To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Rosary "Poems by Michael
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Comment from royowen
Next thing I'll see is you doing rhyming rhythmic poetry Michael, heh heh, God forbid. I'm really enjoying your poetic heart. Such genuine poignancy piercing the heart of the one reading your work. The fountain of life, the Crimson rush that opens Heaven's gates to those washed in its cleansing stream, well done, Michael, excellent scribing, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Next thing I'll see is you doing rhyming rhythmic poetry Michael, heh heh, God forbid. I'm really enjoying your poetic heart. Such genuine poignancy piercing the heart of the one reading your work. The fountain of life, the Crimson rush that opens Heaven's gates to those washed in its cleansing stream, well done, Michael, excellent scribing, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Thank you Sir...-smile-...ha...ah I wouldn't hold my breath. I'm a sold free flower Roy. I'm just not comfortable on the bus. haha...thanks again. love to you. michael
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Well done Michael, ha ha.
Comment from Ginger Banks
The poem has an interesting feel of both of searching and finding, of what I am unsure; is this a bad thing? No, because sometimes the poem is just an expression of the author's thoughts or feelings as they come, not always making sense. I'm not sure how the song, the woman's almost naked breast laid bare in public, with the nipple showing, has anything to do with a person's sanctity or of the Holiness of Christ, or even that of Mary, his mother.
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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The poem has an interesting feel of both of searching and finding, of what I am unsure; is this a bad thing? No, because sometimes the poem is just an expression of the author's thoughts or feelings as they come, not always making sense. I'm not sure how the song, the woman's almost naked breast laid bare in public, with the nipple showing, has anything to do with a person's sanctity or of the Holiness of Christ, or even that of Mary, his mother.
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Well your rating Ginger has a feel of disrespect.....and I'm wondering why. As you've said sometimes poetry is just the expression of the authors thoughts.....this is a prayer of mine...,holy to me. I picked the video because of the song....I wrote this listening. The woman's breast is an incidental extra. Nothing to be ashamed of....
Comment from Domino 2
Very sexy artwork, Michael - so much so, it was an effort to scroll up to your words. ;-)
More structured free verse stanzas than usual from you.
I 'hope', too.
I THINK you're saying that youth at its best and most sexually active is equivalent to Heaven. I may be wrong, but I like my own interpretation. ;-)
Lots of alliteration and assonance, particularly of, 's', for extra depth and interest.
Thought-provoking as ever from your unique and talented pen.
Best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Very sexy artwork, Michael - so much so, it was an effort to scroll up to your words. ;-)
More structured free verse stanzas than usual from you.
I 'hope', too.
I THINK you're saying that youth at its best and most sexually active is equivalent to Heaven. I may be wrong, but I like my own interpretation. ;-)
Lots of alliteration and assonance, particularly of, 's', for extra depth and interest.
Thought-provoking as ever from your unique and talented pen.
Best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Hey Ray...-smile-
no this surpasses sexual fulfillment ...I'm talking Holy love.
equated to Jesus. love to you....Michael
Comment from choice
This poem has a strong flow of words and excellent imagery. The structure suits the language used well and the content creates a strong picture.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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This poem has a strong flow of words and excellent imagery. The structure suits the language used well and the content creates a strong picture.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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I thank you very much...glad you enjoyed. love to you...Michael
Comment from c_lucas
The savior will give us the strength to live through our darkest days. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, makin for a very good imagery.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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The savior will give us the strength to live through our darkest days. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, makin for a very good imagery.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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Hey Charlie...-smile-
that He does....appreciate you. love michael
Comment from TPAC
Give you this must a different way to say I believe. Words compelling in held structured faith conceptions reflective of Text held virtues. A true given thought to consider.
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Give you this must a different way to say I believe. Words compelling in held structured faith conceptions reflective of Text held virtues. A true given thought to consider.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
Comment from Kingsrookviii
I love this and think it is exceptionally well written. I admire the purposeful use of book ending the poem by having the first and last stanzas the same. The rosary is sacred, but, my God as a kid I thought they had no end! LOL Seriously. Also, your hallmark cadence is a perfect fit here. Stunning poem and one for the ages. Take care. Bruce.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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I love this and think it is exceptionally well written. I admire the purposeful use of book ending the poem by having the first and last stanzas the same. The rosary is sacred, but, my God as a kid I thought they had no end! LOL Seriously. Also, your hallmark cadence is a perfect fit here. Stunning poem and one for the ages. Take care. Bruce.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Hey Bruce...-smile-
good to see you Bro. ah thanks man. yea yea I went to Catholic school for a lil' while...then I escaped one day at recess. started going to public school. and understand the ah comparison , the identifying with....thats why I wrote it that way. but its really..."whatever" it or who is that you honor. and that Brother is the real of it. appreciate you Bruce. love Michael
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A beautifully written statement of your faith, my friend. I like the repetition of the last line of the first stanza repeated as the last line of the poem. Well-penned, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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A beautifully written statement of your faith, my friend. I like the repetition of the last line of the first stanza repeated as the last line of the poem. Well-penned, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Hi Deb...-smile-...yes....I do...I've lived it through fruition before...I know its possible. -smile-....ah thank you Dear...glad you enjoyed. love to you...michael
Comment from Leineco
like the rosary beads
I grew up with
one by one
my fingers and heart
slide and navigate
along this path of faith
Our Father, who art...
Holy Mary, mother of...
hallowed memory
sanctity and harmony
intertwined
as covenant
born of man
ordained a soul
and mind's free will
an anchor cast
in threaded knots
blazed a path
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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like the rosary beads
I grew up with
one by one
my fingers and heart
slide and navigate
along this path of faith
Our Father, who art...
Holy Mary, mother of...
hallowed memory
sanctity and harmony
intertwined
as covenant
born of man
ordained a soul
and mind's free will
an anchor cast
in threaded knots
blazed a path
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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yes Maam...as I remember it....they establish a legitimate fear of God at a very early age. Going to church can be a life or death experience. ...o yea....and drink to all that you said. love to you Beautiful...Michael
Comment from johnwilson
This is worth many stars and I only have 5 left. My take...this is absolutely flawless, haunting and the song backs it up exquisitely. I felt such powerful emotions as I read the poem, then listened to the song rereading it again. "Cross my heart...hope" is so true. You are a true poet of the first order!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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This is worth many stars and I only have 5 left. My take...this is absolutely flawless, haunting and the song backs it up exquisitely. I felt such powerful emotions as I read the poem, then listened to the song rereading it again. "Cross my heart...hope" is so true. You are a true poet of the first order!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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yes....when I wrote it I felt it. still do. -smile-...thank you very much John. really appreciate you saying that. love to you. michael
