His Better Half
Making the best of winter67 total reviews
Comment from scd41
It is good to be his better half then his bitter half or bête noire. It is better to 'quibble, play and then laugh' than deserting the partner in old age. You have acted wisely by making peace with winter as there is no escape. Your well rhymed poem is amusing
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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It is good to be his better half then his bitter half or bête noire. It is better to 'quibble, play and then laugh' than deserting the partner in old age. You have acted wisely by making peace with winter as there is no escape. Your well rhymed poem is amusing
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouaging review. It does seem better to make peace.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from LIJ Red
With a gloom and doom forecast for early next week, maybe better half needs to keep the old man company. Excellent rhyming quatrains.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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With a gloom and doom forecast for early next week, maybe better half needs to keep the old man company. Excellent rhyming quatrains.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you LIJ for your encouaging review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from nancyjam
This is an imaginative and delightful look
at winter.
Great use of personification. Love the better half trying to
smooth things out and create the beautiful part of winter.
Strong rhyme and meter. Nice flow.
I enjoyed it.
Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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This is an imaginative and delightful look
at winter.
Great use of personification. Love the better half trying to
smooth things out and create the beautiful part of winter.
Strong rhyme and meter. Nice flow.
I enjoyed it.
Nancy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Nancy for your encouaging review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from DonandVicki
A nice tribute to the old man "winter " good structure to your verse and the rhyme does not get it the way of the flow of the meaning of the poem.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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A nice tribute to the old man "winter " good structure to your verse and the rhyme does not get it the way of the flow of the meaning of the poem.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you DonaldVicki for your encouaging review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from donnadiann
This is an intriguing poem with lots of humor in it, The tone is easy and simplistic. Very good alliterations...blusters, blows, slush, sleet. Interesting comparison of old man winter and its harsh effects. Thanks for sharing this poem:)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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This is an intriguing poem with lots of humor in it, The tone is easy and simplistic. Very good alliterations...blusters, blows, slush, sleet. Interesting comparison of old man winter and its harsh effects. Thanks for sharing this poem:)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Donna for your encouaging review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Very well written and with it you are making the best of winter. Good abcb rhyme maintained throughout and nice reference to Old Man Winter's better half. She, I'm sure, is responsible for some of the better days we get in winter, when the sun shines an the air is crisp. I think she must be responsible for your lovely third stanza -
For better or for worse, I go
To smooth his snowdrifts on the lawn.
I build ice castles by the lake
And sprinkle diamond dust 'til dawn.
Lovely write and an enjoyable read. Very nicely displayed. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Very well written and with it you are making the best of winter. Good abcb rhyme maintained throughout and nice reference to Old Man Winter's better half. She, I'm sure, is responsible for some of the better days we get in winter, when the sun shines an the air is crisp. I think she must be responsible for your lovely third stanza -
For better or for worse, I go
To smooth his snowdrifts on the lawn.
I build ice castles by the lake
And sprinkle diamond dust 'til dawn.
Lovely write and an enjoyable read. Very nicely displayed. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you Dorothy for your encouaging review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from doggymad
I love this idea of building ice castles and smoothing snowdrifts.
This poem shines like a sunbeam in the midst of the cold and damp weather we have been experiencing
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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I love this idea of building ice castles and smoothing snowdrifts.
This poem shines like a sunbeam in the midst of the cold and damp weather we have been experiencing
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouaging review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dean Kuch
Old Woman Winter? Or, should she be addressed as, Mrs. Old Man Winter? I like to think that the ladies of today are far more independent, therefore are in need of their own identities without having to associate their name with their husband's.
Anyhow, this is very well rhymed, Janet, and it was fun to read. Just a lighthearted musing on a cold, wintry day.
Well done!
~Dean
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Old Woman Winter? Or, should she be addressed as, Mrs. Old Man Winter? I like to think that the ladies of today are far more independent, therefore are in need of their own identities without having to associate their name with their husband's.
Anyhow, this is very well rhymed, Janet, and it was fun to read. Just a lighthearted musing on a cold, wintry day.
Well done!
~Dean
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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I was going for "Ice Queen" but that had a whole other connotation. Haha! Not being a feminist, Mrs. Winter will do. I'm really trying to avoid that "old" label. I did have fun writing this one as I am impatiently waiting for Spring.
Thanks for the fun review Dean.
Janet
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Hahaha, Ice Queen is perfect, Janet, lol.
I really enjoyed reading it too.
Have a super day, and try to stay warm (but don't melt, heh-heh).
~Dean ;)
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Hahaha, Ice Queen is perfect, Janet, lol.
I really enjoyed reading it too.
Have a super day, and try to stay warm (but don't melt, heh-heh).
~Dean ;)
~Dean
Comment from patcelaw
As one who lives where we get little snow this was a fun read. I like the better half of old man winter line. I like the presentation as well. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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As one who lives where we get little snow this was a fun read. I like the better half of old man winter line. I like the presentation as well. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the encouraging review Patricia. We don't have much snow this year, but it is bitter cold and I am impatiently waiting for Spring.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Douglas Paul
Well this was great fun. The poem flows smoothy with unforced rhyme. It brings up some nice images - ice castles by the lake is my favorite. And writing it as Winter's better half really makes it tick. Well done
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Well this was great fun. The poem flows smoothy with unforced rhyme. It brings up some nice images - ice castles by the lake is my favorite. And writing it as Winter's better half really makes it tick. Well done
Comment Written 11-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2016
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Thank you Douglas for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
