Comment from krys123

Excellent

Hello Debra;
-I really enjoyed your very interesting written format for rhythmic meter and your formatted set up which I concluded to reading your author's notes.
-your rhythmic rhyming each of your rhyming words were contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each of your lines therefore making your rhythm to flow smoothly. And none of your rhymes were forced nor labored which was also helpful.
-I found a reading your writing had a very great cadence, timing and tempo which made the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
- your presentation with a very colorful sepia lettering with a black background
was done very well and your picture was absolutely appropriate and relative to the concept and theme of your writing.
- man wish you good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Hi Alex :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

Looks like you are off to good start, This is an ambitious project. And as you say, life interrupts the creative process. I wish you well and will keep an eye out for your poems, Debra

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Hi Douglas :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem for your book. The lines flow well and the format seems perfect for your words. Good artwork to support your words, too. Good job and thanks for sharing.

[did you not create a book? Look at the contest page where the entries etc are and read the threads].

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 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Hi Jan :) Thank you for your great feedback. I just created the book (probably whilst you were writing your review!) and added this poem as the prologue....Hopefully I've done it right! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)

Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow

Excellent

Oh you did a great job with that Dorsimbra, so proud of you, so glad you did the form again. Wonderful. I think you have to create a book to house these in, yes? I think so, part of the contest rules, so this should be the prologue, the first chapter would actually start tomorrow.

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 Comment Written 31-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Hello :) Thank you so much for your encouragement and you lovely feedback! I loved the form and I thought the prologue for this challenge would be the perfect time to use it again because of the mix of forms. Just created my book and added the Dorsimbra as the prologue, so I think I'm on the right track to start tomorrow! Thanks again, I appreciate you :) Kindest regards, Debra