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Comment from Gone but not forgotten
Well done and chilling. Your descriptions of the devil gave me shivers. Angel Marissa listened and yet lived to tell the tale. She had more earthly work to do. Don't we all? Thanks.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Well done and chilling. Your descriptions of the devil gave me shivers. Angel Marissa listened and yet lived to tell the tale. She had more earthly work to do. Don't we all? Thanks.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Yes, I love your question, We have so much more earthly work to do.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow what an excellent piece and how you wove the piece into the picture.
Very well done free verse and I love the story of God overpowering Satans plan.
Very nicely done
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Wow what an excellent piece and how you wove the piece into the picture.
Very well done free verse and I love the story of God overpowering Satans plan.
Very nicely done
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. The picture is so beautiful but when I scrolled past it and came back to it I saw a face in the blue part of it.
Comment from teols2016
Very nice...good triumping over evil always brings warm feelings. I am just wondering if there is a point to your vertical spacing. With random lines not having a space in-between them, it seems somewhat uneven. I defininetely can't tell where one stanza ends and the next begins. Perhaps only put vertical spaces in-between stanzas. But the poem itself is well done.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Very nice...good triumping over evil always brings warm feelings. I am just wondering if there is a point to your vertical spacing. With random lines not having a space in-between them, it seems somewhat uneven. I defininetely can't tell where one stanza ends and the next begins. Perhaps only put vertical spaces in-between stanzas. But the poem itself is well done.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for your suggestions. I guess because it is in free verse. Which makes it stop after each thought. I will go back and definitely take your thoughts to heart.
Comment from mfowler
This is a very clever response to the hidden face in the swirly drawing. An angel knows the disguised face, knows his voice on the wind, rejects its call and moves on to God's work on earth. She hears the true God's call. Clever juxtaposition of God and Satan, creating a hopeful theme from an ostensibly evil one. Your verses flow nicely from one section to the next, making for a cohesive storyline without any wastage of words. Lovely use of free verse to express your interpretation. Best of luck in the vote.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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This is a very clever response to the hidden face in the swirly drawing. An angel knows the disguised face, knows his voice on the wind, rejects its call and moves on to God's work on earth. She hears the true God's call. Clever juxtaposition of God and Satan, creating a hopeful theme from an ostensibly evil one. Your verses flow nicely from one section to the next, making for a cohesive storyline without any wastage of words. Lovely use of free verse to express your interpretation. Best of luck in the vote.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I appreciate it. I have learned more on Fan Story than I ever learned in school.
Comment from c_lucas
The Devil's power can't compete with God's Will. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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The Devil's power can't compete with God's Will. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I agree with everything you said.
Comment from write hand blue
An interesting tale about that mythical creature the devil.
A poem to frighten children with. LOL.
Well written and good luck in the competition... ~Mel~
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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An interesting tale about that mythical creature the devil.
A poem to frighten children with. LOL.
Well written and good luck in the competition... ~Mel~
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. The picture is actually beautiful. I just saw a face in the blue part.
Comment from Slythytove2
How interesting to have gotten this poem from that picture. Looks like a spider to me, but then again I can't paint. Quite the gal this Marissa. Hope your friend is getting better.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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How interesting to have gotten this poem from that picture. Looks like a spider to me, but then again I can't paint. Quite the gal this Marissa. Hope your friend is getting better.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Thank you . The picture seemed to have a face in the part that is blue.
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I'll have to go look again. Thanks
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Poet,
Your interpretation of this artwork is truly inventive. I see lines lol or feathers, maybe. Such is the way with an ekphrastic piece, we each see something on our own. You've woven an interesting tale in your free verse poem. Kudos!
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Hi Poet,
Your interpretation of this artwork is truly inventive. I see lines lol or feathers, maybe. Such is the way with an ekphrastic piece, we each see something on our own. You've woven an interesting tale in your free verse poem. Kudos!
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Thank you, I think the picture is beautiful. It is the blue in it that gave me an impression of a face.
Comment from frogbook
This was an excellent work with powerful thoughts and a great story that was thought provoking. The line where he hissed her name was particularly chilling and effective. Really well done.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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This was an excellent work with powerful thoughts and a great story that was thought provoking. The line where he hissed her name was particularly chilling and effective. Really well done.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I find these picture challenges wonderful and fun to try.
Comment from Pantygynt
An ekphrastic contest on the work of our very own Angelheart. Is there any one of us who has not used here work at some stage. This is an interesting take on the picture. I can't see the evil in it but Marissa could and hear her name in the wind. Yes indeed this poem has done the picture proud and serves as a warning to all of us that most beauty is only skin deep and make conceal something worse in the subcutaeous layers.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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An ekphrastic contest on the work of our very own Angelheart. Is there any one of us who has not used here work at some stage. This is an interesting take on the picture. I can't see the evil in it but Marissa could and hear her name in the wind. Yes indeed this poem has done the picture proud and serves as a warning to all of us that most beauty is only skin deep and make conceal something worse in the subcutaeous layers.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2016
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Ok, new word for me EKPRASTIC. When I get to work this morning I will look it up. When I was scrolling through the pictures I stopped at this one. The blue part seemed to form a changing face from many angles. I just hope Angelheart, I have used her pictures too, realizes I also see the beauty in this.
