Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

A beautifully written ABC about stars. Very serene feeling. It is written in perfect form and I wish you well in the contest.

~~Teresa~~

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Teresa, So pleased that you liked it. all the best.

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Morning, Ulla,

So you're a star-watcher too? I enjoyed this poem of the night and new creation of a new star--a new life. This is a lovely metaphor for the poem's ending.

You've used enjambment well, thus allowing the poem to read more smoothly. The poem has a good feel to it. Your well chosen phrasing provides the reader with excellent visuals.

May I offer several suggestions for you to consider?

I stumbled just a tad in line one with the placement of 'I see'. I think it might be better if it began the line. I think of shooting stars and streaking light.
[I see a streaking light]

An excellent read this morning.

Ray

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Hi Ray, I most certainly am. I'm very pleased with your review and learning from it, well at least I hope so. Poetry is so new to me, and I never thought that I would ever try. But I'm fascinated. Also English is not my first language, but that's no excuse. May just explain when I write something odd at times. LOL. I am looking into your great suggestion and I see what you mean. I have learned so much from this site. All the best. Ulla:))

reply by mountainwriter49 on 02-May-2016

You're very welcome.
Ray

Comment from Rubylou

Excellent

What a great poem describing energy reinventing itself through the 'life of a star' cycle.
This is a powerful occurrence in the universe but works especially well as a metaphor for pushing through and going on in life after setbacks.
The quote, " Up from the ashes come the roses of success" come to my mind.
Rubylou

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks a lot. Much appreciated. All best.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

This is a lovely ABC poem which reads well, makes sense and the subject matter is so interesting. The birth of a new star - happening all the time out there in outer space - awesome. Good read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thank you so very much. Much appreciated. All best.

Comment from Kassa-Leigh

Excellent

This is a great poem! I don't usually review short poems, but I had to comment on this one. I loved how you wrote it and it spoke to me like a whisper. Thank you for the good read, and good luck in the contest!
Cheryl-Lynette

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks ever so much. Very appreciated. All best.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Nice accompanying photo for your quaint little 5 line verse written in the parameters of the writing prompt. Thanking for sharing and good luck

dip

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks ever so much. Very appreciated. All the best.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Creates the image of a meteor near sun rise, and satisfies the prompt with initial letters in alphabetical sequence. Should be a proper contest entry.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thank you so much. Very appreciated. All best.

Comment from sage17611

Excellent

This poem has a very nice flow of words, I like the name of the poem and the description of the birth of a star. Good use of ABC prompts,and pictorial display. This is a very well written poem, although short. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks a lot. Much appreciated. All the best.

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

Pretty illustration and words in this ABC challenge. It is interesting and keeps my interest. I love shooting stars. I wish to see one soon and make a wish on it. Thank you.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks a lot. Much appreciated. All the best.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This free verse is well written and a new twist on the "shooting star " theory. You have presented it well, too. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016

Thanks a lot. Very much appreciated. All the best.