Rainbow in the Sky
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Comment from Kay521
This haiku follows the correct format. The subject is clear and I feel that it fits the picture quite well. As I read this, I had the feeling of peace and envisioned sitting outside staring at the sky. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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This haiku follows the correct format. The subject is clear and I feel that it fits the picture quite well. As I read this, I had the feeling of peace and envisioned sitting outside staring at the sky. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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Thank you for the nice review and five stars.
Comment from heyjude
Right on with syllable count on this 5 7 5 for the contest. I like the phrase optical phenomenon. A rainbow does give us that awe factor.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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Right on with syllable count on this 5 7 5 for the contest. I like the phrase optical phenomenon. A rainbow does give us that awe factor.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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Thank you for the nice review and five stars.
Comment from darkmoonbaby
This is a well written piece of poetry that was enjoyable to read. I saw no errors or mistakes, nothing that I would change. I found the image used with the poem to be beautiful and a great selection.
DMB
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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This is a well written piece of poetry that was enjoyable to read. I saw no errors or mistakes, nothing that I would change. I found the image used with the poem to be beautiful and a great selection.
DMB
Comment Written 06-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thank you for reviewing my haiku and giving me five stars.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5
Excellent definition of "awe"
They are few things to match the beauty of a rainbow
Excellent picture to match
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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This is a fine entry for the contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5
Excellent definition of "awe"
They are few things to match the beauty of a rainbow
Excellent picture to match
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to review my haiku and the five stars.
Comment from judester
A short and sweet observation. Don't we just love to see a rainbow? a sunset and sunrise? These are the little joys that makes us smile, cheers, j
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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A short and sweet observation. Don't we just love to see a rainbow? a sunset and sunrise? These are the little joys that makes us smile, cheers, j
Comment Written 05-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thanks for the review and five stars, you are right it is so awesome to look and see the beautiful works of God in the sky.
Comment from DeboraDyess
Morning!
Your haiku was perfect -- met allt he criteria and painted a picture.
It didn't really 'grab me' in that it didn't reveal anything new. I don't know if that's a requirement of haiku or not ... not being a poet makes it hard to judge poetry effectively. It was nice, but I'd like to challenge you to push for something more than that. I think you have it in you -- I know the difficutly of doing this type of poem, having tried and not done incredibly well, myself! I think the word 'colorful' let me down. If there's something more dynamic to use, I'd slip that in. Everyone knows a rainbow is colorful. What else (in three syllables) is it? See what I mean?
As I said, I'm not a 'real' poet' so don't take this too much to heart. Just a couple of thoughts to push you farther along that writing path. (Summer is here ... still teaching. Yikes! lol.)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Morning!
Your haiku was perfect -- met allt he criteria and painted a picture.
It didn't really 'grab me' in that it didn't reveal anything new. I don't know if that's a requirement of haiku or not ... not being a poet makes it hard to judge poetry effectively. It was nice, but I'd like to challenge you to push for something more than that. I think you have it in you -- I know the difficutly of doing this type of poem, having tried and not done incredibly well, myself! I think the word 'colorful' let me down. If there's something more dynamic to use, I'd slip that in. Everyone knows a rainbow is colorful. What else (in three syllables) is it? See what I mean?
As I said, I'm not a 'real' poet' so don't take this too much to heart. Just a couple of thoughts to push you farther along that writing path. (Summer is here ... still teaching. Yikes! lol.)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much for reviewing my haiku and the five stars.
You mentioned the word "colorful" and I took the liberty to put
the word rainbow up on this website answer.com and here is
what they had as adjectives to describe "rainbow"-
*Bright, beautiful, colorful, light, arching, shimmering, shining, amazing, marvelous.
I once did something and you know what it means and I left out a word knowing
someone understood what I was saying and told me I left the descriptive word out.
It seems like you are very enthusiastic about writing and I am very glad for you.
As I read, a haiku is about nature and the last line sums up what you are trying to say.
Once again thanks for taking the time.
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It is certainly true that there's no pleaseing all of us, isn't it. :)
As mentioned, you did a great job on the haiku -- just a thought on the descriptive word you used, not a serious criticism.
Best!
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Little things bothers me and I wanted to make sure myself if I had an error.
I was willing to take it out because I definitely don't know a lot, now I know.
I will correct anything when I find it to be a mistake.
Thanks.
Comment from MSJVClarke
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem. I like the strenght of your technical words which were well blended with the human emotion of one's seeing such a simple act of nature, yet, as you say, awesome.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem. I like the strenght of your technical words which were well blended with the human emotion of one's seeing such a simple act of nature, yet, as you say, awesome.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016
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Thank you for taking the time to review my haiku and giving me the five stars.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I like the use of a four syllable word in your 17 syllable poem:) Great job with good imagery. I wish you well in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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I like the use of a four syllable word in your 17 syllable poem:) Great job with good imagery. I wish you well in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 08-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the five stars and comment about the four syllable word.
Comment from rmj09
This poem meets the requirements of the 5-7-5 Haiku being of physical nature and free form.
The poem focus rainbow.
The poem story line development: the awe of seeing the optical phenomenon a rainbow.
The emotion felt lifting of the spirit a reminder of a promise made long ago.
You can never see too many rainbows.
Good luck with the contest.
Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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This poem meets the requirements of the 5-7-5 Haiku being of physical nature and free form.
The poem focus rainbow.
The poem story line development: the awe of seeing the optical phenomenon a rainbow.
The emotion felt lifting of the spirit a reminder of a promise made long ago.
You can never see too many rainbows.
Good luck with the contest.
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the five stars and comment about my haiku being of physical nature, a rainbow is awesome.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. Such a beautiful picture for such a lovely poem. It is well-written and most enjoyable to read. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. I could see no errors.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Excellent. Such a beautiful picture for such a lovely poem. It is well-written and most enjoyable to read. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. I could see no errors.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the five stars and nice comment.
