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Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "He Opened Up His Eyes"poems from Picture This Challenge
34 total reviews
Comment from ronnie k
What wonderful challenging write and I loved every single turn LOL, I see some many and so much (poems) within the fast, surprising poem, it seems almost unfair to rate this poem excellent, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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What wonderful challenging write and I loved every single turn LOL, I see some many and so much (poems) within the fast, surprising poem, it seems almost unfair to rate this poem excellent, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Ronnie, what a lovely review! I am so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is very well penned. I like all of the imagery--birds, fish, salty sea. You read a lot into this and I find the combination of thoughts to be marvelous, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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This is very well penned. I like all of the imagery--birds, fish, salty sea. You read a lot into this and I find the combination of thoughts to be marvelous, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much, Debbie, I am really glad you liked my take on the picture. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Treischel
A very thought provoking poem about the thoughts of a Native American chief dealing with the tragedy of his people. An excellent free style poem that flows with intense feeling, and closes with realization. I really liked this.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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A very thought provoking poem about the thoughts of a Native American chief dealing with the tragedy of his people. An excellent free style poem that flows with intense feeling, and closes with realization. I really liked this.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much, Tom. The picture gave me so many images to work with, I'm so pleased you liked the result. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Eric1
Hi Sandra, this is indeed different for you, a wonderful mixture of rhyme, internal rhyme and free verse that all seem to blend together so naturally, thank you for sharing your awesome skills my friend.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Hi Sandra, this is indeed different for you, a wonderful mixture of rhyme, internal rhyme and free verse that all seem to blend together so naturally, thank you for sharing your awesome skills my friend.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Eric, for your lovely review. I have no idea where it came from, lol, and doubt there will be many more of them, if any! :) Sandra xxx
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LoL! Hope Faye doesn't read it he he.
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Oh, yes, do you think it would go down well if I posted it in our groups club? It does rhyme of a sort!!! lol!! I really must go and post something on there, perhaps not that one though!! xxx
Comment from l.raven
OH Sandra, you did this so well sweet girl....the thoughts of an Indian looking into the past...only to see the future...you have such a talent for writing sweet girl...and I love reading you...a wonderful job on this challenge...and I love the picture....love ya you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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OH Sandra, you did this so well sweet girl....the thoughts of an Indian looking into the past...only to see the future...you have such a talent for writing sweet girl...and I love reading you...a wonderful job on this challenge...and I love the picture....love ya you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much, my dear friend. You really make my day. The picture is lovely, isn't it. Love you, my sweet friend. :) Sandra xxx
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love you too sweet lady...and you are always so very very welcome...Linda xxoo
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Sandra. I have read a lot of these and I have to tell you, this one of yours is the most original in my eyes. The strong verrbs you used propel the entire piece very nicely:
"Was that sound the sea-gulls screeching loudly in the sky?
Not from any memory of his did he recall...but then--
could it be the sound of eagles so far distant as to fall
upon his hearing, gently reminiscing days that fly,
in ever spinning eons passing by."
Wow! Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Hi, Sandra. I have read a lot of these and I have to tell you, this one of yours is the most original in my eyes. The strong verrbs you used propel the entire piece very nicely:
"Was that sound the sea-gulls screeching loudly in the sky?
Not from any memory of his did he recall...but then--
could it be the sound of eagles so far distant as to fall
upon his hearing, gently reminiscing days that fly,
in ever spinning eons passing by."
Wow! Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thank you so very much, Bob, for you really lovely review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Sometimes in life we encounter disconnects with what has happened in the past to what has changed. For most it can take eons to recognize and come to grips with the present changes.
Once recognized, their world takes a turn for the best. So Sandra, I may be off base with this review, but it is my interpretation. Knowing you as I do, you gave us a truly wonderful poem to read and to grasp it's message.
Thank you for this and have a great evening. Love you Sandra my friend. xxx
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Sometimes in life we encounter disconnects with what has happened in the past to what has changed. For most it can take eons to recognize and come to grips with the present changes.
Once recognized, their world takes a turn for the best. So Sandra, I may be off base with this review, but it is my interpretation. Knowing you as I do, you gave us a truly wonderful poem to read and to grasp it's message.
Thank you for this and have a great evening. Love you Sandra my friend. xxx
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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You are so lovely, Jim, thank you so very much for your spot on review. I knew you would understand. I haven't written one like this before, sort of free verse I suppose, I don't know must about them. But this just came to me and I had to write it down. I am really glad you liked it my friend. Love you, and thank you! xsx Sandra.
Comment from MelB
Fantastic job with this stunning picture for this challenge. There are so many possibilities, but nothing has come to me yet. It's been so busy since I got back from Florida!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Fantastic job with this stunning picture for this challenge. There are so many possibilities, but nothing has come to me yet. It's been so busy since I got back from Florida!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much, Melissa. I am sure you will come up with something fabulous once it comes to you. I hope you had a nice stay in Florida. xsx Sandra xx
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting poem, Sandy. Nothing wrong that I can see. The photo can be interrupted in many ways. I t should be fun competing.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Interesting poem, Sandy. Nothing wrong that I can see. The photo can be interrupted in many ways. I t should be fun competing.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Ben, your review is really nice. Are you going to do one for the Picture This group challenge? I would love to see what you would come up with! :) Sandy. xxx
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I will look into it. Stretched for time.
Comment from Pantygynt
It is my belief that you are here trying to find the thought processes of the native American, believing them to be, as I do, somewhat different from our own. I have long maintained that it is impossible to take a human being out of a neolithic society and having taught him the rudiments of language expect him to behave and think like modern society. I think it takes several generations and perhaps an element of cross breeding to achieve harmony.
This is not to denigrate those who have the elements of the neolithic in their blood but rather to make allowances for their differences and even to learn from them to replace some of the values we have lost.
I think this is a fine free verse achievement.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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It is my belief that you are here trying to find the thought processes of the native American, believing them to be, as I do, somewhat different from our own. I have long maintained that it is impossible to take a human being out of a neolithic society and having taught him the rudiments of language expect him to behave and think like modern society. I think it takes several generations and perhaps an element of cross breeding to achieve harmony.
This is not to denigrate those who have the elements of the neolithic in their blood but rather to make allowances for their differences and even to learn from them to replace some of the values we have lost.
I think this is a fine free verse achievement.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2016
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That is it precisely, Jim, I tried hard to get that across, and I'm not 100% sure I have, lol, it's the first time I've done anything like this. But this picture is so full of imagery of so many different elements, I had to give it a go. I am delighted you have said what you did, thank you so much. :) Sandra xxx
