Comment from JTStone

Excellent

A vast change from your usual, girl...
I love the visual imagery that you cast in the last few stanzas, The image of now, and what should be instead--one of a pristine memory.
I think you should play in this realm a while, you have some amazing skilz...
Jimmy

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

I know, I don't know how this came about, it just sort of happened. I will see how it goes, thank you so much, Jimmy. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is a nice picture and poem pairing, Sandra :) I think you captured it well.

Favorite line:

"the scent of salty seas invading senses" - that makes the moment come to life and the reader is right there with you.

I was thinking this poem was about Jesus on the cross, but lost that image when you said he traced his lips with his fingers. He couldn't do that if hands were nailed to the cross. So now I'm thinking I need to come back and read this with fresh eyes.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

I started off two weeks ago with the cross, but then saw the name of the picture, and the Native Indian at that time believed in the Spirit, not of Jesus on the cross. Looking hard at the picture, I don't think it is a cross, more a fence, I don't know. But, thank you for your lovely review, my friend. :) Sandra x

reply by Joy Graham on 28-Mar-2016

It's a lovely poem, Sandra, despite my inability to comprehend. I'll look at it again. This ipad isn't the best at letting me see the picture.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your poem tells a great story. I enjoyed reading it. The lines flow smoothly and transport the reader to this 'dream' along with the Indian. I can visualize what you wrote easily and it truly speaks volumes of the plight of the Indians. I like the positive ending. Each individual is important in the grand scheme, and one can make a difference.

Good job and thanks for sharing and caring.

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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thank you so much, Jan. I really loved the picture and it brought loads of images to mind. I'm glad you like it. xsx Sandra

Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

Your poem has a mystical and enchanting tone that I really like. Great interpretation of the picture, I think. I love this line....

"in ever spinning eons passing by."

Good job one this, Sandra


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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thank you, Douglas, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I loved the picture. :) Sandra. xx