The Thrift Shop
Six quatrains of Blank Verse40 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It is always an interesting place to visit. Some things you find can be useful and other is just beautiful to have without a real purpose.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
  |
It is always an interesting place to visit. Some things you find can be useful and other is just beautiful to have without a real purpose.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Many thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your review. I like your phrase, 'just beautiful to have without a real purpose'. Sums up quite a bit of the bric-a-brac I seem to have accumulated over the years! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Domino 2
Blimey, Tony, your notes seem ten times longer than your poem, but their are some interesting explanations there.
I'm not a lover of blank verse, as I always 'crave' for the missing rhyme in metered/structured poetry, but I do like some and actually wrote ONE and enjoyed the challenge.
However, I do respect the form and the disciples required.
Your iambic pentameter is impeccable except for just one line I stumbled on:
'some hidebound books of Alexandrine verse'
Excellent theme of how some very interesting and 'invaluable' items (some you express with irreplaceable history) are on offer at ridiculously low and 'demeaning' prices in these days of economic thrift.
I much enjoyed the read.
Best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
Blimey, Tony, your notes seem ten times longer than your poem, but their are some interesting explanations there.
I'm not a lover of blank verse, as I always 'crave' for the missing rhyme in metered/structured poetry, but I do like some and actually wrote ONE and enjoyed the challenge.
However, I do respect the form and the disciples required.
Your iambic pentameter is impeccable except for just one line I stumbled on:
'some hidebound books of Alexandrine verse'
Excellent theme of how some very interesting and 'invaluable' items (some you express with irreplaceable history) are on offer at ridiculously low and 'demeaning' prices in these days of economic thrift.
I much enjoyed the read.
Best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Thanks, Ray. Knowing your aversion to blank verse, I'd like to thank you for stopping by anyway. I agree about the lapse in iambic rhythm in the 'hidebound books' line. Alexandrine doesn't quite fit the measure. Perhaps I should have another look at that. I appreciate your finely tuned ear!
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from William Ross
Very nice, i love thrift shops and antique shops great job on this piece and good luck to you with this. have yourself a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
Very nice, i love thrift shops and antique shops great job on this piece and good luck to you with this. have yourself a wonderful day.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Many thanks, William. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from strandregs
A most edifrying poem cascading infinit knowledge of brick a brack facts and tidbits of poetic excellence.
Walt Whitman would have been proud of you I'm sure .
so am I.
good look in the blackety blanck contest.
:-)) Z.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
A most edifrying poem cascading infinit knowledge of brick a brack facts and tidbits of poetic excellence.
Walt Whitman would have been proud of you I'm sure .
so am I.
good look in the blackety blanck contest.
:-)) Z.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Many thanks, Z. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Tony, this is such a delightful poem. Well written blank verse and such interesting artifacts. This should do very well in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
Tony, this is such a delightful poem. Well written blank verse and such interesting artifacts. This should do very well in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Many thanks, Debbie. I appreciate your review and good wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Tony - this is rally so well written. A good in-depth free verse and written as only you can. I enjoyed the read. 'years/fears' - line 3, stanza 3 - and last line. I personally don't say 'years' as I'd say 'fears', but others do. Best to play safe. Such a great piece. Interesting and helpful author notes. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
Hi Tony - this is rally so well written. A good in-depth free verse and written as only you can. I enjoyed the read. 'years/fears' - line 3, stanza 3 - and last line. I personally don't say 'years' as I'd say 'fears', but others do. Best to play safe. Such a great piece. Interesting and helpful author notes. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Many thanks, Dorothy. I appreciate your review and your sharp eyes. I have changed 'years' to 'days', which in this instance does not compromise the sense. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
I kept wanting to add "in the old bazaar in Cairo" as the list of unrelated junk progressed. I don't. T whether you are familiar with that old music hall number. It goes through a list of bric-a-bracelet available in much the same way.
These stores are fascinating places in whatever country they are found proving that one man's rubbish is another's collectable.
Excellent blank verse.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
I kept wanting to add "in the old bazaar in Cairo" as the list of unrelated junk progressed. I don't. T whether you are familiar with that old music hall number. It goes through a list of bric-a-bracelet available in much the same way.
These stores are fascinating places in whatever country they are found proving that one man's rubbish is another's collectable.
Excellent blank verse.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Thanks, Jim. I do have a dim and distant memory of the old bazaar in Cairo. Most of my memories these days are dim and distant! Tony
-
That's probably down to that nasty Budweiser stuff.
-
Could be! Also a few years of intensive numbing with Tiger Beer, which was purported at the time to have not inconsiderable traces of arsenic in it.
-
I remember Tiger from the 60s in Singapore. I was sponsored by Tiger Breweries in the first Asian Highway car rally, a Triumph TR3A painted like a beer can in blue and gold. We rolled it, must have been the arsenic.
Comment from Aussie
Best wishes for your contest entry; just love poking around thrift shops (we call them op shops opportunity in other words, money goes to charities. I enjoyed your meander through the goodies. And finally you found a book to read. Well done you. Lovely poem my friend.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
 |
Best wishes for your contest entry; just love poking around thrift shops (we call them op shops opportunity in other words, money goes to charities. I enjoyed your meander through the goodies. And finally you found a book to read. Well done you. Lovely poem my friend.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Many thanks, Aussie. I appreciate your kind review and six stars. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from c_lucas
Thrift stores are stock with other people's good times. This is very well written with an interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
Thrift stores are stock with other people's good times. This is very well written with an interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Many thanks, Charlie. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
-
You're welcome, Tony. Charlie.
Comment from victortouche
Hello Mr. Fawcus,
I would say a review from me is a bit overdue.
Ne c'est pas? Perhaps, with the purchase still
burning a hole in your conscious, you might be
averse to me poking my head in.
Haha. I must say this style seems to be the only style
accepted as top tier in America now. I do not normally
attempt it.
You have come away fine. I was wondering when the meandering misdirection was going to end and our
hero stab with all his daring the coveted, unrecognized
Book of Walt.
I loved the closing. A slow built crescendo, not ruined
by extension or over parlay. Ha! He seizes the book and away.
The last pulled and put everything in place.
Regards,
Doug
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
|
Hello Mr. Fawcus,
I would say a review from me is a bit overdue.
Ne c'est pas? Perhaps, with the purchase still
burning a hole in your conscious, you might be
averse to me poking my head in.
Haha. I must say this style seems to be the only style
accepted as top tier in America now. I do not normally
attempt it.
You have come away fine. I was wondering when the meandering misdirection was going to end and our
hero stab with all his daring the coveted, unrecognized
Book of Walt.
I loved the closing. A slow built crescendo, not ruined
by extension or over parlay. Ha! He seizes the book and away.
The last pulled and put everything in place.
Regards,
Doug
Comment Written 21-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2016
-
Thanks, Doug. I, too, am an infrequent reviewer of your work, so I guess we are even! However, I should mend my ways, if only to receive more such entertaining reviews. Best wishes, Tony
