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Comment from bob cullen
Let me commence by stating I love BAD. And irreverence. And this is seriously bad.
I'm trying to write this as tears roll down my face. You have made my Sunday morning.
It's so good to find light hearted humour in poetry
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Let me commence by stating I love BAD. And irreverence. And this is seriously bad.
I'm trying to write this as tears roll down my face. You have made my Sunday morning.
It's so good to find light hearted humour in poetry
Comment Written 27-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Bob, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Ulla
Yeah, well that was tough luck!!
Bill, this made me laugh, and I am still chuckling. Really good and appealed to my sense of humour. Well done. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Yeah, well that was tough luck!!
Bill, this made me laugh, and I am still chuckling. Really good and appealed to my sense of humour. Well done. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Ulla, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from rspoet
Flickenhausen may have flickered out
that's what happens to candles in the ocean
they tend to spit and sputter
like a frying pan with butter
always check the undercarriage
if it's not fit and firm
one lesson you will learn
dead is dead, no matter what the marriage
Interesting poem, my friend!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Flickenhausen may have flickered out
that's what happens to candles in the ocean
they tend to spit and sputter
like a frying pan with butter
always check the undercarriage
if it's not fit and firm
one lesson you will learn
dead is dead, no matter what the marriage
Interesting poem, my friend!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Thank you, rs., for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from krys123
Bill;
-a sort of a melancholy and sad piece of poetry written rhythmically and with great rhyming though but I must admit the rhyming seemed a little bit strained in some words. However, all through the writing of the rhyming words were contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each of the lines therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly.
-the rhythmic meter being iambic tetrameter and the cadence, timing and tempo were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy. The last line in every verse was written in iambic cinquameter(five syllables per line).
-as I said previously that this writing was a little bit melancholy but it was also quite humorous. And that being that is schooner was made of plywood( Chuckle!).
-thanks for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Bill.
Alex
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Bill;
-a sort of a melancholy and sad piece of poetry written rhythmically and with great rhyming though but I must admit the rhyming seemed a little bit strained in some words. However, all through the writing of the rhyming words were contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each of the lines therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly.
-the rhythmic meter being iambic tetrameter and the cadence, timing and tempo were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy. The last line in every verse was written in iambic cinquameter(five syllables per line).
-as I said previously that this writing was a little bit melancholy but it was also quite humorous. And that being that is schooner was made of plywood( Chuckle!).
-thanks for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Bill.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Alex, for the excellent review. Bill
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you are so welcome Bill.
Alex
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You are very welcome Bill.
Alex
Comment from Dean Kuch
There are a lot of things I "could" say about this funny little limerick-like poem, Bill, but most of them would be considered as bigoted and intolerant. So I'll just keep my mouth shut...for the most part.
I will say, however, that God's intended plan for the procreation of humanity (as well as all other species) was always intended to be Adam & Eve, not Adam & Steve. Man, and woman.
I asked my brother-in-law, who is married, legally, to another man the following questions:
Me--Hey, Eddie. Do you like steak?
Eddie--Huh?
Me--I asked if you liked steak. You know, a big, juicy steak?
Eddie--Well sure, who doesn't?
Me--Okay, then how about eggs...do you like eggs?
Eddie--Yeah, they're okay. Not as good as steak, though.
Me--No, of course not. But they're damn good together for breakfast, right?
Eddie--Well...yeah, I suppose so.
Me--Okay, then if God intended same sexes to be together, and it's to be considered by society to be completely normal, and all of the chickens and cows started fornicating with the same sex, how long do you think it would be before the steak and eggs ran out?
Eddie--I'm gonna starve, aren't I?
Me--You damn well bet yer butt, bub...
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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There are a lot of things I "could" say about this funny little limerick-like poem, Bill, but most of them would be considered as bigoted and intolerant. So I'll just keep my mouth shut...for the most part.
I will say, however, that God's intended plan for the procreation of humanity (as well as all other species) was always intended to be Adam & Eve, not Adam & Steve. Man, and woman.
I asked my brother-in-law, who is married, legally, to another man the following questions:
Me--Hey, Eddie. Do you like steak?
Eddie--Huh?
Me--I asked if you liked steak. You know, a big, juicy steak?
Eddie--Well sure, who doesn't?
Me--Okay, then how about eggs...do you like eggs?
Eddie--Yeah, they're okay. Not as good as steak, though.
Me--No, of course not. But they're damn good together for breakfast, right?
Eddie--Well...yeah, I suppose so.
Me--Okay, then if God intended same sexes to be together, and it's to be considered by society to be completely normal, and all of the chickens and cows started fornicating with the same sex, how long do you think it would be before the steak and eggs ran out?
Eddie--I'm gonna starve, aren't I?
Me--You damn well bet yer butt, bub...
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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I guess that part of the poem stands out for some, Dean. I wrote it in with what I now see as a subconscious bias, as I placed him on a bad boat and killed him. I guess society has muted any overt reactions that I have to these unions.
Comment from Jay Squires
WHat a witty poem you wrote, Bill. Dang, but it's good to find your work soon enough before it goes to 2 cents. The ending, like life, is so impertinently anti-climactic-- it could have been written by Sartre.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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WHat a witty poem you wrote, Bill. Dang, but it's good to find your work soon enough before it goes to 2 cents. The ending, like life, is so impertinently anti-climactic-- it could have been written by Sartre.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Jay, for the positive review. I've been out of the loop for awhile and need to beef up my money to promote better. Happy day. Bill
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
LOL but in a good way. I enjoyed your poem. I like the mono-rhyme of the lines. Then you have that last line of each verse that all rhyme--interesting. Your poem gave me a laugh [and we all need a good laugh everyday]. Good job on the smooth flow of lines. Thanks for sharing a fun read.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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LOL but in a good way. I enjoyed your poem. I like the mono-rhyme of the lines. Then you have that last line of each verse that all rhyme--interesting. Your poem gave me a laugh [and we all need a good laugh everyday]. Good job on the smooth flow of lines. Thanks for sharing a fun read.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you, jannypan, for the upbeat and positive review. Bill
Comment from onceinabluemoon
Ha ha - fun bit of poetry! You obviously had a good time with this one. Love the light & jaunty feel, and the unforced language choices. Good one! I feel as if I'd be silently reciting this one, if I read it a few more times.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Ha ha - fun bit of poetry! You obviously had a good time with this one. Love the light & jaunty feel, and the unforced language choices. Good one! I feel as if I'd be silently reciting this one, if I read it a few more times.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Once, for reviewing this. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Hahahahahahaaaa.... Bill, I lovvvve this! And here I am out of sixes, darn it. This is timely and delightfully silly... and perfect! I'm going to bookcase it to read again. :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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LOL! Hahahahahahaaaa.... Bill, I lovvvve this! And here I am out of sixes, darn it. This is timely and delightfully silly... and perfect! I'm going to bookcase it to read again. :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Phyllis, for the great response. I cherish your opinion. Bill
