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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Music Man"poems from Picture This Challenge
44 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Sandra,
This is a good poem in response to this picture. This sounds like a very smart and talented man. It is good that he taught playing music is fun. Maybe one of the townspeople will take his place now that he is gone.
I must of started in the club after this picture for I don't remember it.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Sandra,
This is a good poem in response to this picture. This sounds like a very smart and talented man. It is good that he taught playing music is fun. Maybe one of the townspeople will take his place now that he is gone.
I must of started in the club after this picture for I don't remember it.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Gosh, that's a few years ago! I did enjoy being a member of that group, and will try and make time to participate again. Thank you for the lovely review, Joan, I really appreciated it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You?re welcome, Sandra
It would be good to have you in the group again
Joan
Comment from royowen
Well done Sandra, this is most imaginative, a first class post as your particular reading of the artwork posted. Beautifully written, nicely refrained as well a treat with the written verse, in articulate well presented language, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Well done Sandra, this is most imaginative, a first class post as your particular reading of the artwork posted. Beautifully written, nicely refrained as well a treat with the written verse, in articulate well presented language, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much, my friend. I did find this picture the hardest so far, but I am glad you enjoyed it. I am working on the next picture now, it's lovely! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
Well done, Sandra! Your interpretation of the image was excellent. Sad ending, but great poetry, my friend. I think Bowie passing away has had an effect on all of us as he was, just like your music man, such a huge influence on so many.
Love from a sunny (but very cold) France,
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Well done, Sandra! Your interpretation of the image was excellent. Sad ending, but great poetry, my friend. I think Bowie passing away has had an effect on all of us as he was, just like your music man, such a huge influence on so many.
Love from a sunny (but very cold) France,
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 17-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you, dear friend! If you are around I will have a chat in text on Skype, reply to this and I will know. xxxx
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Sandra,
What an imaginative take on the picture. The execution also is excellent and so easy to read. What a shame that the wandering musician has "left the building".
Reg
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Dear Sandra,
What an imaginative take on the picture. The execution also is excellent and so easy to read. What a shame that the wandering musician has "left the building".
Reg
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much, Reg, for your lovely review. It took me ages to come up with a take on this picture, it really was hard this time. I'm glad you enjoyed it, even though he 'left the building' lol! I loved that expression!! Can I steal it? LOL! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Curly Girly
I enjoyed reading this poem, which is the third one I've read with this image. Yours told a sad story but with fond memories of a man who people loved due to his music and cheer.
Nicole
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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I enjoyed reading this poem, which is the third one I've read with this image. Yours told a sad story but with fond memories of a man who people loved due to his music and cheer.
Nicole
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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It was a hard picture this time, Nicole, it took me ages to think of something. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Lee, (Humpwhistle) said it reminded him of the Creole funerals, where they all have their umbrella up the whole time and sing and dance through the streets as they go to the cemetery. Sounds good to me! LOL, leave this world on a song and a dance. Thanks, my friend!! :) Sandra xx
Comment from Pantygynt
What was bouncing along full of sweetness and light suddenly loses its gloss and the fun goes out of our world as it did in the town attended so regularly by the one you called your music man.
The twist in the tale is a sting in the tail in this sweet little poem that describes this guy so well.
The main body of the poem is contained in the iambic heptameters, with a refrain type comment in tetrameter alternating with trimeter where only the first line is repeated each time.
Absolutely delightful.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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What was bouncing along full of sweetness and light suddenly loses its gloss and the fun goes out of our world as it did in the town attended so regularly by the one you called your music man.
The twist in the tale is a sting in the tail in this sweet little poem that describes this guy so well.
The main body of the poem is contained in the iambic heptameters, with a refrain type comment in tetrameter alternating with trimeter where only the first line is repeated each time.
Absolutely delightful.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Jim, thank you so much for your lovely thoughts on my take of the picture. :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Eric1
Hi Sandra, I really enjoyed this sumptuous poem about the music man,it bounces along at a fair old rate, I am in this group too but haven't entered one contest yet due to work, love this one though my friend.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi Sandra, I really enjoyed this sumptuous poem about the music man,it bounces along at a fair old rate, I am in this group too but haven't entered one contest yet due to work, love this one though my friend.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi Eric, thank you, my friend. I didn't think I had read one from you yet, but work must come first, it's what puts the bread on the table and pays the bills! I'm glad you liked this one but it very nearly didn't happen it was a hard picture to do this time. Perhaps I'll get to see one of yours next time, it might inspire you to write a story-poem. :) Sandra xxx
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I will keep watching sandra
Comment from Treischel
I really liked this interpretation that you poetically rendered of this incredible image. You created a lyrical story poem that is colorful and mythical in nature. A delightful tale that continues on beyond his death. Great rhythm and rhyme. It flowed beautifully and was a delight to read.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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I really liked this interpretation that you poetically rendered of this incredible image. You created a lyrical story poem that is colorful and mythical in nature. A delightful tale that continues on beyond his death. Great rhythm and rhyme. It flowed beautifully and was a delight to read.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Gosh, thank you so much, Tom, that is so nice of you. It was a hard picture this time, but I enjoyed the challenge. Thank you and a big hug for the 6 shiny stars, my dear friend. I am delighted you enjoyed it.. Sorry I am late replying, it is the school holidays this week, and I have been taking the grandchildren for walks in the forest here, it's been fun, but so tiring! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from rama devi
Second review (I've got to sign off so didn't read yet but since i know you made edits, upgrading, lest I forget. Will try to return soon and re-read...will let you know if I spot anything.
