Ruth in Heart Led to Ruiz in Dialect
A hospital, a room number, heavy accents and oh my hell!19 total reviews
Comment from Gone but not forgotten
Thanks for the wonderful laugh this early morning. I worked in hospitals for a long time, far too long, and were it not for hilarious moments like this (so well described), I would never have made it. And I was in administration...if that gives you any sense of how stressful ANY hospital work is! Thanks for making me smile. Best.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thanks for the wonderful laugh this early morning. I worked in hospitals for a long time, far too long, and were it not for hilarious moments like this (so well described), I would never have made it. And I was in administration...if that gives you any sense of how stressful ANY hospital work is! Thanks for making me smile. Best.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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What a great treat to return to FanStory following the Memorial weekend to a bevy of wonderful reviews. Thank you Wordcraft, for your RR&R and I am so happy to have built endorphins for you this Tuesday morning. I very much appreciate your continued interest in my work. Happy Tuesday!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mary,
There is a great warmth to your writing in this well written piece. you use nice touches of humour throughout which heightens the seriousness of the situation in contrast.
Good piece.
GMG
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Hi Mary,
There is a great warmth to your writing in this well written piece. you use nice touches of humour throughout which heightens the seriousness of the situation in contrast.
Good piece.
GMG
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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What a great treat to return to FanStory following the Memorial weekend to a bevy of wonderful reviews. Thank you for a second review on Ruth/Ruiz. I appreciate hearing from you. Thank you so very much!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mary
= OMGoodness! What an awful time you had. Jeesh.
= I'm pleased that Ruth came through and is thriving.
= My brother-in-law hit those germ gels at the hospital all the time when my mother-in-law was in the hospital. So often, we pointed out everyone we passed. Tim has the cleanest of hands. (*<*)
= Excellent storytelling.
* * A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down * *
Cheers â?¦ Jacqueline / Jax
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
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Hi, Mary
= OMGoodness! What an awful time you had. Jeesh.
= I'm pleased that Ruth came through and is thriving.
= My brother-in-law hit those germ gels at the hospital all the time when my mother-in-law was in the hospital. So often, we pointed out everyone we passed. Tim has the cleanest of hands. (*<*)
= Excellent storytelling.
* * A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down * *
Cheers â?¦ Jacqueline / Jax
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
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Thank you so much, Jax, for your RR&R and great review. If I remember correctly from a past conversation, you lived in Downey, CA? This took place at the Downey hospital!
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OMG! Yep, moved to Downey in 1960, but left to go back to Ohio the next day after I graduated! (*<*)
Comment from DonandVicki
A very emotional and well constructed true story. I like how youe so easily put your emotions into your work. Very well done on this story.
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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A very emotional and well constructed true story. I like how youe so easily put your emotions into your work. Very well done on this story.
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so very much, Don, for your read and review. I much appreciate your continued follow. Have a wonderful Monday.
Comment from F. Wehr3
You're funny. i enjoyed your story. Put on your big girl panties, nice line. I found a couple of things for your consideration.
and as we neared our destination, obtained room number assignment' This sentence I stumbled over. Maybe 'we' obtained 'the'.
I tend to become germaphobic when in the presence of mass illness;the odor of vomit, or displays of severe cramping.' I think you were going a colon (:) instead of semi-colon?
quickly spotted the only person seemingly in charge and devoid of symptoms; a female security officer." I think you just need a comma instead of semi-colon.
at this point my inside voice is screaming RUN.LIKE.HELL. ' Maybe 'the voice inside my head'... screaming, Run like hell! I like to use italics for thoughts.
Overall, very funny piece.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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You're funny. i enjoyed your story. Put on your big girl panties, nice line. I found a couple of things for your consideration.
and as we neared our destination, obtained room number assignment' This sentence I stumbled over. Maybe 'we' obtained 'the'.
I tend to become germaphobic when in the presence of mass illness;the odor of vomit, or displays of severe cramping.' I think you were going a colon (:) instead of semi-colon?
quickly spotted the only person seemingly in charge and devoid of symptoms; a female security officer." I think you just need a comma instead of semi-colon.
at this point my inside voice is screaming RUN.LIKE.HELL. ' Maybe 'the voice inside my head'... screaming, Run like hell! I like to use italics for thoughts.
