Life's Observations and Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Lasting Friendship..."This is my prologue for the NaPoWriMo 2016 (30 Poe
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Comment from robyn corum
Sounds like you have been a very good friend to this somebody. *smile* They should feel very blessed to have you. I hope everything works out okay for them. Beautiful poem!
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Sounds like you have been a very good friend to this somebody. *smile* They should feel very blessed to have you. I hope everything works out okay for them. Beautiful poem!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your lovely review and comments, Robyn. Warmest regards ...
Comment from RYME4U
Well written and nicely presented. The simple couplet rhymes are very descriptive and the choice of illustration is in keeping with rthe "storm" theme. Great job
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Well written and nicely presented. The simple couplet rhymes are very descriptive and the choice of illustration is in keeping with rthe "storm" theme. Great job
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your lovely review and comments, RYME4U. Warmest regards ...
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
I agree with your statements in your author notes
and it's great to know you have such a good friend
that inspired this excellent entry.
I like how you have managed to have end rhymes
in your warm poem.
Linda
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Poet,
I agree with your statements in your author notes
and it's great to know you have such a good friend
that inspired this excellent entry.
I like how you have managed to have end rhymes
in your warm poem.
Linda
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Hi Linda. Thank you so much for your lovely review and generous ratings. Warmest regards ...
Comment from Janet Foor
Lasting friendship a rare commodity these days. You are most fortunate and so is your friend to share a friendship through thick and thin. Well done
Janet
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Lasting friendship a rare commodity these days. You are most fortunate and so is your friend to share a friendship through thick and thin. Well done
Janet
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. :o)
Comment from Grace_ET_0427
Oh, I like this poem a great deal. So much said in so few verses. And I like that you divided the lines into two separate couplets. If you had strung it all together in one four-line stanza, as might have looked a little more traditional, I think it would have felt crowded.
I've always appreciated the subtle irony and depth in the use of the phrase "weather the storm." It does verge on cliched, but again, I like the layers of meaning there ("storm" being a type or kind of "weather," or a symptom of a particular "weather" phenomenon) so I really don't think of it as a cliche.
One thought, and it has to do with the rhythm of the work. Lines 1, 2, and 4 each have eight syllables, and I love the flow of that pattern. Line 3 was the slight let-down for me because it only has seven syllables, and when I tried to read the poem out loud, I stumbled over that missing syllable. I'd love to see you try to find a different word or phrase for that third line that would bring you to eight syllables (so you have eight syllables in each line, respectively) AND that would still bring you in at the 25-word limit. It could be kind of a fun challenge. :)
Beautiful job!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Oh, I like this poem a great deal. So much said in so few verses. And I like that you divided the lines into two separate couplets. If you had strung it all together in one four-line stanza, as might have looked a little more traditional, I think it would have felt crowded.
I've always appreciated the subtle irony and depth in the use of the phrase "weather the storm." It does verge on cliched, but again, I like the layers of meaning there ("storm" being a type or kind of "weather," or a symptom of a particular "weather" phenomenon) so I really don't think of it as a cliche.
One thought, and it has to do with the rhythm of the work. Lines 1, 2, and 4 each have eight syllables, and I love the flow of that pattern. Line 3 was the slight let-down for me because it only has seven syllables, and when I tried to read the poem out loud, I stumbled over that missing syllable. I'd love to see you try to find a different word or phrase for that third line that would bring you to eight syllables (so you have eight syllables in each line, respectively) AND that would still bring you in at the 25-word limit. It could be kind of a fun challenge. :)
Beautiful job!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. Grace. I have taken your constructive advice aboard, but am finding it a little difficult to find a different sentence with the same number of words, but an extra syllable, without losing the feeling and emotion of the poem. However, if it comes to me (which sometimes it comes out of the blue (muse waking up?!)) ... But thank you for your great and honest review. It is much appreciated. Warmest regards :o)
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My pleasure, truly. I loved your poem very much, and I'm delighted to have been able to help. I look forward to reading more of your work!
Comment from Kazzawin
What a lovely accolade to a dear friend...
The promise to always be there is captured in so few words but is truly evident in your poem.
This is a friendship that will last as it has seen and lived through tough times and dark days!
Good entry to the prompt.....good luck with it : )
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What a lovely accolade to a dear friend...
The promise to always be there is captured in so few words but is truly evident in your poem.
This is a friendship that will last as it has seen and lived through tough times and dark days!
Good entry to the prompt.....good luck with it : )
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. :o)
Comment from jusylee72
Twenty five words of love and devotion to friends. I so believe this. I have such wonderful people in my life. I cherish each one. Thank you for putting it into words. Judy
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Twenty five words of love and devotion to friends. I so believe this. I have such wonderful people in my life. I cherish each one. Thank you for putting it into words. Judy
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. :o)
Comment from jmj123
nice poem ..short but saying so much ..the word choice is excellent, and the meaning comes out with clarity and one can see it in the mind
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nice poem ..short but saying so much ..the word choice is excellent, and the meaning comes out with clarity and one can see it in the mind
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. :o)
Comment from Loumon
Well done, 25 words chosen excellently, following the promot precisely. It flowed well and the descrptivesness of the poem helped in visualizing a lastingfriendship.
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Well done, 25 words chosen excellently, following the promot precisely. It flowed well and the descrptivesness of the poem helped in visualizing a lastingfriendship.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and generous six star rating., Loumon. Both are truly appreciated. Warmest regards - :o)
