Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

This story is easy to follow and very enjoyable but I might suggest that you run this through the spellchecker I noticed a couple misspelled words. Other than that a good tale.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2016

Thanks ever so much!
Ricky1024

Comment from Javed05

Excellent

I like following

"Dr. Ricky this human is going!"
"Yes and apparent massive hemorrhage due to severe brain damage."
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"How can you handle this sir?"
"He is your own son!"
"I shall do the best I can."
"it's a shame doctor he's only eighteen."

This is a good write up. it flows smoothly .creates good imagery.I like the language used in this piece. it is engaging. Thank you for sharing your work

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2016

Thanks ever so much!
Ricky1024

Comment from Sprite1313

Poor

I found this story to abrupt, full of typos and grammatical errors and confusing to read. I will say if it's meant to be to the point it does that. I didn't feel connected to the scene or the story line.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2016

Thanks ever so much for your time and star... Ricky.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. I feel your pain, Ricky. I too lost an only son when he was sixteen. It is something one never recovers from completely. I see you mention your son in a lot of your writings. You loved him very much and you write great tributes to Jason. I wish you the best.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2016

Yes, Jason was my world...
Sorry for your loss, too.
Ricky 1024.