Another Fix, Another Poem
Acrostic32 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Mikey!
You weren't the first for once! BUT this was worth waiting on - except for the nits, it was lovely - can I say 'lovely'? it was a bit painful - but then, a lot of your writing is, isn't it?
I liked it.
A couple of things to look at?
1.) Acrostic (Potlatch) Challenge
2.)W ith blood injected(,) thoughts begin to seep
3.) R rejection, anguish, pain what shall I bleed
--> no second 'r', please
4.) D enied(,) my quest has fallen on deaf ears
5.) D eluded(,) I thought love or joy might call
6.) T he truth (is) the most hateful foe of all
Great *heartfelt* work!!!
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Mikey!
You weren't the first for once! BUT this was worth waiting on - except for the nits, it was lovely - can I say 'lovely'? it was a bit painful - but then, a lot of your writing is, isn't it?
I liked it.
A couple of things to look at?
1.) Acrostic (Potlatch) Challenge
2.)W ith blood injected(,) thoughts begin to seep
3.) R rejection, anguish, pain what shall I bleed
--> no second 'r', please
4.) D enied(,) my quest has fallen on deaf ears
5.) D eluded(,) I thought love or joy might call
6.) T he truth (is) the most hateful foe of all
Great *heartfelt* work!!!
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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Wow. Thanks so much Robyn. I got hung up in Google trying to download a picture. I was afraid to read it since I had no idea what I wrote. LOL I'm so relieved and happy you liked it. YAY! I fixed all of those things, thanks for making editing easy. :))
This is so much fun. I entered this in the site contest. That would crack me up if it got a mention! People would be PISSED! mikey
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But I would cheer for you!
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Aww. How sweet. I'm cheering for you now! mikey
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hehehe
my nefarious plan worked.
Comment from Gloria ....
What I like about your acrostic, Mav, is that it's incredibly deep. Yowza I can see why you write, because you'd better if you value your life.
Watch out for the waterfall!
Super job my dear and best wishes to you in the contest. This is a top contender in my humble opinion. :))
Gloria
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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What I like about your acrostic, Mav, is that it's incredibly deep. Yowza I can see why you write, because you'd better if you value your life.
Watch out for the waterfall!
Super job my dear and best wishes to you in the contest. This is a top contender in my humble opinion. :))
Gloria
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016
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I'm under the waterfall, but I don't seem to drown. I'm pleased you liked this and consider it worthy. Your opinion means quite a bit to me. For some reason Google won't download a picture. I got stuck there. Finally went to I.E. and got one. It's a conspiracy. The people attempting to turn my hair grey are involved. BASTARDS! I've foiled them so far. :))
Maverick
