I Am a Rock
Contest entry81 total reviews
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi Sis Cat,
This is a nice way to re-word the song making it quite apt for this contest. The slight twist on the refrain is enough alone to make me recognise how much work has gone into this. Good luck in the contest! R
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Hi Sis Cat,
This is a nice way to re-word the song making it quite apt for this contest. The slight twist on the refrain is enough alone to make me recognise how much work has gone into this. Good luck in the contest! R
Comment Written 06-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Raoul, for your generous review of my lyric rewrite with a slight twist. Thank you also for wishing me good luck in the contest.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Andre,
I really like what you have done with this, almost inversing sections of it to give a subtle yet deepening difference. Very well worked piece.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Hi Andre,
I really like what you have done with this, almost inversing sections of it to give a subtle yet deepening difference. Very well worked piece.
All the best
G
Comment Written 06-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Yes, G, I inverted sections of it to provide a subtle but deepening difference. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best of luck n the contest.
Comment from scd41
By building walls around and shutting off from the world, it is no surprise that one feels like a rock though in fact she is not. I liked your rewritten lyrics. I presume this is a kind of psychological disorder where the sufferer unconsciously inflicts harm to self with a desire to invite sympathy and pity.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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By building walls around and shutting off from the world, it is no surprise that one feels like a rock though in fact she is not. I liked your rewritten lyrics. I presume this is a kind of psychological disorder where the sufferer unconsciously inflicts harm to self with a desire to invite sympathy and pity.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your deep and insightful review on my lyrics rewrite on loneliness. Yes, it does become a self-inflicted wound.
Comment from Joan E.
I liked your play on the famous lyrics in reverse--not being a rock and feeling pain!
You certainly communicated loneliness. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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I liked your play on the famous lyrics in reverse--not being a rock and feeling pain!
You certainly communicated loneliness. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 06-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Yes, Joan, I said the opposite of what Simon and Garfunkel sang to communicate the loneliness and isolation. Thank you for your review and for wishing me good luck in the contest.
Comment from littlebit69
We convince ourselves we're a rock so can't feel pain We dress in armor and shield to protect ourselves. We avoid love. pushing everybody away. I can relate to this poem. I believe we all been there. Love can hurt deeply only time can heal it. This a beautiful poem for anybody who's been hurt by love and looking for island never cries.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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We convince ourselves we're a rock so can't feel pain We dress in armor and shield to protect ourselves. We avoid love. pushing everybody away. I can relate to this poem. I believe we all been there. Love can hurt deeply only time can heal it. This a beautiful poem for anybody who's been hurt by love and looking for island never cries.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016
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Wow, thank you, littlebit69, for my first six star review. I was not expecting it. I rewrote the lyrics to this Simon and Garfunkel song thirty years ago when I was in the throes of loneliness and depression. Kidding aside, it still hurts to read the lyrics. Thank you for your insightful, generous review.
Comment from Jay Squires
What an interesting and deeply felt poem, Andre. It has its own special meaning aside from Paul Simon's poetry. His had an original profundity, but in order for you to infuse your poem with meaning you had to take his poem and turn it inside out. My hat's off to you, my dear friend.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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What an interesting and deeply felt poem, Andre. It has its own special meaning aside from Paul Simon's poetry. His had an original profundity, but in order for you to infuse your poem with meaning you had to take his poem and turn it inside out. My hat's off to you, my dear friend.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Jay, Paul Simon is such a great lyric writer, one of our best, that it is a challenge "to take his poem and turn it inside out." Thank you for your enthusiastic review.
Comment from Douglas Paul
You did a very good job of this. Your verse expands upon the original concept of the song very well. And you chose a great song to wok with. Well done
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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You did a very good job of this. Your verse expands upon the original concept of the song very well. And you chose a great song to wok with. Well done
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Douglas Paul, for your review. I expanded "on the original concept of the song very well." Thanks for your compliment.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I see you've used one of Simon & Garfunkle's great old classic tunes as well for your entry, Andre. Weren't they remarkable, and they, as a duo, simply incredible? The messages in their music remains timeless, even today.
I played the original tune on YouTube as I read this, to get more in tune with the rhythm and flow incorporated. You've done a remarkable job of adhering well to the original, and have even added more melancholy to an already melancholy tune.
Wonderfully well done, and just in time for the contest as well.
I wish you the very best of luck, my friend.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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I see you've used one of Simon & Garfunkle's great old classic tunes as well for your entry, Andre. Weren't they remarkable, and they, as a duo, simply incredible? The messages in their music remains timeless, even today.
I played the original tune on YouTube as I read this, to get more in tune with the rhythm and flow incorporated. You've done a remarkable job of adhering well to the original, and have even added more melancholy to an already melancholy tune.
Wonderfully well done, and just in time for the contest as well.
I wish you the very best of luck, my friend.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Yes, Dean, I am glad I brought this old chestnut out just in time for the contest. I wrote this parody thirty years ago when I was in the throes of loneliness and depression and sought Simon and Garfunkel's song for solace. I incorporated the rewrite of the lyrics into a story performance last year and auditioned it. The event producer loved the song but did not pick me to perform it. I am glad to get some use out of it as it is my first poetry entry of 2016. Thank you for the example you set, your contest well-wishes, and the inspiration that motivated me to post. Good luck in the contest as well.
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It's always a pleasure, Andre, my dear friend. You are more than welcome.
~Dean
Comment from Mastery
Hi,,Cat. So good to see your writing again. It seems to have been a while...especially for [poetry from you.
The thiught process behind the words is brilliant in my estimation.
"I have my looks
And my records to protect me.
I am shielded in tin armor,
Hiding in my cell,
Unnsafe within my pain."
Reminds me of that old fifties song..."No Man Is An Island"
Bravo and good luck in the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Hi,,Cat. So good to see your writing again. It seems to have been a while...especially for [poetry from you.
The thiught process behind the words is brilliant in my estimation.
"I have my looks
And my records to protect me.
I am shielded in tin armor,
Hiding in my cell,
Unnsafe within my pain."
Reminds me of that old fifties song..."No Man Is An Island"
Bravo and good luck in the contest. Bob
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Oh, yes, Bob, it is good to be writing again. This is my first poetry post of 2016. Yesterday, Page & Spine published three of my FanStory poems: http://www.pagespineficshowcase.com/poems.html
Given that I rewrote these lyrics thirty years ago when I was in the throes of loneliness and depression and rewrote the song to address my situation, I have to write new poems to address my situation today. Thank you for your review of my thought processes behind my words.
Comment from danpald
Sweet retake of the song
Showing that it is fine
To hold the beauty of the poem
With force of memories long
to be alone is not the way
Friends are need day by day
To learn that life is the way
Not to be a rock nor island stay
A rock feels the pain of time
An island the loneliness of trial
To live is to be with others
Holding life as social wonder
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Sweet retake of the song
Showing that it is fine
To hold the beauty of the poem
With force of memories long
to be alone is not the way
Friends are need day by day
To learn that life is the way
Not to be a rock nor island stay
A rock feels the pain of time
An island the loneliness of trial
To live is to be with others
Holding life as social wonder
Comment Written 05-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2016
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Oh, thank you, danpald, for you parody of a parody. I enjoyed your review and how you grasped my lyrics rewrite
"To live is to be with others
Holding life as social wonder."
