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Comment from DonandVicki
I like the message that you put forth in this well constructed poetic verse. As you said there is gold at the end of the rainbow. well done.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I like the message that you put forth in this well constructed poetic verse. As you said there is gold at the end of the rainbow. well done.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I usually don't let life get to me, but the poem my son wrote was so beautiful and painful and it sent me back to those times. . Life is wonderful now, but every now and then I fall back into that chasm and have to fight my way back up. thank you so much for listening.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Anonymous Author, what a great way to not only enter a contest, but pay tribute to your son's touching words conveyed to you in his letter.
Killing two birds with one stone, so to speak.
Your free verse poem is very...emotionally driven, to say the very least. And, as I'm sure you're already well aware, free verse poetry is all the rage these days, so I imagine you'll do quite well with this in the contest.
Good luck...
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Well, Anonymous Author, what a great way to not only enter a contest, but pay tribute to your son's touching words conveyed to you in his letter.
Killing two birds with one stone, so to speak.
Your free verse poem is very...emotionally driven, to say the very least. And, as I'm sure you're already well aware, free verse poetry is all the rage these days, so I imagine you'll do quite well with this in the contest.
Good luck...
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I usually don't let life get to me, but the poem my son wrote was so beautiful and painful and it sent me back to those times. . Life is wonderful now, but every now and then I fall back into that chasm and have to fight my way back up. thank you so much for listening.
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I LIVE in that chasm...
You're welcome.
Comment from tony bronk
How tragic and how sad, but how damn real your poem is, and how deeply it touched my heart and soul...thank you for that. Very well written! Have a Happy day. I have to give you my last six stars. You deserve them like nobody else! Please pick me up as a fan after the contest...okay? Thank you. Tony
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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How tragic and how sad, but how damn real your poem is, and how deeply it touched my heart and soul...thank you for that. Very well written! Have a Happy day. I have to give you my last six stars. You deserve them like nobody else! Please pick me up as a fan after the contest...okay? Thank you. Tony
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I usually don't let life get to me, but the poem my son wrote was so beautiful and painful and it sent me back to those times. . Life is wonderful now, but every now and then I fall back into that chasm and have to fight my way back up. thank you so much for listening.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow! Such a beautiful poem and story written using the rainbow as a metaphor. I am deeply impressed. Your maturity shows through your outlook of feelings and life, in general. Then when I read the author's notes, I was even more impressed and touched by your heartfelt poem. I want to bookcase this poem for future viewing. I hope you win the contest. You are very deserving of it. Thanks for sharing a personal side of your life with me.
Peace, Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Wow! Such a beautiful poem and story written using the rainbow as a metaphor. I am deeply impressed. Your maturity shows through your outlook of feelings and life, in general. Then when I read the author's notes, I was even more impressed and touched by your heartfelt poem. I want to bookcase this poem for future viewing. I hope you win the contest. You are very deserving of it. Thanks for sharing a personal side of your life with me.
Peace, Jesse
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I usually don't let life get to me, but the poem my son wrote was so beautiful and painful and it sent me back to those times. . Life is wonderful now, but every now and then I fall back into that chasm and have to fight my way back up. thank you so much for listening.
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You have a wonderful and truthful relationship with your son. This is very valuable and I'm glad you realize that. I have no children, and as I get older I sometimes which I had. Cherish your son.
Jesse
Comment from sage17611
This is a beautiful illustration of the blossoms of new beginnings in life. I'm happy life became easier with a bright outlook. This is a well written poem, at first I was lost as to it's message, but it became clear towards the middle. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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This is a beautiful illustration of the blossoms of new beginnings in life. I'm happy life became easier with a bright outlook. This is a well written poem, at first I was lost as to it's message, but it became clear towards the middle. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you for reading it . Life is wonderful now.
Comment from robyn corum
I'm very sorry that you've suffered pain and loss in these recent months and I wish I could take that pain away, but of course, no one can. But remember, 'where there is much love, there is much pain.' you must have been very blessed and very loved. Remember that.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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I'm very sorry that you've suffered pain and loss in these recent months and I wish I could take that pain away, but of course, no one can. But remember, 'where there is much love, there is much pain.' you must have been very blessed and very loved. Remember that.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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You are right I am very loved. Life is wonderful now.
Comment from Janet Foor
We should all receive the Forgiveness Rainbow. I was happy to read that you heard from your son. I'm still waiting to hear from mine. That certainly would be a different form of gold.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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We should all receive the Forgiveness Rainbow. I was happy to read that you heard from your son. I'm still waiting to hear from mine. That certainly would be a different form of gold.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. this was a very healing writing.
Comment from Kazzawin
This is an absolutely stunning piece of work!
I can't imagine the pain of loving someone who injures, whether physically or mentally.....I can imagine less, bringing up a child in that 'storm'.
What I applaud is the seeing sense eventually to leave...
What I admire is the forgiveness in the letter...
What I am glad of is the colour returning to life ....
And what I absolutely love is the gold at the end of the rainbow........new start, new life!
Well worth the 6 stars.....you should do well in the contest: )
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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This is an absolutely stunning piece of work!
I can't imagine the pain of loving someone who injures, whether physically or mentally.....I can imagine less, bringing up a child in that 'storm'.
What I applaud is the seeing sense eventually to leave...
What I admire is the forgiveness in the letter...
What I am glad of is the colour returning to life ....
And what I absolutely love is the gold at the end of the rainbow........new start, new life!
Well worth the 6 stars.....you should do well in the contest: )
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. This was a very healing write.
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God Bless : )
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
This is a most unusual look at the topic and it's a very moving piece.
"All the colors dressed in black" as relating to an abusive relationship
is really a good analogy.
I started catching on to your theme when you mentioned getting a letter
from your son. Wow, that was really touching. I think you wrapped it
up so beautifully and poetically in the end where you liken each color
to a quality of life that found its way back into your life.
I like your line: "The earths atmosphere becomes the prism"
**You do need an apostrophe in (Earth's) - you might consider
capitalizing Earth as well.
I also love your ending using the phrase: "illustrated in shade's of life"
Yes, now you are really living. Congratulations on that and for
writing an outstanding entry.
Linda
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Poet,
This is a most unusual look at the topic and it's a very moving piece.
"All the colors dressed in black" as relating to an abusive relationship
is really a good analogy.
I started catching on to your theme when you mentioned getting a letter
from your son. Wow, that was really touching. I think you wrapped it
up so beautifully and poetically in the end where you liken each color
to a quality of life that found its way back into your life.
I like your line: "The earths atmosphere becomes the prism"
**You do need an apostrophe in (Earth's) - you might consider
capitalizing Earth as well.
I also love your ending using the phrase: "illustrated in shade's of life"
Yes, now you are really living. Congratulations on that and for
writing an outstanding entry.
Linda
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I so appreciate the editing and the comments. They truly touched me.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author In like how you say how gold is found at the end of the rainbow the way you son forgave you when you
He forgave me
for the childhood storm
I placed him in
Precious words of gold.
Gert
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Hello author In like how you say how gold is found at the end of the rainbow the way you son forgave you when you
He forgave me
for the childhood storm
I placed him in
Precious words of gold.
Gert
Gert
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much . This was an important and healing write for me.
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You are welcome.
Gert
