Musings Of My Muddled Mind
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Here You Still Are"NaPoWriMo April 2016
20 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
Some things just don't let go
when sent away
they discretely withdraw
but never quite walk
out the door.
In matters of the heart
they always come back
for more.
  |
Some things just don't let go
when sent away
they discretely withdraw
but never quite walk
out the door.
In matters of the heart
they always come back
for more.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from jusylee72
Awww. the heart still hasn't let go. In this short poem you told a long story and I understood every chapter in it. Thank you for using your words to tell it. Good Night.
|
Awww. the heart still hasn't let go. In this short poem you told a long story and I understood every chapter in it. Thank you for using your words to tell it. Good Night.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from Lulube
Now that's a problem, for them cause it's not their idea, not their timing, an inconvenience. But watch out for the "lines that can follow" anything to say to sway your decision, for the moment, until it is their idea, their timing and convenient. Then callous behavior regarding themselves only is what they will show you.
I'm not leaving cause I love you, and 3 weeks later gone after 9 yrs. not a single blade of grass was out of order that day, just up and left.
hoping this is not going to happen
lulube
|
Now that's a problem, for them cause it's not their idea, not their timing, an inconvenience. But watch out for the "lines that can follow" anything to say to sway your decision, for the moment, until it is their idea, their timing and convenient. Then callous behavior regarding themselves only is what they will show you.
I'm not leaving cause I love you, and 3 weeks later gone after 9 yrs. not a single blade of grass was out of order that day, just up and left.
hoping this is not going to happen
lulube
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
It's the memories no matter if they are good or bad, love or hate, they stay long after asked to leave.
Nicely done and a marvelous addition to your book
|
It's the memories no matter if they are good or bad, love or hate, they stay long after asked to leave.
Nicely done and a marvelous addition to your book
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion a tentative, well constructed rendering of one of life's primary battles - that between intimate partners, well expressed in fluid free verse and demanding in its impact...
|
In my opinion a tentative, well constructed rendering of one of life's primary battles - that between intimate partners, well expressed in fluid free verse and demanding in its impact...
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from Marykelly
This is a very short poem but it's message is quite profound. The speaker has asked someone to leave but cannot rid her heart of him. That somehow suggests he's still around because the heart is in charge.
|
This is a very short poem but it's message is quite profound. The speaker has asked someone to leave but cannot rid her heart of him. That somehow suggests he's still around because the heart is in charge.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from krys123
Hello Debbie;
-a very effective statement said is something and someone you love and a statement that is definitely thought-provoking.
-I just love the picture in the format you used for this poem it definitely is appropriate and relative to the concept and theme of your writing and helps with promoting the idea and setting the tone for the writing.
-thanks for sharing and posting them is the Lord be with you always.
Alex
|
Hello Debbie;
-a very effective statement said is something and someone you love and a statement that is definitely thought-provoking.
-I just love the picture in the format you used for this poem it definitely is appropriate and relative to the concept and theme of your writing and helps with promoting the idea and setting the tone for the writing.
-thanks for sharing and posting them is the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from lightink
Awww! A bit of a clash between the mind and the heart! They don't seem to agree on a number of things! There's something extremely sweet about this poem! Also, beautiful presentation!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
|
Awww! A bit of a clash between the mind and the heart! They don't seem to agree on a number of things! There's something extremely sweet about this poem! Also, beautiful presentation!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Debra!
This one is so simple yet impactful. Taken as a whole with the presentation of the artwork, you have created yet another unique work of art. I really feel this deserves a six, and it is my gift to you today. Lovely work!
Simply exceptional!
Kim
 |
Hi Debra!
This one is so simple yet impactful. Taken as a whole with the presentation of the artwork, you have created yet another unique work of art. I really feel this deserves a six, and it is my gift to you today. Lovely work!
Simply exceptional!
Kim
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
Comment from Douglas Paul
Your poem is thought-provoking. Your notes make it even more interesting. Switching off things, thoughts, worries, etc is hard for me to do too
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
|
Your poem is thought-provoking. Your notes make it even more interesting. Switching off things, thoughts, worries, etc is hard for me to do too
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2016
