Of Sea Shells and Shanty Tales
Short Story21 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You are indeed a wordsmith Mikey. Sometimes the things you write are way above my head, yet I can identify the genius in the telling. You have a unique mind my friend. Enjoyed your nautical piece. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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You are indeed a wordsmith Mikey. Sometimes the things you write are way above my head, yet I can identify the genius in the telling. You have a unique mind my friend. Enjoyed your nautical piece. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Sometimes it's just impressions to look at and not really concrete things. So it isn't always easy to grasp or even explain on my part either. If it's an enjoyable read, then I'm pleased. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from Pantygynt
Er, Mikey! It wasn't that sort of a blow. Honest. I know the whole story about the fat policeman see. I don't believe that mermaid blushed at at all. She wouldn't have put that sort of meaning on it. No, mermaids have very clean minds. It comes from beinconstantly awash.
Actually, until I got to the mermaid bit I thought you were a hermit crab.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Er, Mikey! It wasn't that sort of a blow. Honest. I know the whole story about the fat policeman see. I don't believe that mermaid blushed at at all. She wouldn't have put that sort of meaning on it. No, mermaids have very clean minds. It comes from beinconstantly awash.
Actually, until I got to the mermaid bit I thought you were a hermit crab.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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She did turn red though. Hmm, she may have become hot. Yeah, hot, that's what it must've been. It was sunny. I've been referred to as a hermit crab before, "Wow, now that's a claw!" I believe was the comment. I think it was meant as praise.
mike
Comment from Dav54
I really enjoyed enjoyed this playful piece! Just the right hint of bawdiness blended in with some fairly heady stuff. Very cool of you to make us contemplate the ticking of "the genetic clock."
"Does the thought of immersion tickle some amniotic dread and subliminal message of a crack addicted mother?" There's a lot to unpack in that line, mate! Well done!
I see that you are an accomplished poet, and it shows in this prose piece as well. I envy the word craft in this piece which caused me to want to follow your narrator into the "wine-dark sea."
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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I really enjoyed enjoyed this playful piece! Just the right hint of bawdiness blended in with some fairly heady stuff. Very cool of you to make us contemplate the ticking of "the genetic clock."
"Does the thought of immersion tickle some amniotic dread and subliminal message of a crack addicted mother?" There's a lot to unpack in that line, mate! Well done!
I see that you are an accomplished poet, and it shows in this prose piece as well. I envy the word craft in this piece which caused me to want to follow your narrator into the "wine-dark sea."
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Great to hear you are right on board with the tone and purpose of this. Just so appreciated and encouraging. I hope you don't mind if "wine-dark sea" somehow finds its way in to my piece somehow. Or maybe the next one. :)) Thanks a million. mike
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Ha-ha! No problem, you should definitely use "wine-dark sea." It's totally up for grabs. It's used in Beowulf and other Anglo-Saxon poetry like "The Wanderer"--I think it's a device called a kenning, and Walter Becker of Steely Dan fame used in a great song, "Down at the Bottom"
https://youtu.be/ExfUs-_P13c
Looking forward to reading more of your work!
Comment from krprice
It is. . .Creatures who. . . ears, and. . .
But she. . .Last sentence: waste should be waist.
I eye. . . I realize. . .(delete unnecessary that)
Good story.
Karlene
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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It is. . .Creatures who. . . ears, and. . .
But she. . .Last sentence: waste should be waist.
I eye. . . I realize. . .(delete unnecessary that)
Good story.
Karlene
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Good catches. Thanks so much. "Waste" certainly changes the meaning a tad. I used to pepper "that" everywhere, so I appreciate you catching it. Glad you liked, mike
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is very strange, which is what I expect from the hand of Mikey the Great. I get the gist of it, and I was thinking the same thing: I'm all fish from the waste down?
In that line, by the way, WAIST is misspelled. WAIST is the center of the body, while WASTE is garbage.
Keep taking those pills. But not too many. I'd hate for you to be normal and bland like most of us. :)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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This is very strange, which is what I expect from the hand of Mikey the Great. I get the gist of it, and I was thinking the same thing: I'm all fish from the waste down?
In that line, by the way, WAIST is misspelled. WAIST is the center of the body, while WASTE is garbage.
Keep taking those pills. But not too many. I'd hate for you to be normal and bland like most of us. :)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Oh, fixed that, thank you.
