Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

NIce rewrite of one of my favorite Simon and Garfunkel songs.
It tells of a lonely person who suffers and cries alone. I think others try
to help but the speaker doesn't let them. If the walls are so thin why don't they tear and let someone in.

I have a poem called 'Joy and Pain' that is a rewrite of this song too that I wrote and posted long ago so I can't enter it into the contest.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016

Thank you, Joan, for your encouraging review and wishing me good luck in the contest. I rewrote this song thirty years ago. Fortunately, FanStory was not around at the time. I am glad it still resonates with people today.

reply by dragonpoet on 07-Mar-2016

No problem.

Joan

Comment from thonnigford09

Exceptional

I really love this poem. This can be taken from anyone's perspective as a reader. I love the original song by Simon and Garfunkel. Good rewrite. Who doesn't feel this way. I liked," I have my looks," wouldn't have thought of that. I would recommend this! thonnigford09

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016

Ah, finally. Thank you, thonnigford09, for your generous, six star review. Yes, I love that "I have my looks" line which spoofs "I have my books." I had a lot of fun rewriting it, and it resonates with people who felt this way at some time in their lives. Thanks.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Great to see you again, Sis. You've worked out new lyrics to one of my favourite songs from many yonks ago. That Paul Simon really knew how to write them up and then the harmonies between the two were simply stunning.

I'm not a rock or an island but the metaphor is rather apt. As John Donne wrote, no man is an island entire of itself.

Best wishes to you in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016

Yes, Gloria, it's good to be back. I have not posted a poem since October 18, 2015 and my present post I wrote thirty-three years ago. Yes, that Paul Simon sure knew how to write. Thank you for your review and wishing me the best in the contest.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Excellent interpretation to this Simon and Garfunkel tune. Loneliness can cause sadness and pain. Your storytelling skills shine in this lyric re-write piece. Well done. So good to read your work again.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016

Yes, Janet, my "storytelling skills shine in this lyric re-write." I wrote it thirty years ago and I am on to new projects. Thank you for your review of my "excellent interpretation."

Comment from Empty & Honest

Excellent

WOW! I understand that this was a lyrical switch contest entry (honestly I didn't read the real lyrics) but this made me feel as if that rock is a person that shelters themselves or is sheltered or imprisoned by others. This piece touches my life in many ways that I cannot explain. Thank you so much for sharing

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016

Thank you, Empty & Honest, for your review. I rewrote these lyrics thirty years ago when I was in the throes of loneliness and depression. I sought to rewrite the song to address the isolation and imprisonment I was feeling at the time. The lyrics rewrite lay dormant in a diary for twenty-nine years before I rediscovered them . I am glad I shared them with you. Thanks.

Comment from Cogitator

Exceptional

Excellent interpretation and insight into the human condition. You will do well in this contest if there are enough people willing to vote outside their circle...John

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016

Thank you, John, for your generous, six star review. I have already won by posting this as my first poem in 2016, but I rewrote the lyrics thirty years ago. I am glad you found it to be an "Excellent interpretation and insight into the human condition." Thank you for your contest well-wishes, as well.

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

I am really enjoying the entries for this contest. What a very sad ending though to your version. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016

Yes, Debbie, I am enjoying the entries in the contest, too, which inspired me to throw this thirty-year-old lyric rewrite into the contest. Thank you for your review and wishing me the best.

Comment from MelB

Exceptional

Fantastic job on this Sis Cat! You put the very quote at the bottom that I was thinking of the whole time I was reading this. Really, it's about the classic avoider. That's their mantra.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016

Oh, thank you, MelB, for your generous, six star review. Yes, the classic avoider. Thanks again.

reply by MelB on 06-Mar-2016

You're most welcome:)

Comment from tango494

Excellent

Nice presentation, I love how you framed this. The line below is something sadly most people can and have related to at some point in life.

"I have great need of friendship.
Lack of it causes pain."

I love works that can make me feel something. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016

Oh, thank you, tango94, for your generous review. I am humbled that line "s something sadly most people can and have related to at some point in life." Thanks again.

Comment from RForcier

Excellent

Nice piece of work. The flow seemed a bit off but I like the content and the idea you were trying to portray. Very nice indeed!

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2016

Thank you, RForcier, for your kind review of a "nice piece of work." I am glad you liked the content and the idea I was trying to portray.