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Life, Love, and Other Disasters

Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "An angel flew from heaven"
A collection of poems on these themes

64 total reviews 
Comment from foxangie123
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Truly an awesome picture. I really wish I had six stars to give you, really. This is golden, a ten, one hundred percent awesome......

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Angie, thank you for the awesome and golden review.

    I have to admit I should get a lot of credit for that picture. After all I had to find my way all the way to Google images and then type 'angel' (spelling it correctly too or I might have ended up with some angles instead!) Then I had to save it and upload it - all tricky stuff - and remember I didn't have a lot of time because I had been busy writing a poem as well.

    Oh, yes, that's right - there were some words on the page - not that those really count - I mean, it's only a poem, right, so obviously the picture is the most important thing. Glad you didn't waste any of your time by actually reading and reviewing that - such a waste of time when there are so many other pictures to look at.

    One thing puzzles me though - how on earth do you get by with those mean-spirited characters who refuse to put a picture on their poem? It must make it awfully difficult for you.

    Have a lovely day. I'm off to google up a nice picture for my next poem.

    Steve
Comment from LIJ Red
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You have the rhymes and meter, and the theme of love is honeymoon strong in this work. It seems to rate an excellent to me, no looking back.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the kind words.

    Steve
Comment from Chrissy710
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Hi Kiwisteveh This is a lovely love poem and you have your angel safe and sound. thats nice. well constructed with a little touch of humour And it flowed nicely with a good rhyme Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the kind words.

    Steve
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Thanks for the pleasure of reading your outstanding poem that leaves not even a hint of doubt of your heart's bubbling with love for Guinivere, with you as her King Arthur in whosoever's court. Great job and good luck in the contest. :-)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the great review and good luck wishes.

    Steve
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Wow Steve!

This is one very impressive and beautiful love poem and entry!
The Rondeau redouble form has surely not held you back here.
I thoroughly enjoyed every well composed line, rhyme and
elegant imagery. I enjoyed your analogy of the 'slipped halo'
and "silken wings of Moonshine"

I guess I'm not able to list all of your goodies in here. The following
line stood out to me:

"Her whereabouts, at first, a mystery;
I'm sure it gave the God Squad quite a fright." (a lot said there)

Congratulations in being a worthy Knight for your wife and love of your life
and also writing what looks like a winning entry to me.

Linda



"Her whereabouts, at first, a mystery;
I'm sure it gave the God Squad quite a fright."

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks, linda. Let's hope the committee are as discerning as you! ;O)

    Steve
Comment from Sasha
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Sorry, but I am sending out this cut and paste response to just about everyone. 140 reviews is just more than my tiny mind can handle. Obviously, I was not able to read this one.

I finally decided it was/is impossible for me to catch up on the 140 unread posts in my message box, so I spent nearly 20 minutes yesterday deleting most of them. I am starting from scratch and pray I haven't offended anyone by doing that.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks, sasha - just do what you have to do...

    Steve
Comment from Just2Write
Exceptional
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Anyone that can write a Rondeau Redouble and make the two rhyme sounds feel fresh and new from beginning to end deserves a six. Fortunately, I have one to give. The rhymes are unforced and the flow, impeccable.
The sweetness of your loved one being an angel whose halo has slipped a bit, is both incredibly loving, and so suits the theme of the contest.
It makes a gal want to sigh, even though the lines are a tad corny. I mean that in a loving and kind way, as you did when you wrote them.
Beautiful work, Steve.
Rose.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Rose, thanks so much for the great review and the six stars.

    yes, I was tiptoeing along the tightrope between corny and sweet, I suppose. lovey-dovey with a bit of a wink - let's hope the committee like it as much as you did.

    Steve
reply by Just2Write on 29-Jan-2016
    I've got my fingers crossed for you. R.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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What a wonderful tribute to a love found and made your own.
Nice flow and content is consistant as told in story form.
Rhyme and flow are very good and an excellent entry.
Good luck

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Barb, thanks so much for your thoughtful words.

    Steve
Comment from Mai Mai
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This is a sweet and interesting piece. I love the refrain, "To lose an angel spells catastrophe;no doubt they sent out searchers at first light." The description of this 'angel' is very sweet. Good job and good luck.

Mai Mai


 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thank you Mai Mai!

    Steve
Comment from brenda bickers
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Hi Steve
this is so sweet, I love the concept and the wording is just perfect. It kept me guessing until the end. I think maybe we have a big romantic in the family!!!!!
Great,
Brenda

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks, Brenda.

    Let's hope there are a couple of romantics on the judging panel as well!

    Steve