Life's Observations and Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "She walks alone"This is my prologue for the NaPoWriMo 2016 (30 Poe
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Comment from William Ross
This is really great, great story, great rhyming and rhythm. very well done. a wonderful read with a great meaning. thanks for the share
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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This is really great, great story, great rhyming and rhythm. very well done. a wonderful read with a great meaning. thanks for the share
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, William, for those kind comments and your lovely string of shining stars. They are greatly appreciated. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is such a sad problem in our society where the elderly are left alone to suffer and die. Native Americans value their elders and this doesn't happen because the rest of the tribe surrounds and supports them, valuing their wisdom. Another well written poem, my friend~Debbie
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This is such a sad problem in our society where the elderly are left alone to suffer and die. Native Americans value their elders and this doesn't happen because the rest of the tribe surrounds and supports them, valuing their wisdom. Another well written poem, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, Debbie for those kind comments and your lovely string of shining stars. They are greatly appreciated. Yes, a sad problem, and I agree, Native Americans do it right. Why can't we? Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from foxangie123
This is just stunningly gorgeous from top to bottom. This lifts a spirit so high they can feel as if they are touching Heaven. Wow. Keep these coming..
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This is just stunningly gorgeous from top to bottom. This lifts a spirit so high they can feel as if they are touching Heaven. Wow. Keep these coming..
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, foxangie, for those kind comments and your lovely string of shining stars. They are greatly appreciated. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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It is the truth for real:) xo
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello dear friend who has returned to FS! It is wonderful to be back in touch. I'm not often on FS... took a couple years break and have come back again just lately.
Your poem is great. The message in it is so real to me because for the last couple of months I have been looking after a sweet little old lady who is 98 years old... she is frail and forgetful but well loved and well provided for so she is one of the few that age who are so lucky. Nevertheless I am greatly relieved that today is my last day here in Victoria British Columbia Canada and I will be flying home to family and friends tomorrow. Thanks for sharing your wise words which are put together so beautifully. Big hugs, Aggie (W ^-^)
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Hello dear friend who has returned to FS! It is wonderful to be back in touch. I'm not often on FS... took a couple years break and have come back again just lately.
Your poem is great. The message in it is so real to me because for the last couple of months I have been looking after a sweet little old lady who is 98 years old... she is frail and forgetful but well loved and well provided for so she is one of the few that age who are so lucky. Nevertheless I am greatly relieved that today is my last day here in Victoria British Columbia Canada and I will be flying home to family and friends tomorrow. Thanks for sharing your wise words which are put together so beautifully. Big hugs, Aggie (W ^-^)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Hello Aggie, how wonderful to hear from you. I wasn't sure if you were still here. So many have left (unfortunately some have passed), but it has been wonderful to catch up with so many 'old friends'. Thank you, my friend, for your very kind and generous rating on this rather sad situation. It is a fact that so many people end up dying of a broken heart. Have a safe trip home tomorrow, Aggie, and I hope that I will hear from you more often - both as a writer/author/poet and a reviewer. Warmest regards and safe journey, Marijke :o)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is sad and an all true happening everywhere. It is also written with good rhyme and flow. I really like the picture of the lone flower, too. How appropriate.
The blackground adds a solemn note to your words.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
[idea: yes, I have 1 every blue moon--I would skip at least 1 line down at the beginning and 1 or more at the end to kind of frame your poem. Then it does not have that last line resting on the text box. I do this all the time. I understand you may not want to do this. So, file this in file 13=trash].
Good job and thanks for sharing and caring.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Your poem is sad and an all true happening everywhere. It is also written with good rhyme and flow. I really like the picture of the lone flower, too. How appropriate.
The blackground adds a solemn note to your words.
Good job and thanks for sharing.
[idea: yes, I have 1 every blue moon--I would skip at least 1 line down at the beginning and 1 or more at the end to kind of frame your poem. Then it does not have that last line resting on the text box. I do this all the time. I understand you may not want to do this. So, file this in file 13=trash].
Good job and thanks for sharing and caring.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, jannypan, for your kind review and your generous rating on this rather sad poem. Also thank you for your excellent advice about the line-spaces, have done this, and it looks much better. No advice is trash! Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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I looked again. It looks SUPER. I do that on all my poems. Jan
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xxxxx :o) M
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A very good piece you have written here. The language is simple and stripped of rhetoric which makes it all the more powerful. A sad but true commentary.
All the best
GMG
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Hi there,
A very good piece you have written here. The language is simple and stripped of rhetoric which makes it all the more powerful. A sad but true commentary.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Hi GMG (can I call you that?) Thank you for your kind and generous review on this rather sad, and as you said, true poem. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a very emotional read with the words you've used, the story you've told and a particularly poignant final verse -
Jack I'm coming home tonight - leaves me with goosebumps.
Very well done, a lovely read.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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This is a very emotional read with the words you've used, the story you've told and a particularly poignant final verse -
Jack I'm coming home tonight - leaves me with goosebumps.
Very well done, a lovely read.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Hi Pearl. Thank you so much for your kind and generous review on this rather sad poem. I appreciate your comments and 'goosebumps', and your very generous six stars. Much appreciated. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Douglas Paul
I think you captured the loneliness and despair of an older surviving spouse very well in this poem. Things do changes as we age and hopes and dreams become the past. Well done, Marijke
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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I think you captured the loneliness and despair of an older surviving spouse very well in this poem. Things do changes as we age and hopes and dreams become the past. Well done, Marijke
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
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Hi DP. Thank you so much for your kind and generous review on this rather sad poem. I appreciate your comments and feedback. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from dmt1967
This is a sad poem. I think it is sad when one couple member leaves the other behind and you have captured that sadness in your poem. I liked it very much and thank you for sharing.
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This is a sad poem. I think it is sad when one couple member leaves the other behind and you have captured that sadness in your poem. I liked it very much and thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2016
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Hi dmt1967. Thank you so much for your kind and generous review on this rather sad poem. I appreciate your comments and feedback. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
