Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

wow Marijke. what a great poem and so sad a split second and a life or lives changed forever you captured this essence very well with lovely rhyme and rhythm. Cheers Christineð???

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2016

Hi Chrissy. Yes, a bad decision, alcohol, or just an accident can make such a difference in the life of the victim and the extended family. Thank you for grasping the message behind this poem and your generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from bbowen6757

Excellent

Great imagery for your poem. It's unfortunate when a spouse has to assume the responsibility of caregiver for their partners. I know a lady who works full-time then has to come home and take over as caregiver of her husband. A very sad situation. I think you poem expresses this very well. I think the line "she knows there is no hope" expresses the feeling excellently.

Bobby

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Bobby, for your kind words and generous rating on this rather sad topic. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

How true it is that one split second can so utterly change your life and that of those around you. The second of my accident, my life forever changed, but once the grief passed, it has lead to to a richer life than I had known before. The first 3 years were incredibly difficult though. Today, I am happy and so very grateful for what I have. Taking care of a family member is incredibly hard. I worked with Alzheimer's patients for 10 years, they generally were much better off than their famiy members who suffered incredibly. A very good topic, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016

Hi Debbie, you are so right in your observations. I am pleased you are in a place where you are happy and grateful, and you are not living as a victim. Thanks for your review and warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for being inspired by a compelling story and sharing the result with us. I admired your recounting the tale in rhymed quatrains. The circularity and repeats for emphasis are quite effective. Sighs- Joan

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Hi Joan, thank you for your comments and observations and your generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Marijke!

This poem is poignant and important. It is so sad when a person's life changes in just that split second, with no recourse. Heart wrenching for both them and their loved ones. You have portrayed this feeling well in your poem. Excellent work!

We have made the halfway point today! Give yourself a round of applause! Yay!

Kim

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2016

Hi Kim, yeah... now for the other half! Thank you for your comments and observations and your generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Fiona. This is a wonderfully touching poem, well composed with an important theme. I enjoyed reading it. Also reminds me in some respects of Alzheimer's. It's a tough job for caregivers. They must hold something back for themselves or they burn out. Marilyn

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016

Hi Marilyn, thank you so much for your kind review and your comments. Yes... all carers need a medal. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Aussie

Excellent

Your choice of subject is close to home. Having nursed many folk staring at the wall. Young folk dive into unknown waters and even middle-aged take their life in their hands. Still, we have free will and choose which way to go. Your poem had a wonderful rhythm and rhyme to it. Thanks so much for sharing (I have a carer too.) Blessings XX

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016

Hi Kay, thank you so much for that review and your observations. One moment of madness, or a poor decision, and lives are ruined. I did dedicate the poem to all carers. Thanks for your generous rating. Warmest regards , Marijke :o)

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Marijke Well your poem certainly pulls one's heart strings reading your excellent pathos poem.

this part really got to me-

He watches her blankly
But he doesn't recall
That she is his sweetheart
Doesn't know her at all
Gert

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016

Thank you Gert, for your review and generous rating. Yes... a bad decision... Warmest regards, Marijke :

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

I wish I had a 6 to give you for the awesome and deeply moving poem but I am out so a virtual one is all I can offer. I have known several people with dementia and one with a severe brain injury and I could relate to your heartfelt words. Marvelous work with this. I saw nothing to change or correct. It is perfect just as it is.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Smurphgirlasha, for your virtual six. I have seen the results of a moment of madness, a bad choice gone horribly wrong. Thank you again and warmest regards, Marijke :o)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

One moment and one wrong choice can change your and your family's life forever. Be careful what you do when you with your friends it is not always fun for everyone.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2016

---

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2016

Thank you so much, Sandra, for your observations and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)