Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

s is a well written piece which definitely gets across your thoughts and ideas on the matter.

The only suggestion I would have would be to maybe very the sentence start a bit more with other words / letters rather than 'o'.

All the best
G

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 Comment Written 11-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016

Hi G, Many thanks for your review and rating. I hadn't realised that most of the sentences start an O word, and I will see If I can alter some of the passages and will think about this and see I can come up with. I appreciate your feedback. Cheers