Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

I can see why you won this particular contest,
your words artfully tell a tale that pulls the
reader in immediately and artistically you
lay out a scenario that is so poignant at
the end as you artistically tell in poetic
form what grief can do to one
Well done

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

Thank you so much. I have only been on Fan Story for about 2 weeks. You all have treated with so much respect. I love the honest reviews, My punctuation is getting so much better from all of your comments. And I have received so much support for my sadness. It's been a tough year. I am an optimist and things are getting better I just am missing two important and loving people who blessed my life for a short time. Thank you. You obviously care.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

As an expression and outpouring of grief, this poem is a masterpiece. It builds, almost casually towards its finale, the desperate throwing of the shoe - that metaphor within us all, of casting things away from us in anger when we can no longer handle despair.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

Thank you so much. I have received so much support from Fan Story Reviewers. I am doing so much better. I still cry but the tears are cleansing tears.

Comment from babyross

Excellent

I relate deeply with this write having lost four close sisters, mom, dad, great nieces and I could go on, all in a few years apart. It's not easy pulling yourself back together. I do pray all is well for you now and that you've found peace in your heart.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

I have come a long ways and am getting better every day. I think it is important to express how you truly feel and not just act like everything is ok. I am an optimist. I have a wonderful family and job ( I teach Choir at Taft High School) and life is good. It is just missing some people i love. Thank you so much for all the support from Fan Story. You all are wonderful.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Congratulation on winning the contest. This is a heartbreaking story. You have expressed in understandable detail the grief you endure. Very well done. My deepest sympathy for your loss.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

Thank you, so many Fan Story writers have written me and helped me through this. Thank you so much.

reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016

Comment from Judvan2

Exceptional

I have to tell you I am sitting here crying after reading your poem. Its beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing it. I identify with it completely. Thank you.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

Now I am crying. It has helped me so much to write this and to not pretend that everything is ok. I truly am doing well and part of that is because Fan Story allows me to tell my story. I so appreciate your words.

Comment from boxergirl

Exceptional

Wow...just wow...I was so touched by your story poem and the voice I could hear as I read each line...very emotive. Sorry for your losses. Hopefully you have found a place here to continue writing. I know I have. :-)

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

You touch my heart with your words. I am learning so much about my self through fan story website. I look forward to getting to know you and your writings.

Comment from bbowen6757

Exceptional

Wow! This is a GREAT poem! Not sure if you wrote it from life experience or empathy, but you did a terrific job with it. I could feel the frustration in it.

Bobby

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

Thank you so much. It has been a very hard year and the words just poured out of me. It is healing to write and to know that others have felt the frustration of grief . all of you are a gift to me. Thank you for the 6 star rating. it means the world to me.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a great one for the feeling poetry. I could truly feel your emotions in this.

Good luck to you in the contest.

Teresa

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

Thank you so much. It has been a hard year but each day gets better. I am an optimist but I think we should talk in truth when we are angry and sad.

reply by TAB_that's me on 30-Mar-2016

Talking definitely helps. I'm glad you are doing better. I just voted for your poem. It by far had the most emotion in it. I don't know who you are right now but if you need someone to talk to just pm me:)

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This poem about grief is so saight-forward and honest that I found myself FEELING the frustration and the bitterness you do/did. The crescendo builds until we, like you, are throwing that shoe. You earned my vote easily.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

Thank you so much. I needed to write it so that I could let go of it. I am so much better now. The tears sometimes still come but they are cleansing tears.

Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel

Exceptional

First, although this is supposed to be a review, I have to start by telling you how very sorry I am that you have had to face these losses. Your words here very aptly reflect your hurt and bewilderment. You bravely show that ongoing struggle against the need to continue after a loved one has stopped. Well done. I wish you the best, not only for this contest, but for all that life has waiting for you. - CtVR

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016

I truly am healing and part of it is because of the people who are willing to listen to me on this fan story site. I have received so much kindness and strength from many of you. I love the honesty as we help each other grow in our writing. The tears are fewer and the ones that are shed now are healing tears. Thank you so much