Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi Rhonda, another nice chapter. My only complaint is I didn't want it to end. I'll be anxiously awaiting the next post.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Melissa! As I was telling another reviewer, I took so much flack for making the last chapter so long, I cut this one down. Thanks for the encouragement!

Rhonda

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Rhonda, I like this chapter. What I like is the interaction between Becky and Tabby. The dialogue between them gives this chapter and story meaning. The two of them go inside and slip into that bedroom to find a beautiful room and then Maggie Smith. A good ghost or a bad one. Very well written, Rhonda. This is excellent so far!

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Jim. I'm glad you liked it, and equally as glad you are following the story. It's always good to get outside opinions!

Thanks again,
Rhonda

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Well, what a lovely turn of events, at last they have an ally. Really enjoying your story, Rhonda. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Great job, Giddy

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you, Giddy. I actually managed two chapters this week. It helps when I keep them shorter.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from CDyer

Excellent

I really like the set up for the presentation of the tale - being related as past events to an audience. It not only tells me at least these made it out okay, but returning to the presentation gives a bit of a break from the tension of action. Finally, a good paranormal entity. Enjoying it all!

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thanks for your comments, and support. Yes, they have found an ally. They will gather them here and there throughout the book. Not to have too much of a spoiler, but the present develops it's own issues. Story within a story. Thanks for sticking with it,
Rhonda

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

It's great always a good thunder and lightening storm while going through a haunted creepy house. it's a great write just love the story. as it goes along. It's really wonderfully written.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, William! I so appreciate your input!
Have a great day,
Rhonda

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Rhonda

= Well, always to a have nice, mild-mannered ghost, versus the conniving, evil kind. (*<*)
= An excellent chapter.
= My girlfriend's daughter, when she was about five, and we were talking on the phone one time, the subject turned to Casper the friendly ghost.
= She asked me if I knew why God made ghosts, and so, of course, I asked her why, because I didn't know.
= Codi said, "Because when their aren't enough angels to go around to help people, God made ghosts to help out the angels." (*<*)
= Who knew? Right? I love it.

=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)

=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Awww, I like her explanation, and it turns out, this ghost may fit the bill!

Thanks for your remarks, and for taking time to read,
Rhonda

Comment from Mike Stevens

Excellent

Another fine chapter, Rhonda, and these girls are more dare devilly than I would have been. If I opened the door to find a ghostly apparition, I'd need a case of Charmin!

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Yeah, me, too, Mike! And I'll bet I wouldn't just stand there and talk to her, either!

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Rhonda,

I do so enjoy this. There is a definite earnestness about the girls that is lacking in 'modern day' heroes. A pleasant throwback, you could say! LOL

Miltonville Middle School, welcome!." - delete the full stop.

"'I watched you leave for just a moment,' Becky began, 'and then turned to Tabby, who had opened her eyes and was looking a little shaken.

"'Are you okay?" I asked, brushing her hair away from her face. - have a look at the speech marks in this section.

Where did Nancy and Elizabeth go, anyway. - need a question mark in here.

"Help me to my feet, Becky. They can't fight her alone.' - opening and closing speech marks here are different forms.

slipped through the door and into a bedroom - bedroom.

"'My name is Maggie Smyth,' she replied in a voice that echoed across the ages." - I don't think you need the closing speech marks here.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you, so much for finding those flaws. I can't believe after reading through it so many times, I still missed some. Part of it is because I revise something and forget. Good thing for reviewers like you!

You're right about the heroes, and, I guess, partly why I'm writing this book. Thanks again,
Rhonda

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

I just finished the last one. This one was very good as well. Good twist with a ghost now on their side.

I found one minor thing:

"'Chasing the witch?' She repeated.' She should be lower case.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you, Russell, for the great review, and for pointing out the lower case "she". I had always been taught that you capitalize after a question mark, but have since been corrected. I try to remember, but forget now and then. Thanks so much,
Rhonda

Comment from MTF1955

Excellent

Your story flows so well. You make the reader cheer for the girls. What spunk they have. You've painted a great picture with your words. Mary

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 Comment Written 19-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2016

Thank you so much for the review and comments. I appreciate the feedback!
Rhonda