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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great and sweet 5-7-5 poem and show the innocence of a little child. It is the most honest and perfect prayer I ever heard of. We pronounce prayer as one syllable, but the dictionary win of course.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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A great and sweet 5-7-5 poem and show the innocence of a little child. It is the most honest and perfect prayer I ever heard of. We pronounce prayer as one syllable, but the dictionary win of course.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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thank you so much, it is so simple, go to sleep at night , say thank you to god and then go look for him tomorroe.
Comment from Rubylou
Oh my, out of the mouths of babes.
Sometimes , no often times the words of a child unfiltered are wise beyond belief. We can learn so much if we just listen.
Great writing.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Oh my, out of the mouths of babes.
Sometimes , no often times the words of a child unfiltered are wise beyond belief. We can learn so much if we just listen.
Great writing.
Rubylou
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Thank you , why complicate it, just say good night to God and night and look for him in the morning. so simple
Comment from C.J. 16
A very good entry for the 5-7-5 contest. A sweet prayer from a child. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest. All the best.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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A very good entry for the 5-7-5 contest. A sweet prayer from a child. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest. All the best.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Thank you , I wish all of us would say goodbye and look for God when we woke up.
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Yes, I agree that would be nice. Enjoy the rest of the evening.
Linda
Comment from Marykelly
The image of child kneeling to say her prayers is very real in this poem and the innocence of a child makes the prayer profound. The simple words from the heart capture the essence of prayer.
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The image of child kneeling to say her prayers is very real in this poem and the innocence of a child makes the prayer profound. The simple words from the heart capture the essence of prayer.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I love that it is so simple. I wish adults looked for god every morning to run and say hi.
Comment from Sasha
This is lovely and oh, so precious. Marvelous 5-7-5 and superb illustration to go with it too. I enjoyed it immensely. What a lovely memory this is for you and thank you so much for sharing it with us.
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This is lovely and oh, so precious. Marvelous 5-7-5 and superb illustration to go with it too. I enjoyed it immensely. What a lovely memory this is for you and thank you so much for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I love that it is so simple. I wish adults looked for god every morning to run and say hi.
Comment from sage17611
Simple and cute, good use of syllables, nice flow with a good message. The picture depicts the theme of the poem nicely, good job, good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Simple and cute, good use of syllables, nice flow with a good message. The picture depicts the theme of the poem nicely, good job, good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I love that it is so simple. I wish adults looked for god every morning to run and say hi.
Comment from VaV-VOOM
Beautiful poem jusylee72, I love the picture also. Keep writing these beautiful poems, and thank you for sharing. Write On! VaV-VOOM!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Beautiful poem jusylee72, I love the picture also. Keep writing these beautiful poems, and thank you for sharing. Write On! VaV-VOOM!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I love the simplicity. Fun
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Your so welcome, VaV-VOOM!
Comment from tony bronk
This really is a very cute and sweet prayer/poem and I enjoyed it very much. I was something that you remembered the prayer this long! Have a happy day! Tony
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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This really is a very cute and sweet prayer/poem and I enjoyed it very much. I was something that you remembered the prayer this long! Have a happy day! Tony
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Pam was my older sister so the story came to me from my Mother. I loved it.
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Okay with the correction. Still loved it though!~
Comment from robyn corum
Jusylee,
This IS a precious story about a young child - they DO say the most amazing things sometimes, don't they?! *smile* Your interpretation works nicely, but I might caution you that some of us pronounce 'prayer' as one syllable. You might make a comment in your author's notes so there's no confusion. *smile* Good luck!
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Jusylee,
This IS a precious story about a young child - they DO say the most amazing things sometimes, don't they?! *smile* Your interpretation works nicely, but I might caution you that some of us pronounce 'prayer' as one syllable. You might make a comment in your author's notes so there's no confusion. *smile* Good luck!
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I appreciate that so much. I looked it up and in the dictionary it says it is two syllables so I went by that. I was questioning that also. Thank you for the idea in the authors notes.
Comment from Douglas Paul
It is sweet and sincere and innocent. You have to love those qualities in small children. Simple prayer may really be the best prayer
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It is sweet and sincere and innocent. You have to love those qualities in small children. Simple prayer may really be the best prayer
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Thank you , we do try to make life too complicated.
