What Year Is It?
Non-fiction26 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
Steve, I just wrote a brilliant for this piece, but the system ate it.
I believe this is The Year of the Wrong Turn. I keep bumping into walls. Don't laugh. Anyway, I love your prose, and I wish you'd write more.
You sling words with the best of me.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Steve, I just wrote a brilliant for this piece, but the system ate it.
I believe this is The Year of the Wrong Turn. I keep bumping into walls. Don't laugh. Anyway, I love your prose, and I wish you'd write more.
You sling words with the best of me.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Very kind of you to say so, but there are very few people who sling words with the best of you!
Writing prose is so much harder than poetry. I sat down this morning and peeled off a winner for the ABC Poem contest in about 10 minutes.
Steve
Comment from strandregs
Congratulations and let me remind you.
it is the brides parents who are suppoded to pay for the wedding.
all you have to do is provide:
Oven
dishwasher
fridge
washing machine
car
and tickets to australia/canada
so they can move and stop draining your meager resources.:-)) Z.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Congratulations and let me remind you.
it is the brides parents who are suppoded to pay for the wedding.
all you have to do is provide:
Oven
dishwasher
fridge
washing machine
car
and tickets to australia/canada
so they can move and stop draining your meager resources.:-)) Z.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Zelick.
All we have to do is get ourselves to the other end of the North Island - but since we have zero money to spare at the best of times, even that will be difficult. Good thing e don't have a daughter, or she would have been getting married in rags!
Steve
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Well from rags you can only go to riches.
and famous as well if you ever get round
to publishing your good stuff :-)) Z.
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Fame can go take a jump, but a little bit of riches wouldn't go amiss!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
What a great entry to the contest. Very nicely done.
I love the trail of tears you took us down to explain your delema.
And on to the year of the teeth.
I had to laugh as I have witnessed a lot myself but never looked at it like this.
Very good and good luck
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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What a great entry to the contest. Very nicely done.
I love the trail of tears you took us down to explain your delema.
And on to the year of the teeth.
I had to laugh as I have witnessed a lot myself but never looked at it like this.
Very good and good luck
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Barb - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from jpduck
You are a great humourist. I do wish you wouldn't waste so much time on that poetry stuff. ;-)) All good wishes for the Year of the Teeth.
Adrian
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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You are a great humourist. I do wish you wouldn't waste so much time on that poetry stuff. ;-)) All good wishes for the Year of the Teeth.
Adrian
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Well, I would write more prose, if only it weren't so damn difficult! I could have written a screamingly funny poem about the car breaking down in about half the time.
Steve
Comment from Spitfire
What a jazzy write. We have to learn to laugh at these expensive mishaps or wind up in the loony bin. That said, I'm trying to think what took over my year. Oh, I know--it's an ongoing class in how to communicate with the spirit world. Now I'm outta here. :-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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What a jazzy write. We have to learn to laugh at these expensive mishaps or wind up in the loony bin. That said, I'm trying to think what took over my year. Oh, I know--it's an ongoing class in how to communicate with the spirit world. Now I'm outta here. :-)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Spirit world , huh? Any chance any of those spirits can help out next time my car breaks down?
Steve
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You have your own spirit guides, but you need to ask them for help. That's their purpose. Try it next time.
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I'm afraid I have absolutely no belief - I am a sceptic of the first order...
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An important part of soul growth is to think outside the box. Are you afraid it will work?
BTW, here's something else to try, next time you need a ride say "on". Next time you can't find an item say "reach" and forget about it. Works unless the item was deep sixed. Scientifically, the sound or vibration of the word resonates with the part of the brain that remembers things.
Try it. I dare you. :-)
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Can I say that I'm sceptical about souls, as well? Nothing to be afraid of.
Of your two suggestions, one has some sort of pseudo-scientific basis - I do believe strongly in the power of the mind. The other, saying 'on' if I need a ride seems nothing more than mumbo-jumbo.
Hope I'm not offending you - I just don't see things that way...
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It worked for my sister. :)
I've never had occasion to try it.
It's okay not to agree. Life would be dull if we all thought the same way.
Comment from I am Cat
WEll, first of all... congrats on the wedding, secondly, congrats that it's a SON, and not a daughter getting married. If your traditions are like ours, you won't have to pay for those! LOL ;)
My daughter gets married in June, and yes... we are paying for that... damn, that's as much as a car! :( (well, not as much as MY car, but as much as some cars) LOL
Sounds like a fun year! It was the year of the car in 2015 for me... but I didn't have one breaking, thankfully... so I'm grateful for that.
I hope you get to get one you love. ;)
Fun fun fun... It's been the year of the vet bills for us this year... two little dogs and both having difficulties... ugh
I 'enjoyed' your story... well, maybe 'enjoy' isn't the right word... it was a bit painful! lol
this cracked me up:
When that little symbol that looks kinda like Aladdin's lamp starts flashing orange, or worse still, red, it doesn't mean drive carefully the last few miles home and call the garage in the morning. It means stop the car right now and get someone knowledgeable to come and fix it. It would probably help to check the oil once in a while, too! (important information, that's for sure!) LOL
Always good to know!
well done and good luck in the contest STeve!
