Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Interesting perspective. I agree with the idea of not being hurtful but the word CONSTRUCTIVE is used with critique for a reason. It is never meant to be destructive.

There are some who might argue that serving up praises for work that needs constructive critique is ultimately damaging to aspiring author's and hurts more than helps in the case of those who do aim to publish.

My two cents: We should always strive to be kind. However, depending on context, kindness sometimes includes telling the truth in a compassionate manner.

This is a fine 5-7-5, true to form and finely resented. I like the thought provoking challenge of your second line, but feel it would be strengthened in delivery by using a ? at the end. In fact, the lack of enjambment makes this slightly choppy, so i recommend connecting the lines by using punctuation. example:

Critical review(:)

Was it hurtful or helpful?

Withstanding author

I like how this poem has great word economy and yet manages to use alliteration of both H and W. Well done! Also applaud the subtle consonance of R, T, and F. Sounds good read aloud.

Good luck in the contest.

Warmly, rd



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 Comment Written 27-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016

Great ideas! Thanks for all the helpful tips. I put them to use. This is the kind of review I love to receive. Honest and helpful.

reply by rama devi on 27-Feb-2016

Thanks so much for your gracious response! :-))

Warm Smiles, rd

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Off course critique hurts very bad. It can either be helpful and to adjust your work might improve the quality. If the critique is unjust shrug your shoulders and continue on your quest.

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 Comment Written 27-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016

Thank you Sandra. I have received many critiques in my time but one recently really stung. I joined this site because it welcomed all and most (99%) are helpful, honest and kind with their words. There is always a way to words reviews that are not hurtful. This one told me I basically should not write at all and had no hope of ever winning.

This was my response, the poem.

reply by Sandra du Plessis on 27-Feb-2016

I hopd he/she reads it, there is always one that try to hide their lack of confidence by being plain rude.

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016

I hope so too. Thanks for the support Sandra.