I'll forego any witty remarks concerning sea creatures and my own anatomy from the waist down, of course, I didn't did I? :))
I think I've found an excellent mix of pharmaceuticals and misdemeanor street drugs now to keep me on an even keel. You're a little too much on the genius side to be normal. mike
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You certainly are. :)
Comment from Scarbrems
Your poetickiness (I'm sure that isn't a word, but it should be) is evident even in your prose. I lovd the lyrical quality of this piece. It reeks of the sea, and metaphor abounds.
One tiny nit.
'But, who is not somewhat fearful of the genetic clock ticking with its mysterious chimes always at the ready?' - lose the comma after the 'But' and reinsert it after 'clock'.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Your poetickiness (I'm sure that isn't a word, but it should be) is evident even in your prose. I lovd the lyrical quality of this piece. It reeks of the sea, and metaphor abounds.
One tiny nit.
'But, who is not somewhat fearful of the genetic clock ticking with its mysterious chimes always at the ready?' - lose the comma after the 'But' and reinsert it after 'clock'.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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I like that word. Where two are gathered a word is sanctioned I read somewhere! You'd love Selina Stambi if you aren't familiar already. She used to go by "Reaching for the Stars". I always try and think of her work before I write a story. She is very poetic when she writes and REMEMBERS to be so.
I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this. It's really my style if no one's looking. I'll fix that nit. Thanks a million. mike
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mikey,
A rather enigmatic write here. There is somewhat of a mystery surrounding the narrator of the piece, one that I have not convinced myself about yet!
A moments lapse - a think moments needs an apostrophe, or momentary lapse.
a moments regard. - apostrophe here too.
But, who is not somewhat fearful of the genetic clock ticking with its mysterious chimes always at the ready. - sort of feel this should have a question mark to end.
Are you not familiar with the gift of gab? Are you not clear about spinning a tale of titillating tittering jibber jabber? - I love the language of this piece. The alliterative nature and feeling of the words.
But, this feels right in every way. lol
G
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi Mikey,
A rather enigmatic write here. There is somewhat of a mystery surrounding the narrator of the piece, one that I have not convinced myself about yet!
A moments lapse - a think moments needs an apostrophe, or momentary lapse.
a moments regard. - apostrophe here too.
But, who is not somewhat fearful of the genetic clock ticking with its mysterious chimes always at the ready. - sort of feel this should have a question mark to end.
Are you not familiar with the gift of gab? Are you not clear about spinning a tale of titillating tittering jibber jabber? - I love the language of this piece. The alliterative nature and feeling of the words.
But, this feels right in every way. lol
G
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Wow, Gman. This is exactly the response I was hoping for. I'm delighted you enjoyed. This is very me, and what I would write for my own enjoyment. So, your reaction is major encouraging.
Thanks soooo much for remembering to review and offer help. That is most appreciated. I'll make those corrections. mike
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
HHHHMMMM maybe yu should change doctors.
Cute and a little risqué .
But nicely told story and may as well head for adventure.
Is the romantic in you coming to a head dear friend?
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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HHHHMMMM maybe yu should change doctors.
Cute and a little risqué .
But nicely told story and may as well head for adventure.
Is the romantic in you coming to a head dear friend?
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Yeah. I think I need to gut someone and have a goblet of blood, huh? Hahaha. Maybe this mermaid. I do like fish quite a bit. mike
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Now that the mike I know
Comment from nordicgirl
You may or may NOT be the best poet around, but damn, boy, no one can come up with shit like this but YOU!!!!
Holy crap. What the hell got inside your brain? This is funny as hell, but it also gets my mind thinking. You are a genius. NG
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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You may or may NOT be the best poet around, but damn, boy, no one can come up with shit like this but YOU!!!!
Holy crap. What the hell got inside your brain? This is funny as hell, but it also gets my mind thinking. You are a genius. NG
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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YAY! I was beginning to think you were abandoning me for a more talented guy. HAHAHA! Well, poet, writer, hot chick, whatever. Remember, this is the real me writing. This is how I write if I feel like it. So, if you like this, you like me. WHOOO HOOOO! I'm back. :)) Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from KarlSlevin
Another bit of fun. But what an epic, I can almost tatste the salt, it kind of inspires me to try something a little more adventurous. Well maybe after a few more attempts
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Another bit of fun. But what an epic, I can almost tatste the salt, it kind of inspires me to try something a little more adventurous. Well maybe after a few more attempts
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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This is a blast to write like this, Karl. It's a little scary I admit. You never know what the sane people are going to say. But they can surprise you here. Just take a deep breath and go for it. Write whatever you want. Thanks for the great encouragement. Most appreciated. mike
