Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This is my favorite of yours yet and I could so very much apply it to my own life and I know other readers will be able to do the same. This is exceptional pin pointing writing. Way to go on this. Bravo.....

 Comment Written 25-May-2016

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reply by the author on 25-May-2016

Thank you Fox, It was fun writing. Rhyme comes easily to me and it is a refreshing way to write.

Comment from P1

Excellent

this is a lovely story and a well-
rhymed poem. the last line was
quite a surprise but it's lovely to
watcha caterpillar turn into a
butterfly. pleasure to read and
review

 Comment Written 24-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Paige , you always make me smile, you get me. Thank you.

Comment from maryvellef

Excellent

So glad you came out of it like a newly blooming flower. It is a very well narrated story with a smooth flow of words and a rhyme that is just great. Very interesting too most of all. Keep up the work.

 Comment Written 24-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

Thank you so much , I have bloomed on this fan story site more than all of my years of living. I have only been here since February yet I feel like I can write the truth every day and people will understand.

Comment from AnnieDawn

Exceptional

I don't think I have ever read a more interesting story written in poem style. This is excellent and I enjoyed it through to the end. What a great ending and I believe it is a true story also, even though you do not state that. Great job and you have a winner here.

 Comment Written 24-May-2016

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reply by the author on 24-May-2016

thank you , it is a true story, my generation was the one who had conflicting views. In the sixties and seventies, we were told we could be anything, but we grew up with stay at home Moms who gave up themselves for us. The two stories had a hard time blending. I grow every day with reviews and understanding people like you. Thank you.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A great imaginative story on many woman today that get married to a man they learn was not who they think he was and she come out scared but finally she knows her own worth.

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 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2016

LIfe has a way of making us grow up and stand for itself. Thank you so much for reading and commenting.

Comment from LisaD123

Excellent

Very cleverly constructed and thoughtfully told. To keep up this level of rhyme, and to tell a story is highly skilled indeed. The reader cares about Mary Louise and what happens to her. The story is well-constructed and the inclusion of dialogue makes it more realistic. Thanks for sharing!

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 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2016

thank you so much for taking the time to read this. I am enjoying getting to know all of you