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Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. This is a beautiful and well-written poem. After reading your notes I can see where your inspiration was coming from. I am sorry for your loss, it is hard to lose a mother at any time. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Excellent. This is a beautiful and well-written poem. After reading your notes I can see where your inspiration was coming from. I am sorry for your loss, it is hard to lose a mother at any time. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much for the review. I am happy to say I won the contest. A first for me. This Fanstory site has become a blessing and I truly want to get to know you and your writing too. It is such a gift to be our true selves.
Comment from Brewster
The picture, the content, the no grammer, the style, the honesty, all worthy of six stars. Everything fitted together so well. ******stars. Congrats!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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The picture, the content, the no grammer, the style, the honesty, all worthy of six stars. Everything fitted together so well. ******stars. Congrats!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much. I am happy to say that I won the contest. That was a first for me. This Fanstory site is becoming a good friend to me. I truly want to read your writing too. We get to be ourselves. I love that.
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So glad won the Contest. Nothing like winning to boost the old writing spirit.
Comment from William Ross
Yeah, very good and nicely written good rhyming and rhythm a great read with some good meaning. good luck on this and enjoy the Easter Holiday.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Yeah, very good and nicely written good rhyming and rhythm a great read with some good meaning. good luck on this and enjoy the Easter Holiday.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much, it was therapy at it's best to write it. Thank you for taking the time to help me.
Comment from Lancer1979
It was my pleasure to read and to listen to what you have written here. I could feel your pain and your longing. You've done a wonderful job here. The artwork was spot on. I wish you well in the contest, and look forward to reading future writings.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
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It was my pleasure to read and to listen to what you have written here. I could feel your pain and your longing. You've done a wonderful job here. The artwork was spot on. I wish you well in the contest, and look forward to reading future writings.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
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This is actually a song that my young students sing at Taft High School. Throughout the years I have used it to help students with life. Many times after we sing it they open up to me and tell me their own mirror story.
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How nice! What a unique way to get students to open up and share their life stories. :D
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is a sad reminder that no one knows how one will handle the loss of a loved one. I thought your poem dealt well with the prompt. The lines flowed smoothly and told a good story. The picture is perfect, too.
Is a word missing from this line:
would I understand her love for [for what?]
That time just cant erase
Good job and best wishes in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
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Your poem is a sad reminder that no one knows how one will handle the loss of a loved one. I thought your poem dealt well with the prompt. The lines flowed smoothly and told a good story. The picture is perfect, too.
Is a word missing from this line:
would I understand her love for [for what?]
That time just cant erase
Good job and best wishes in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
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Yes it is thank you so much I will edit it immediately. This is why I love
Fanstory. You help me edit and believe in myself.
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Good choice! It is a great addition.
