Good Thing
Transformation27 total reviews
Comment from LanceHill
This is a great outlook to have. Too many times we allow things to affect us negatively. These trials and tribulations make us stronger when we let them. Thanks for reminding us. God bless.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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This is a great outlook to have. Too many times we allow things to affect us negatively. These trials and tribulations make us stronger when we let them. Thanks for reminding us. God bless.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2016
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Good judgment is based on experience and a lot of experience is based on bad judgment. Will Rogers.
We can't control everything that happens to us, but we do have control about how we react to those things.
Thanks for your review and insight,
God bless and my best,
RElda
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Our lives change constantly and we grow accordingly to our needs and what we want to go forward. If a person is not willing to change for the better you get stuck. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016
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Our lives change constantly and we grow accordingly to our needs and what we want to go forward. If a person is not willing to change for the better you get stuck. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016
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Thanks for your review and comments. I'm one of those odd folks who embrace change. For me the issue was making decisions that were good for me.
I appreciate your perspective, Sandra.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Relda: thanks for facing your fears and fighting! You will only get stronger!
My daughter got a bracelet at Scheels. It has one white bead and one black bead. The rest are cream. It reminds her to focus on a day at a time and not the black days.
You do not have to be beaten and broken but a light that shines joy! Feel free to stop in my site anytime! God will direct your path! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016
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Relda: thanks for facing your fears and fighting! You will only get stronger!
My daughter got a bracelet at Scheels. It has one white bead and one black bead. The rest are cream. It reminds her to focus on a day at a time and not the black days.
You do not have to be beaten and broken but a light that shines joy! Feel free to stop in my site anytime! God will direct your path! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 09-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much for the encouragement. I was a mess from my late teens through twenties. Somewhere along then I decided to give my brain priority over my heart. It was also about then that I met my Bud. Between my brain and Bud I got myself put back together. My poem was a look back at that time.
Dont't live in the past anymore, but if visiting it for insight and inspiration produces a poem that might help someone is worth it.
I know your a good friend. Visit my site when you want to talk as well.
Relda
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Relda: so glad you are better with your self and Bud. Remember to love your self and work on your passions. My daughters were bullied and abused by friends - "let it rain," on my site. I feel like I need to write a book on this. One girl went to jail and the other rehab for their abuse in drugs and alcohol and beating up my daughter. We are focusing on joy and getting stronger. Prom in coming up and she will graduate in May 2016...high school. God bless you, my poet friend. nancy
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I'd say a book is ordained. It's a story that needs to be told.
Comment from William Ross
Very good I like this a very well written free verse an a great entry for the prompt. Good kuck on this and have yourself a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016
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Very good I like this a very well written free verse an a great entry for the prompt. Good kuck on this and have yourself a wonderful day.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2016
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William - thank you for your review.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from frogbook
This was excellent with a great message and clever and interesting descriptions. The first stanza was superb and drew the reader in. Original and wonderful poem
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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This was excellent with a great message and clever and interesting descriptions. The first stanza was superb and drew the reader in. Original and wonderful poem
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your review and encouraging comments. I appreciate your insight.
God bless and my best,
Relda
Comment from l.raven
HI Relda, I think you have to know your worth...know that you are somebody...and no one has the right to take that away...this is very well written...and the perfect picture...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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HI Relda, I think you have to know your worth...know that you are somebody...and no one has the right to take that away...this is very well written...and the perfect picture...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate your insight a lot,
God bless and my best,
Relda
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you are so very welcome...enjoyed reading you...God Bless you as well...luff xxoo
Comment from c_lucas
It takes strength to fight back and reclaim your life. This is very well written with an with an enlightened flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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It takes strength to fight back and reclaim your life. This is very well written with an with an enlightened flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the review and insights. I appreciate the encouragement.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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You're welcome, Relda. Charlie
Comment from Pantygynt
I imagine it pays to be positive about these things but one shouldn't hang around and allow ones abuser free rein. Too many battered wives seem content to be battered until eventually the worm turns.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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I imagine it pays to be positive about these things but one shouldn't hang around and allow ones abuser free rein. Too many battered wives seem content to be battered until eventually the worm turns.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Thanks for the review and I agree entirely. Closest I came to being battered was staring down a .38 police revolver during the wee hours of a morning while I finally succeeded in getting my husband (of 3 weeks) to call his Captain. The Captain sent SWAT and they talked him down.
