Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

A-h-h-h-hhhh, very nice haiku, Ulla.
It's wonderfully well composed--featuring the aromatic almond tree and clear as crystal blue skies above and beyond.
You sprinkled in some subtle alliteration in your first line--not too overbearing.
Your satori features the tell-tale "Ah-ha!" moment all haiku lovers look for, using the backdrop of blue skies as a catalyst for a "sea of blue".

Wonderfully done...
~Dean

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Wow, Dean, what can I say. You have made me a very happy woman. This is so new to me writing any form of poem, but I am fascinated with the Haiku. I have to thank Gypsy Blue Rose for that. What amazes me is that I have been to Japan so many times in my lifetime and never discovered this before now. I wish you knew what your review means to me. Thank you!! All best Ulla:))

reply by Dean Kuch on 10-Feb-2016

Hey, I calls 'em like I sees 'em, Ulla.
This is a very good haiku in my humble opinion.
You are more than welcome.
~Dean

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Thanks again. I am so pleased. Ulla:))

reply by Anonymous Member on 12-Feb-2016

Hey, I calls 'em like I sees 'em, Ulla.
This is a very good haiku in my humble opinion.
You are more than welcome.
~Dean

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

Hi Ulla,
Beautiful Haiku my friend, I love the content.
You have chosen a beautiful art for your poem,
it meets the rules of the poem, perfect Haiku.

I wish you good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Thank you so much Bryana. The photo you see shows our almond trees as they are right no. In full flower. Thank you so much, Bryana. All the best. Ulla

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Ulla

= Beautiful picture from your yard.
= Great haiku in honor of the almond.
= Nice choice of words in this--everyone counts.

* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie <> Jax (*>*)

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Hi Jax, thank you so much. It is a beautiful sight at the moment. Our mountain sides and valleys are painted in pink from their flowers. All the best. Ulla

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is a lovely poem that creates a clear picture of the almond trees. Excellent haiku form that shows the beauty of these trees. Against deep blue sea is a wonderful last line that adds to the strength of the poem.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Thank you so much. I am pleased that you liked it. All best. Ulla

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Get a room ready, I'm coming to visit!! Wow, this image is stunning - the lovely almond trees in flower, and the deep blue sea as a backdrop. I can almost smell the flowers and the sea together - like heaven.
Here (Southern California) we have orange and lemon trees near the ocean, and our climate is also called Mediterranean. :)
Nicely done,
Carol

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Ha, ha, ha, thanks so much Carol, you are most welcome. The almond bloom as we have it right now, is a sight to behold. Then comes all the hard work in the autumn. We got eighty trees, among all the other fruit trees. Never a dull moment. But I wouldn't be without it. All the best. Ulla

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Ulla - this is a very lovely haiku with a beautiful picture. Your lines two an three interconnect well and your line one is a perfect satori. Lovely ready and it must be lovely to see it at present in your garden. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Thank you very much. I am so pleased. This is all so new to me. All best. Ulla

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

You are an outstanding poetess and authoress as I made up the word-sorry, not sorry about your work because it is fantastic.......you are way above board....

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thank you so much for this fantastic review. All the best. Ulla

reply by foxangie123 on 09-Feb-2016

Dear you deserved it.. Hugs..

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I suppose it won't be long now before we start to see the spring blossoms here too. With the haiku as I understand it there are two distinct parts. The grammatical sentence and the satori line which should provide the aha moment. If the grammatical sentence runs on into the satori line as here you tend to lose the aha quality as the satori becomes predictable.

The 5-7-5 is not nearly so stringent in its requirement's needing only the correct syllable count. This is fine as a 5-7-5 where it makes a pleasant statement about the almond blossom. As a haiku it is less successful. I will grade it 5 as a 5-7-5. As a haiku to be strictly honest it is probably only a 4.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thank you so much. I've only ever written any of this for about two weeks or so. It's a whole new world for me. As such I take your review as a grand compliment. I am learning. Don't even know whether I am crawling yet, but I am fascinated by the whole concept. Have been to Japan a lot in my lifetime and I'm surprised I've never seen it. Thanks to Gypsy, my eyes are opening. All the best. Ulla

reply by Pantygynt on 09-Feb-2016

I am told that the Japanese write them in a single line of 17 syllables or fewer. Given Japanese script I don't think I'd recognize one either. Lol.

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

he,he I expressed myself wrongly. What I meant was to ever heard about them. Always been fascinated with Japanese culture. :))

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is a beautiful piece of poetry dear Ulla! I love how you used scents to raise your point. However I'm having a hard time understanding that the almond trees are against the deep blue sea? If you could explain?
Anyhoo thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016

Thank you so much for this review. Well, for me that is easy because when I look through the blossom, the deep blue of the Med is clearly visible. It may not be so clear from the photo, as we are up in the mountains, and a distance from the sea. But that is the view. Thanks again for your review. All the best. Ulla

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

A great 5-7-5 poem entry. Your words are well chosen. The artwork compliments the theme of the poem.


Thanks for sharing--
Bill~

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2016

Thank you so much Bill. All best. Ulla