Cat
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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WEll, first of all... congrats on the wedding, secondly, congrats that it's a SON, and not a daughter getting married. If your traditions are like ours, you won't have to pay for those! LOL ;)
My daughter gets married in June, and yes... we are paying for that... damn, that's as much as a car! :( (well, not as much as MY car, but as much as some cars) LOL
Sounds like a fun year! It was the year of the car in 2015 for me... but I didn't have one breaking, thankfully... so I'm grateful for that.
I hope you get to get one you love. ;)
Fun fun fun... It's been the year of the vet bills for us this year... two little dogs and both having difficulties... ugh
I 'enjoyed' your story... well, maybe 'enjoy' isn't the right word... it was a bit painful! lol
this cracked me up:
When that little symbol that looks kinda like Aladdin's lamp starts flashing orange, or worse still, red, it doesn't mean drive carefully the last few miles home and call the garage in the morning. It means stop the car right now and get someone knowledgeable to come and fix it. It would probably help to check the oil once in a while, too! (important information, that's for sure!) LOL
Always good to know!
well done and good luck in the contest STeve!
Cat
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Cat.
We are irrevocably poor and there's always something to keep us that way!
Steve
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bummer. :(
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Excellent. Cars are like houses, though. And people. When they reach a certain age, things start to drop off, seize up, stop working, creak, collapse and... well, yes.
I'm a dog. In the Chinese calendar? I'm jealous that you're a dragon. That's what I would have been by choice. Or a horse. I'll quit bitchin' now. Part of being a dog, I guess.
Steve, this is a solid piece of writing. It held my interest, and made me chuckle a few times! Well done. I should think this will be in the running.
Unlike your car.
Av
at a cost of $150(.) What next? - insert full stop.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Excellent. Cars are like houses, though. And people. When they reach a certain age, things start to drop off, seize up, stop working, creak, collapse and... well, yes.
I'm a dog. In the Chinese calendar? I'm jealous that you're a dragon. That's what I would have been by choice. Or a horse. I'll quit bitchin' now. Part of being a dog, I guess.
Steve, this is a solid piece of writing. It held my interest, and made me chuckle a few times! Well done. I should think this will be in the running.
Unlike your car.
Av
at a cost of $150(.) What next? - insert full stop.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Av.
And I don't need reminding about things creaking and seizing up!
Steve
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LOL! Sorry. ;)
Comment from Marykelly
Using the signs of the Chinese Zodiac as a backdrop for a classification system of things that dominate a year is something everyone can relate to. It is also a very clever way to introduce the real topic of the essay, car trouble which again everyone can relate to. The tone of the essay is tongue-in-cheek which adds to the humor underlying the piece. The narrative flows easily. well done
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Using the signs of the Chinese Zodiac as a backdrop for a classification system of things that dominate a year is something everyone can relate to. It is also a very clever way to introduce the real topic of the essay, car trouble which again everyone can relate to. The tone of the essay is tongue-in-cheek which adds to the humor underlying the piece. The narrative flows easily. well done
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Mary.
Steve
Comment from Authorsue
Let me start off by saying I really enjoyed this. I love humor, and this one is really clever. I loved the 'prehensile tail', although 'jabbering senselessly' might have drawn a more vivid picture of the politicians.
I would change the beginning of the third paragraph to: 'I may not believe this nonsense, but I do like....' The only reason for the change is because it's easy to misread. In one of my senile dyslexic moments, I read it to say you did not like your Chinese symbol. A few lines later, I had to go back and re-read. We both know pulling the reader out is a death knell.
I was a little confused at first about you creating a Zodiac (I would have said wheel)
but I eventually got it. I would change 'the' bank account to 'one's' bank account. (Okay, I'm nit-picking now. Next to one to complain about.) Anyway, I'm sure by now that you realized 2016 should have been 2015.
July-winter-? July is summer here. You might want add an aside or change that.
Anyway, I can't say enough about how much I enjoyed this. Most people seem to think it's hard to write humor. In my case, it's hard for me to keep the humor under control while I try to write a murder scene.
Good work. Sue
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Let me start off by saying I really enjoyed this. I love humor, and this one is really clever. I loved the 'prehensile tail', although 'jabbering senselessly' might have drawn a more vivid picture of the politicians.
I would change the beginning of the third paragraph to: 'I may not believe this nonsense, but I do like....' The only reason for the change is because it's easy to misread. In one of my senile dyslexic moments, I read it to say you did not like your Chinese symbol. A few lines later, I had to go back and re-read. We both know pulling the reader out is a death knell.
I was a little confused at first about you creating a Zodiac (I would have said wheel)
but I eventually got it. I would change 'the' bank account to 'one's' bank account. (Okay, I'm nit-picking now. Next to one to complain about.) Anyway, I'm sure by now that you realized 2016 should have been 2015.
July-winter-? July is summer here. You might want add an aside or change that.
Anyway, I can't say enough about how much I enjoyed this. Most people seem to think it's hard to write humor. In my case, it's hard for me to keep the humor under control while I try to write a murder scene.
Good work. Sue
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Sue, thanks for the nit-picking. It is always good to have a reviewer mention specific things - I may not change them, but I will certainly go back and look at them and evaluate the suggestion. Great review.
Steve
Comment from TallySally
Very well written and entertaining story. Very believable - I know being at the mercy of "the car!"
Good luck with your fine entry.
God bless and my best,
Relda
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Very well written and entertaining story. Very believable - I know being at the mercy of "the car!"
Good luck with your fine entry.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Relda.
Steve