Most of the damage to me was inflicted out of my own stupidity while I refused to use my head instead of my heart. Then I met BUD and my head miraculously started working. I began to see my past life in a new light. Funny, that's about the time my writing began to make any sense!
Better late than never. I know, TMI!
God bless and my best.
Relda
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Hope I helped a bit.
Comment from Patricia Brooks
You use strong words, and they work well here: "beaten, bruised and broken", the alliteration of "pieces can be repurposed", "bone and gristle to where guts were", "Guts to brain's old home." But the poem works best, I think, where the rhythms are kept taut, like the beating of a drum, and don't lapse into discursive, as is the danger in the last stanza, though I like the line "Scar tissue knits a secure structure." a lot. Maybe take out the narrative structure altogether and just let the strong words and images do all the heavy lifting? I like where the poet is coming from and all she has clearly learned along the way!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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You use strong words, and they work well here: "beaten, bruised and broken", the alliteration of "pieces can be repurposed", "bone and gristle to where guts were", "Guts to brain's old home." But the poem works best, I think, where the rhythms are kept taut, like the beating of a drum, and don't lapse into discursive, as is the danger in the last stanza, though I like the line "Scar tissue knits a secure structure." a lot. Maybe take out the narrative structure altogether and just let the strong words and images do all the heavy lifting? I like where the poet is coming from and all she has clearly learned along the way!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Thanks for the review, encouragement and suggestions. I pondered using 'Outside unchanged. Inside tougher.' for the last line ... do you think that works better?
God bless and my best,
Relda
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I do like that for the last line!
Good to interact with you; I'm brand new here so welcome the chances to share.
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I like them both, but like the brevity of 'Outside unchanged. Inside tougher.' The poem moves like a forward thrust of strong assertions. This seems to be where the poet has ended up after such a life. I have just entered such a poem in the Free Verse contest, and would love to have your review of it. They tell me it's at the 139th position on the list, and no one will ever find it there. "The Poet's Journey" pretty much sums up everything I've learned over 60+ years of writing poetry, and I'd value your opinion.
Thanks so much,
Patricia
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Patricia - read your poem. I'm speechless - though I did send a review. Also promoted it a few spots - should be found now.
God bless and my best,
Relda
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Thank you so much for the promotion, Relda. I don't know how one does that, but I guess I'll learn when I've reviewed enough. I'll look forward to reading your review of "The Poet's Journey".
Comment from acerisestory
Your free verse poem is an impactful one, Relda. I is, I am sure, very evocative for many women. Your words are a positive message making clear the possibilities of surviving and becoming stronger and tougher after this kind of trauma in one's life.
I like the imagery you've used throughout, my friend. Your final stanza is the one that resonates the most with me:
"Heart tucked behind its new protector.
Scar tissue knits a secure structure.
Visibly unchanged. Infinitely tougher."
Well done! I wish you the best of luck in the contest! Alana
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Your free verse poem is an impactful one, Relda. I is, I am sure, very evocative for many women. Your words are a positive message making clear the possibilities of surviving and becoming stronger and tougher after this kind of trauma in one's life.
I like the imagery you've used throughout, my friend. Your final stanza is the one that resonates the most with me:
"Heart tucked behind its new protector.
Scar tissue knits a secure structure.
Visibly unchanged. Infinitely tougher."
Well done! I wish you the best of luck in the contest! Alana
Comment Written 08-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2016
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Alana,
Thank you so much for your review and comments. Your insight means so much.
God bless and my best,
Relda