First review (FOUR stars)
I like how you approached this picture challenge--a story-poem, well told in your fine narrative style with good rhymes. The flow is not as smooth as it could be, mostly because of odd punctuation choices (IMHO). It made me stumble just enough to have to deduct a star, my dear friend. Here are some suggestions:
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the month he comes to visit us,(no ,) has always been the same.
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We all call him our 'Music Man'(-- or ;)
he brings us joy each year;
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But this year was so different when no music came our way;
we told each other, he's just late, and waited every day.
Suggest:
But this year was so different when no music came our way.
We told each other, "he's just late", and waited every day.
or:
But this year was so different when no music came our way.
We told each other, "He's just late". We waited every day.
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Then(,) when his time had long passed by, so we all understood,
We still call him our 'Music Man'(--)
he sends his melody,(no ,)
by raining notes down on us with
angelic harmony.
I like you use of poetic devices, especially the alliteration of M here:
We all call him our 'Music Man'
he brings us joy each year;
the town will buzz with merriment,
the moment he is here.
and also in your lovely closing:
We still call him our 'Music Man'
he sends his melody,
by raining notes down on us with
angelic harmony.
Hugs,
rd
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Second review (I've got to sign off so didn't read yet but since i know you made edits, upgrading, lest I forget. Will try to return soon and re-read...will let you know if I spot anything.
First review (FOUR stars)
I like how you approached this picture challenge--a story-poem, well told in your fine narrative style with good rhymes. The flow is not as smooth as it could be, mostly because of odd punctuation choices (IMHO). It made me stumble just enough to have to deduct a star, my dear friend. Here are some suggestions:
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the month he comes to visit us,(no ,) has always been the same.
*
We all call him our 'Music Man'(-- or ;)
he brings us joy each year;
*
But this year was so different when no music came our way;
we told each other, he's just late, and waited every day.
Suggest:
But this year was so different when no music came our way.
We told each other, "he's just late", and waited every day.
or:
But this year was so different when no music came our way.
We told each other, "He's just late". We waited every day.
*
Then(,) when his time had long passed by, so we all understood,
We still call him our 'Music Man'(--)
he sends his melody,(no ,)
by raining notes down on us with
angelic harmony.
I like you use of poetic devices, especially the alliteration of M here:
We all call him our 'Music Man'
he brings us joy each year;
the town will buzz with merriment,
the moment he is here.
and also in your lovely closing:
We still call him our 'Music Man'
he sends his melody,
by raining notes down on us with
angelic harmony.
Hugs,
rd
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you, as always, my friend, for your great review. Your help and advice is always welcome. I have made the corrections, and can hear the difference when I read it out aloud. Although you didn't say so, I have added the two( -- ) after 'Music Man'-- in all the short verses... (We all call our Music Man-- ) would you agree with that? Thanks again, my friend! :) Sandra xxx
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Yes--I agree with the repeated edits...implied...
:-)) Thanks for your gracious reply, as always! Heading for second review now...
Love,
rd
Comment from danpald
the beauty of the poem
Flows with music inside
For the power of the Music Man
Seems to be inspired
To listen in the air at night
You hear the soft sound
That comes along a breeze
His music is still around
Softly as the rain does fall
The melody plays load
Upon the roof in the night
On window panes proud
Music fills the air
With rain that comes this day
Formed with the Music Man
A symphony of heaven's play
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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the beauty of the poem
Flows with music inside
For the power of the Music Man
Seems to be inspired
To listen in the air at night
You hear the soft sound
That comes along a breeze
His music is still around
Softly as the rain does fall
The melody plays load
Upon the roof in the night
On window panes proud
Music fills the air
With rain that comes this day
Formed with the Music Man
A symphony of heaven's play
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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What a lovely poem to say that you enjoyed mine, thank you so much, Dan, I really appreciate your words. :) xsx Sandra
