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Comment from CDyer
Sometimes I read something that is so unexpectedly good, I have to think there is no way that came simply from a picture or phrase prompt - there must be some personal history or true experience to draw from! This is one of those times. Absolutely inspired! I love the line
"He just became a sailor in search of knowledge." Very, very nice!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Sometimes I read something that is so unexpectedly good, I have to think there is no way that came simply from a picture or phrase prompt - there must be some personal history or true experience to draw from! This is one of those times. Absolutely inspired! I love the line
"He just became a sailor in search of knowledge." Very, very nice!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. When I first got the challenge photo, I had no idea what to write. After about an hour I thought Book Ship Moby Dick. All I knew about that was that it started with the line," Call me Ishmael." I googled Moby Dick vocabulary and found a list of words that I did not know the meaning of and then the story just started writing its self.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I am out of sixes.. and I am sorry, for your free verse, which is so like the unfolding of a great story, deserves every star. Moby Dick, for me, at first, was much like you have described. But until one understands who Ishmael was, it is futile to go on.
As your poem flows it's way through the building of an unlikely friendship, the enjoyment of reading, the word studies and gift of understanding, one can see the young boy and the wonderful mentor, the negro man.
Well done, a joy to read.
Best of luck in the contest.. I enjoy writing to picture challenges as well.
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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I am out of sixes.. and I am sorry, for your free verse, which is so like the unfolding of a great story, deserves every star. Moby Dick, for me, at first, was much like you have described. But until one understands who Ishmael was, it is futile to go on.
As your poem flows it's way through the building of an unlikely friendship, the enjoyment of reading, the word studies and gift of understanding, one can see the young boy and the wonderful mentor, the negro man.
Well done, a joy to read.
Best of luck in the contest.. I enjoy writing to picture challenges as well.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. When I first got the challenge photo, I had no idea what to write. After about an hour I thought Book Ship Moby Dick. All I knew about that was that it started with the line," Call me Ishmael." I googled Moby Dick vocabulary and found a list of words that I did not know the meaning of and then the story just started writing its self.
Comment from dmt1967
This story in a poem brought a tear to my eye. I love the story of a white boy and old Jimmy. The bridge between two worlds grows smaller without ignorance. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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This story in a poem brought a tear to my eye. I love the story of a white boy and old Jimmy. The bridge between two worlds grows smaller without ignorance. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. When I first got the challenge photo, I had no idea what to write. After about an hour I thought Book Ship Moby Dick. All I knew about that was that it started with the line," Call me Ishmael." I googled Moby Dick vocabulary and found a list of words that I did not know the meaning of and then the story just started writing its self.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, a wonderful story in a poem and excellent contest entry. Your poem is filled with adventure and vivid imagery ~ beautifully told and illustrated. These words pulled on my heartstrings:
Sail into the worlds you never knew
I will be with you"
(Sigh ~ sob ~ ahh)
Real writing. A poem that will survive the edge of time. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Hello author, a wonderful story in a poem and excellent contest entry. Your poem is filled with adventure and vivid imagery ~ beautifully told and illustrated. These words pulled on my heartstrings:
Sail into the worlds you never knew
I will be with you"
(Sigh ~ sob ~ ahh)
Real writing. A poem that will survive the edge of time. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. When I first got the challenge photo, I had no idea what to write. After about an hour I thought Book Ship Moby Dick. All I knew about that was that it started with the line," Call me Ishmael." I googled Moby Dick vocabulary and found a list of words that I did not know the meaning of and then the story just started writing its self.
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How the poem came to be is as wonderful as the poem. I like the idea of using the internet to enhances our writing abilities. I also think that as writers we should always try to improve our vocabulary; thus imagery. LateBloomer
Comment from royowen
What a lovely "story in a free verse poem" beautifully expressed, in articulate, expressive, progressively and philosophically heartwarming story of an old negro who took a boy in hand and taught him how to read and seek wisdom, and in turn, taught his, well done, lovely story, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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What a lovely "story in a free verse poem" beautifully expressed, in articulate, expressive, progressively and philosophically heartwarming story of an old negro who took a boy in hand and taught him how to read and seek wisdom, and in turn, taught his, well done, lovely story, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. When I first got the challenge photo, I had no idea what to write. After about an hour I thought Book Ship Moby Dick. All I knew about that was that it started with the line," Call me Ishmael." I googled Moby Dick vocabulary and found a list of words that I did not know the meaning of and then the story just started writing its self.
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Well done,
Comment from Chris Walker
This was an enjoyable read, your free verse tells a story and feels very close to being prose. I love how you intermingled the tale of Melville's tale of Moby Dick into this piece. Good luck in the contest. Chris
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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This was an enjoyable read, your free verse tells a story and feels very close to being prose. I love how you intermingled the tale of Melville's tale of Moby Dick into this piece. Good luck in the contest. Chris
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. I truly enjoyed this challenge and it was a challenge.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
This is a great entry for this contest. You have told a wonderful story. Excellent use of words and a smooth flow. The picture is appropriate for the theme of the poem. Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you the best,
Bill
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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This is a great entry for this contest. You have told a wonderful story. Excellent use of words and a smooth flow. The picture is appropriate for the theme of the poem. Good luck in the contest.
Wishing you the best,
Bill
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. When I first got the picture I had no idea where to go with it. But eventually i made a connection.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow! I am entering the contest but I know you are going to win.
This poem is amazing and it gives me goosebumps. Beautiful poem about the power of words, knowledge, prejudice, and love. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Wow! I am entering the contest but I know you are going to win.
This poem is amazing and it gives me goosebumps. Beautiful poem about the power of words, knowledge, prejudice, and love. Great job!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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thank you so much. When I first got my picture I had no idea how to make a connection to it. It truly frustrated me. But then I thought. Book , ship Moby Dick and research it and went from there. By the way it is true the words in Moby dick are a vocabulary lesson in themselves.
Comment from Mastery
Excellent entry, Judy. I loved this from top to botom...especially these lines:
"Here unlocks the world,
word by word,
dream by dream.
Sail into the worlds you never knew
I will be with you"
Bravo! good luck in the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Excellent entry, Judy. I loved this from top to botom...especially these lines:
"Here unlocks the world,
word by word,
dream by dream.
Sail into the worlds you never knew
I will be with you"
Bravo! good luck in the contest. Bob
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. I learned so much writing this.
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi anon,
This is an exceptional free verse poem that captivated me from beginning to end which is saying a lot. Thanks for sharing this with us and I wish you all the best in the contest. Great work! R
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Hi anon,
This is an exceptional free verse poem that captivated me from beginning to end which is saying a lot. Thanks for sharing this with us and I wish you all the best in the contest. Great work! R
Comment Written 06-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much. It was such a challenge. When I got the picture from the contest I felt no connection to it. but then I though book, ship. Moby
Dick and the story wrote itself.
