Comment from rmj09

Exceptional

The focus catching the bad men.
The story line development Soni has time to speak to grandfather to discover she is wrong in how she is treating Jacob. When the dogs return with the horses she says where is Jim and Mack starts to go for him. She tells Mack it is her job to eat crow and heads out for him. She says his name and he asks if the dogs and horses are back. She nods and says she needs to apologies to him. He says they'll talk after they catch those men. They ride a while when they discover there are now nine men. They decide to go after them, Soni likes the odds.
The suspense continues forward none will they be able to round up nine men.
The hook will Soni and Jacob iron-out their differences?
Keep on writing.

Barbara, have a great week and weekend. Rita

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016

I am wondering if Jim and Soni will iron out their problems, myself. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

I think this was delightful. Though I must admit, I have missed a couple of your chapters. I've had eye surgery and just trying to get caught up. Not easy. I still can't read really good, yet. I have to get the other eye done and then will have new glasses. That will help. :>) Miss Sally

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2016

You're in my prayers. Thank you.

reply by angelface2 on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks so much Barbara for the prayers. Always appreciated. I still have some swelling in that eye, but it is getting better. Hopefully will be able to get glasses ordered in a couple of weeks.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Thanks for the pleasure of reading another fine chapter of your story. I do believe that the time is getting closer for Jim and Soni to share their true feeling, and I'm ready. LOL! Great chapter. :-)

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

Thank you for dropping by leaving this encouraging review.

Comment from RoseAnderson

Excellent

Nice story with fast-paced and interesting dialogue. It reads like a cautionary tale. I do like your use of detail. Visuals added to a story always make for better storytelling. It gives just enough for the mind to extrapolate with. This is a nice visual: " She stood, brushed dust from her jeans, before she stepped down from the boulder."

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

Thank you for this kind review.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Barbara, I think you have got it all good. It reads fine and that Jim is a lovely solid guy. I think it is Soni who has to look at herself a little bit closer. All the best. Ulla

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

I really do like Jim. What a solid, straight guy he is. Soni needs to smarten up. LOL!

Good chapter, Barbara. I did struggled with the image of Soni hitting her forehead on the saddle horn. Couldn't quite visualize that, but maybe I'm missing something?

Otherwise, great read!

Av

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

I need to change that area. I am not sure what, but I wanted to show her frustration. I will come up with something. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

I think you're okay with the plot you have going...not as complicated as some. I was glad to see the dogs and horses return :)
Some dogs are so smart - one of my three cattle dogs is such a smarty pants - it's like having a six year old kid around.
I so love Kuruk. The name feels familiar then I remembered, there's a Northern California tribe called Karok. Anyway - can't get too much of him.
Nice job!
Carol

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

I like Kuruk too. He's one of my all time favorite characters. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi, Barbara. These small details are the thing that make writing really good in my opinion: " She stood, brushed dust from her jeans, before she stepped down from the boulder."

And: "The shrubbery rustled as Goliath and Mack walked through, each with a horse rein in their mouth."

This entire chapter is so very well done, my friend. Bob

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

Thank you for your wonderful review. It means a lot.

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

What isn't there go enjoy Barb. You capture your audience, wrap them up real warm like, then you set us free like we are in a movie. Love it..

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

Thank you for the encouraging review.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Engaging tale and brisk prose. Your story moves along effortlessly and economically. Once again, I enjoy the inclusion of conflict in each chapter. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2016

I appreciate your kind review.