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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello jusylee72,
Lovely piece of poetry meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme!
Well chosen words, having smooth and enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with nice rhyming scheme.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
Contest Winner!
CONGRATULATIONS!!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Hello jusylee72,
Lovely piece of poetry meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme!
Well chosen words, having smooth and enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with nice rhyming scheme.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
Contest Winner!
CONGRATULATIONS!!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I remember feeling this way when I was young. Now, I truly would never want to be with someone who didn't want me. Getting older does sometimes make us wiser.
Comment from scd41
Congratulations on your win! The topic jealousy has been described so deftly in your poem in simple and smooth flowing words. I liked most the frankness and human weakness in its dealing with jealousy. Without any hypocrisy, you have admitted to succumbing to it at times despite professing ideals.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Congratulations on your win! The topic jealousy has been described so deftly in your poem in simple and smooth flowing words. I liked most the frankness and human weakness in its dealing with jealousy. Without any hypocrisy, you have admitted to succumbing to it at times despite professing ideals.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I remember this feeling when I was younger. Now, I would never want to be with someone who didn't want me, Older does make us wiser.
Comment from John Parkin
Jealousy can be so ruinous in so many ways. Your poem describes the feelings of most everyone at one time or another. How we handle jealousy makes us the person that we become. It wasn't so much rhyming but your sentences flowed well and made it easy to read.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Jealousy can be so ruinous in so many ways. Your poem describes the feelings of most everyone at one time or another. How we handle jealousy makes us the person that we become. It wasn't so much rhyming but your sentences flowed well and made it easy to read.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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thank you, I remember feeling this way when I was young. Now I would never want to be with someone who didn't want me. Getting older does make us wiser.
Comment from c_lucas
Congratulations on your win. This shows the true elements of jealousy. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. It shows a very intimate view of the subject.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Congratulations on your win. This shows the true elements of jealousy. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. It shows a very intimate view of the subject.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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I remember how this felt when I was young. Now I would never want someone who didn't want me. We are wiser when we get older.
Comment from Gloria ....
An honourable win indeed, Judy. Your entire presentation is lovely even though it is about that most uncomfortable emotion--jealousy.
I very much enjoy your candor and honesty. The bravado also eventually does come true.
Super job with this!
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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An honourable win indeed, Judy. Your entire presentation is lovely even though it is about that most uncomfortable emotion--jealousy.
I very much enjoy your candor and honesty. The bravado also eventually does come true.
Super job with this!
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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Thank you Gloria, I remember how this felt when I was young. Now, I would never be with someone who didn't want me. We do get wiser with age.
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's great to see that you're now winning all sorts of different contests here, jusylee. I felt since the first day I read your writing that it was exceptional.
This little ditty is certainly no exception.
Coveting anything that belongs to someone else (otherwise known as jealousy, or the Green Eyed Monster), is a sin and should be avoided. It does us no good, it's a wasted emotion and a HUGE waste of energy.
Congratulations on yet another win.
Great work...
~Dean :}
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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It's great to see that you're now winning all sorts of different contests here, jusylee. I felt since the first day I read your writing that it was exceptional.
This little ditty is certainly no exception.
Coveting anything that belongs to someone else (otherwise known as jealousy, or the Green Eyed Monster), is a sin and should be avoided. It does us no good, it's a wasted emotion and a HUGE waste of energy.
Congratulations on yet another win.
Great work...
~Dean :}
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I am growing daily with the help of all the people here. About this poem., I remember feeling that way when I was young. Now, I would never want someone who didn't want me. We do get wiser with age.
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Well...most of us do.
You are more than welcome. :)
Comment from Dr. Nad
No time is a poem of wisdom that leaves its reader with mixed emotions. The wisdom comes when you share with us what you have no time for. You educate us on your reasons for declining to pursue the follies that so many slavishly adhere to. The sadness comes when you unveil a personal loss of the one you once nurtured and was cherished by. Your dogged determination to refuse bitterness, hatred and animosity show the depth of character that we all need to see displayed and wished we could embrace in our own lives. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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No time is a poem of wisdom that leaves its reader with mixed emotions. The wisdom comes when you share with us what you have no time for. You educate us on your reasons for declining to pursue the follies that so many slavishly adhere to. The sadness comes when you unveil a personal loss of the one you once nurtured and was cherished by. Your dogged determination to refuse bitterness, hatred and animosity show the depth of character that we all need to see displayed and wished we could embrace in our own lives. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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I remember feeling this way when I was young. Now, I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me. We do get wiser in old age.
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Here's to wiser, I just wish we'd stop getting older LOL.
Embrace the Love from above!
Comment from DonandVicki
I had to read your poem several times to get the full meaning from it. We can pretend that we are not hurt and angry but that doesn'e always work.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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I had to read your poem several times to get the full meaning from it. We can pretend that we are not hurt and angry but that doesn'e always work.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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I remember feeling this way when I was young.. Now, I would never want to be with someone who didn't want to be with me. We really do get wiser with age.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Well done. Very creative of you to fool the reader of your poem until the end when you come clean and admit your jealousy. Then the reader breathes deeply and sighs. He or She too is human. Since you won the contest you know you wrote a very good poem. I like the illustration you chose. And green is such a lovely color. LOL
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Well done. Very creative of you to fool the reader of your poem until the end when you come clean and admit your jealousy. Then the reader breathes deeply and sighs. He or She too is human. Since you won the contest you know you wrote a very good poem. I like the illustration you chose. And green is such a lovely color. LOL
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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I truly love green. I remember feeling this way when I was young, Now I would never want someone who didn't love me.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Congratulations! I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. Excellent use of words.The artwork also speaks to me.
Wishing you all the best--
Bill
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Congratulations! I think you did an outstanding job with this piece. Excellent use of words.The artwork also speaks to me.
Wishing you all the best--
Bill
Comment Written 25-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I remember feeling this way when I was young, now I would never want to be with someone who didn't want me.
