The Candidate
School board candidate seeks one man's vote.46 total reviews
Comment from Jonesy
So the point here is the power people have when it comes to politics. It isn't just about lower-level local elections, but what can happen when people get involved, or maybe even better when people don't.
The lack of participation, and knowledge, of our political system and those in it is why our politics is so screwed up right now. That happens on the local level, as suitably illustrated by this post, all the way up to the White House.
This post covers an important topic and was written exceedingly well.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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So the point here is the power people have when it comes to politics. It isn't just about lower-level local elections, but what can happen when people get involved, or maybe even better when people don't.
The lack of participation, and knowledge, of our political system and those in it is why our politics is so screwed up right now. That happens on the local level, as suitably illustrated by this post, all the way up to the White House.
This post covers an important topic and was written exceedingly well.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Jonesy, so much for sharing my story and your astute commentary on politics. I am pleased my theme came through. Rod
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A very welcome and refreshing take on this politics prompt. Well written and down to earth. Good tone to the piece.
"The man's sincere," I thought. - it may be an idea to differentiate the thought from speech by using the single marks ''.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Hi there,
A very welcome and refreshing take on this politics prompt. Well written and down to earth. Good tone to the piece.
"The man's sincere," I thought. - it may be an idea to differentiate the thought from speech by using the single marks ''.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Hi GMG. I appreciate your sharing my story and taking the time to comment. I hoped it would be different from most and am very pleased you enjoyed it. Rod
Comment from royowen
We have a caucus in Australia, which is an organisation that more or less adopts the labour party's members who take care of party affairs, the trouble I don't trust them, shadowy figures. Nicely written, our hero, I believe was a wise, who recognised and honest, hardworking candidate. It's true that important issues can be swallowed by the visible, well done, good writing. Rod, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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We have a caucus in Australia, which is an organisation that more or less adopts the labour party's members who take care of party affairs, the trouble I don't trust them, shadowy figures. Nicely written, our hero, I believe was a wise, who recognised and honest, hardworking candidate. It's true that important issues can be swallowed by the visible, well done, good writing. Rod, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Roy, for taking the time to share my story and tell me about Australia. I truly appreciate the kind praise. Rod
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My pleasure Rod
Comment from Word Junkie
Hello Rod,
This was an enjoyable read. It held my attention from first to last. Lines like, "His smile had moved into his eyes," draw the reader into the scene as they strengthen characterization. That bit at the end where Grayson points at the lawn as he speaks made me chuckle.
I did wonder about some of your hyphenated words, such as:
driveway
beltline
pigtails
Here, shouldn't "sir" be capitalized, as it's a pronoun used in place of a proper noun?
"And you, sir?"
I looked astral-physicist up at dictionary.com, and it suggested astrophysicist.
This is a story which will live on in memory. It makes my thoughts wander to the candicacy of JFK, when he and Bobby stood at factory gates shaking the hands of workers as they exited.
Well done, and write on!
Good luck in this contest,
Lana
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Hello Rod,
This was an enjoyable read. It held my attention from first to last. Lines like, "His smile had moved into his eyes," draw the reader into the scene as they strengthen characterization. That bit at the end where Grayson points at the lawn as he speaks made me chuckle.
I did wonder about some of your hyphenated words, such as:
driveway
beltline
pigtails
Here, shouldn't "sir" be capitalized, as it's a pronoun used in place of a proper noun?
"And you, sir?"
I looked astral-physicist up at dictionary.com, and it suggested astrophysicist.
This is a story which will live on in memory. It makes my thoughts wander to the candicacy of JFK, when he and Bobby stood at factory gates shaking the hands of workers as they exited.
Well done, and write on!
Good luck in this contest,
Lana
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story, praise it, and point out places where I made mistakes. I am especially pleased it evoked thoughts of JFK, one of my personal heroes. Rod
Comment from Sandisan
A well written story. Politics do start at the local level and the education
of our children is most important. I have met many politicians and it
sounds that from this story the best man got the vote. Good writing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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A well written story. Politics do start at the local level and the education
of our children is most important. I have met many politicians and it
sounds that from this story the best man got the vote. Good writing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for sharing my story and for understanding so well what I tried to convey.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Rody, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, what a lovely well written and refreshing change from all the presidential stories I have reviewed, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Hi Rody, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, what a lovely well written and refreshing change from all the presidential stories I have reviewed, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Eric, for the very kind praise of my story. Yes, This contest gave me a chance to voice concerns about a serious subject--educating our young. Glad you enjoyed it. Rod
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Gone but not forgotten
Enjoyed this story of grass roots, both in the lawn and in the political arena. Two likable characters, as well as the mentioned but never introduced Stephanie. A complex but brief story, well constructed and easy to care about. Thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Enjoyed this story of grass roots, both in the lawn and in the political arena. Two likable characters, as well as the mentioned but never introduced Stephanie. A complex but brief story, well constructed and easy to care about. Thank you.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for such a thoughtful and precise interpretation of my story.
Comment from DonandVicki
You started off using a small i, should be caped. Other than that it was a good story and a story that is refreshing compared to the other campains that we have to listen to.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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You started off using a small i, should be caped. Other than that it was a good story and a story that is refreshing compared to the other campains that we have to listen to.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you for sharing and catching my error. I truly appreciate your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Sis Cat
'Tis the presidential election season, but I am glad you shed light on local school board elections. It takes door-to-door, grassroots campaigning to win some elections. I enjoyed the clarity of your story and its clipped speech in the conversation between Grayson and Berke that sounds believable because I have heard conversations like this before from local politicians. Most of all, like you, I hope your story inspires people to vote in local elections.
The only spag is that your very first letter of your very first word in this story uses a lowercase "i" instead of a capital "I."
I found your story to be fresh and informative. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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'Tis the presidential election season, but I am glad you shed light on local school board elections. It takes door-to-door, grassroots campaigning to win some elections. I enjoyed the clarity of your story and its clipped speech in the conversation between Grayson and Berke that sounds believable because I have heard conversations like this before from local politicians. Most of all, like you, I hope your story inspires people to vote in local elections.
The only spag is that your very first letter of your very first word in this story uses a lowercase "i" instead of a capital "I."
I found your story to be fresh and informative. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much for sharing my story and your high praise. I am thrilled you found it both fresh and informative. Rod
Comment from Leineco
Not only is this a wonderful reminder that local government has a
profound effect on a community, and that we should be knowledgable
about the candidates (not to mention exercise our right to vote!) - but
it is also a well written story with nicely drawn and engaging characters :-)
Good job!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Not only is this a wonderful reminder that local government has a
profound effect on a community, and that we should be knowledgable
about the candidates (not to mention exercise our right to vote!) - but
it is also a well written story with nicely drawn and engaging characters :-)
Good job!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Leineco, for sharing my story and understanding my purpose so well. I truly appreciate your kind praise. Rod
