Comment from William Ross

Excellent

A nicely written free verse on the act of giving and helping the needy great write and read, good luck on this and have a great day.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks for the review aand comment
Jax

Comment from Marykelly

Excellent

This is a poem with a message that says money doesn't buy happiness. The speaker lists the things he does not have materially but rejoices in the things that are works of the Lord. The speaker's needs are filled by God and for him life is good even though he seems indigent.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016

Thanks for the thought full review.
Jax

Comment from jusylee72

Excellent

Rich is a word I now use freely. I have so much. My definition of rich is this. It is pay day tomorrow, all your bills have been payed and you have fifty dollars to blow on anything you want. I once was poor. Now I am rich.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Amen stay rich

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Your poem has good flow and rhyming.

It also has a valuable lesson, if people would only listen.

I enjoyed this very much,
and look forward to reading more of your work. After the contest, let me know who you are.

Thanks for sharing. 8-)

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Thanks for your positive comments. It means a lot

Comment from Zinnia48

Good

I really like the message of this poem, and also the way the rhythm and rhyme flow. It has a happy feel. However, there are some spelling issues--which impact how the poem reads. Sitin (sittin)/With out (without)"raged" means angry. I'm wondering if it's an angry bus or a 'ragged" bus? I hope to have the opportunity to read more of your work. Thanks for letting me be part of your process. Carolie

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016

Thanks for your read and comments I made the changes an appreciate the time you took to do the edit.

Comment from zekeziemann

Excellent

I think the first line should start,"I'm sittin'". Should it not? The theme is great and you make the reader remember that rich or poor the Lord leads.
Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks for the edit, I made the change. Thanks for the kind comments

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

bus only has one 's'

Lord should be consistently capitalized or lower case. You have it both ways.

A good poem about being homeless. It doesn't seem fair that some have so much and others so very little. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie

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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks for the edit. I made the changes. I guess I did not make the point i wanted to which was that if you were giving and had Christ in you heart you were far better of than the rich greedy folks that fill our society. Thanks so much for the read.

reply by dejohnsrld (Debbie) on 11-Apr-2016

No I got that point too. This can be read on several different levels, I think, my friend~DEbbie

reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks that pleases me

Comment from wilkswrites

Average

Interesting poem about a homeless victim who sees the blessing in being homeless. I imagine that a lot of homeless victims feel this that way.
You did a good job conveying the message.


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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2016

Thanks for the read. I guess I did not make my point. The point was that if you have Christ in you heart you are richer than all the greedy folks that fill our society. Stuff is not important nor is status. The soul lives on love, giving and forgiveness.

I read your BIO welcome to fanstory I hope you enjoy it