Overall, very funny piece.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so much, Russell, for the welcomed edits. I have included all of your suggestions, and very much appreciate your eye. If I could understand how to use the word processing option, I would also make the "phone call" change, but until I've mastered that obstacle...
Thank you so much for your interest in this piece, your help with it, and the continued follow. Have a great weekend!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This has got to be one of the funniest stories, ever.
I love your delightful sense of humor and your telling of an awkward moment that because putty in your masterful hands.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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This has got to be one of the funniest stories, ever.
I love your delightful sense of humor and your telling of an awkward moment that because putty in your masterful hands.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you so much, Rhonda, for your RR&R, and especially the vote of confidence! So glad you enjoyed this. I appreciate you! Have a great weekend.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written story that holds interest throughout.
A touch of off-beat humor thrown in for good measure.
Misfortune seems to be the norm for most hospitals that should instead be attending patients in a positive manner.
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Well written story that holds interest throughout.
A touch of off-beat humor thrown in for good measure.
Misfortune seems to be the norm for most hospitals that should instead be attending patients in a positive manner.
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you, Brett, for your RR&R, and for hanging in for a longer read! I really appreciate you. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Dawn Munro
ROFL - carpeting? In a HOSPITAL? No wonder they made you suit up in protective gear. Every hospital here has shiny tile floors that are disinfected daily.
One tiny nit - apostrophe - nurse(')s station
Also, the nurse's instruction - "Vu an awl if us" is a bit too thick an accent - I caught the guard's, but hers is a big question mark.
I understand germ-a-phobic 100%, and I worked in a large teaching hospital (staff the size of a small town = 20,000).
I commend you for it. :)) (Now I've added to the paranoia, yes?)
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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ROFL - carpeting? In a HOSPITAL? No wonder they made you suit up in protective gear. Every hospital here has shiny tile floors that are disinfected daily.
One tiny nit - apostrophe - nurse(')s station
Also, the nurse's instruction - "Vu an awl if us" is a bit too thick an accent - I caught the guard's, but hers is a big question mark.
I understand germ-a-phobic 100%, and I worked in a large teaching hospital (staff the size of a small town = 20,000).
I commend you for it. :)) (Now I've added to the paranoia, yes?)
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Yes, CARPETING!!! Isn't that the grossest thing?? So far you are the first to mention that aspect of the story.
Thank you for the apostrophe call, much appreciated. Good call, too, on the second accented sentence. I've changed it up too.
I have to tell you, I get a little giddy when I see your input. You get me, girl!!
Have a great evening, Dawn!
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:)) I'm glad you're pleased. Your writing pleases ME!
Comment from Mabaker
That was clever. I laughed openly at your antics, though to be truthful hospitals are a maze built to confuse the unwary. Doctors and nurses seem to breeze through floor after floor, I think they have after-hours courses, 'How to confuse visitors!' Regards Mabaker
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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That was clever. I laughed openly at your antics, though to be truthful hospitals are a maze built to confuse the unwary. Doctors and nurses seem to breeze through floor after floor, I think they have after-hours courses, 'How to confuse visitors!' Regards Mabaker
Comment Written 28-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Thank you, so much, Mabakar, for your great review and the time taken on a longer read.
Yes, I agree and feel like I'm in the Winchester House whenever I find myself trying to navigate hospitals!
Thanks again for the review, and have a great weekend!
Comment from damommy
This is so funny! Full of wit with great scene setting.
Photo sets it off nicely.
This brought me several chuckles, and I'm glad I found it. Your story is very well written and is easy to read. I felt I was there, too.
Thank you. 8-)
reply by the author on 28-May-2016
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This is so funny! Full of wit with great scene setting.
Photo sets it off nicely.
This brought me several chuckles, and I'm glad I found it. Your story is very well written and is easy to read. I felt I was there, too.
Thank you. 8-)
Comment Written 28-May-2016
reply by the author on 28-May-2016
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Thank you so much, Damommy, for the RR&R, and continued interest. I truly appreciate my reviewers! Have a great evening!
