smoothly. The poem has a good feel to it. Your well chosen phrasing provides the reader with excellent visuals.
May I offer several suggestions for you to consider?
I stumbled just a tad in line one with the placement of 'I see'. I think it might be better if it began the line. I think of shooting stars and streaking light.
[I see a streaking light]
An excellent read this morning.
Ray
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
Good Morning, Ulla,
So you're a star-watcher too? I enjoyed this poem of the night and new creation of a new star--a new life. This is a lovely metaphor for the poem's ending.
You've used enjambment well, thus allowing the poem to read more smoothly. The poem has a good feel to it. Your well chosen phrasing provides the reader with excellent visuals.
May I offer several suggestions for you to consider?
I stumbled just a tad in line one with the placement of 'I see'. I think it might be better if it began the line. I think of shooting stars and streaking light.
[I see a streaking light]
An excellent read this morning.
Ray
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 02-May-2016
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Hi Ray, I most certainly am. I'm very pleased with your review and learning from it, well at least I hope so. Poetry is so new to me, and I never thought that I would ever try. But I'm fascinated. Also English is not my first language, but that's no excuse. May just explain when I write something odd at times. LOL. I am looking into your great suggestion and I see what you mean. I have learned so much from this site. All the best. Ulla:))
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You're very welcome.
Ray
Comment from Rubylou
What a great poem describing energy reinventing itself through the 'life of a star' cycle.
This is a powerful occurrence in the universe but works especially well as a metaphor for pushing through and going on in life after setbacks.
The quote, " Up from the ashes come the roses of success" come to my mind.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
What a great poem describing energy reinventing itself through the 'life of a star' cycle.
This is a powerful occurrence in the universe but works especially well as a metaphor for pushing through and going on in life after setbacks.
The quote, " Up from the ashes come the roses of success" come to my mind.
Rubylou
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks a lot. Much appreciated. All best.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely ABC poem which reads well, makes sense and the subject matter is so interesting. The birth of a new star - happening all the time out there in outer space - awesome. Good read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
This is a lovely ABC poem which reads well, makes sense and the subject matter is so interesting. The birth of a new star - happening all the time out there in outer space - awesome. Good read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you so very much. Much appreciated. All best.
Comment from Kassa-Leigh
This is a great poem! I don't usually review short poems, but I had to comment on this one. I loved how you wrote it and it spoke to me like a whisper. Thank you for the good read, and good luck in the contest!
Cheryl-Lynette
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
This is a great poem! I don't usually review short poems, but I had to comment on this one. I loved how you wrote it and it spoke to me like a whisper. Thank you for the good read, and good luck in the contest!
Cheryl-Lynette
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks ever so much. Very appreciated. All best.
Comment from DR DIP
Nice accompanying photo for your quaint little 5 line verse written in the parameters of the writing prompt. Thanking for sharing and good luck
dip
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
Nice accompanying photo for your quaint little 5 line verse written in the parameters of the writing prompt. Thanking for sharing and good luck
dip
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks ever so much. Very appreciated. All the best.
Comment from LIJ Red
Creates the image of a meteor near sun rise, and satisfies the prompt with initial letters in alphabetical sequence. Should be a proper contest entry.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
Creates the image of a meteor near sun rise, and satisfies the prompt with initial letters in alphabetical sequence. Should be a proper contest entry.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. Very appreciated. All best.
Comment from sage17611
This poem has a very nice flow of words, I like the name of the poem and the description of the birth of a star. Good use of ABC prompts,and pictorial display. This is a very well written poem, although short. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
This poem has a very nice flow of words, I like the name of the poem and the description of the birth of a star. Good use of ABC prompts,and pictorial display. This is a very well written poem, although short. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks a lot. Much appreciated. All the best.
Comment from jusylee72
Pretty illustration and words in this ABC challenge. It is interesting and keeps my interest. I love shooting stars. I wish to see one soon and make a wish on it. Thank you.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
Pretty illustration and words in this ABC challenge. It is interesting and keeps my interest. I love shooting stars. I wish to see one soon and make a wish on it. Thank you.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks a lot. Much appreciated. All the best.
Comment from RYME4U
This free verse is well written and a new twist on the "shooting star " theory. You have presented it well, too. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
This free verse is well written and a new twist on the "shooting star " theory. You have presented it well, too. Nicely done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks a lot. Very much appreciated. All the best.