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Poems by Michael

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Comment from w.j.debi
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Wow. Life is fraught with much danger ... The powerful encounterd by the gentle innocence confronts the crisis and can be tamed, at least for a moment.

I like how you bring the thoughts full circle and end as you began with the rustling wind.

The picture is amazing.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2016
    woo woo well thank you Deb...-smile-
    ah its a nice thought...but how do you get people to think right. thank you Maam. love Michael
Comment from Gloria ....
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What a gentle as a bear wind post, Michael. I am taking it this is your contribution to the Potlatch. May we add your name to list of wonderful participants?

I love everything about this post and your opening is a brilliant lead in to a thunderous prophecy.

Paints by numbers is a perfect way to describe the human condition.

Well, well done my friend. This is gem all cut and polished. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
    well...I didn't want to brag...but...go ahead...I dont care. ...ahhaha...ah just didn't want you guys thinking I was scared. yes maam...this is my contribution. please forward my trophy and any award money as soon as possible...-headwag- big love Michael
Comment from l.raven
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Hi Michael,very well written...I think for me... these words are some of your best...and it is amazing how an animal will surrender to a child...their innocents shows no fear....I love your poem...unique to your style...and a great video...your picture is so very touching...nicely written...love you Linda

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
    well hey there good looking...-smile-
    ah perhaps...I notice its not working out that way in Sweden.
    we'll see what the wind rustles next. ah whatever's in my head comes out in poetry mine...-wink- love you michael
reply by l.raven on 03-Apr-2016
    HI Handsome...it truly is getting scary...people better wake up before it's to late...if it isn't all ready...sigh...love ya xxoo
Comment from ~Dovey
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Hi Michael,

I really liked your analogy of the wind. These stanzas are especially thought provoking and I loved how they tie in to that perfect picture you chose for illustration:

soft spoken unexpected...
rustles the wind breathless
gentle as babies reach

to stroke bear dangerous
comfort in genuine care for grizzly
hushes growling fear

Your allusion to the Syrian refugee crisis adds a whole new level of depth. This is an excellent free verse poem. Thanks for including the grizzly :)

Kim

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 Comment Written 02-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
    -smile-...ah thanks Kim. I wrote this in three seconds flat...so....lol...ahahaha.......I dont perform well under pressure....until I warm up...hurry hug me...-armsout-....love Michael
reply by ~Dovey on 02-Apr-2016
    that was a shameless ploy for a *Hug* lol
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2016
    well I've heard i'm like that...-smile-