Angels
Children's poetry contest 135 words6 total reviews
Comment from Mary Wakeford
I believe in angels and found your poem to be a lovely affirmation to support that belief. I do feel there was an overuse of commas, but that could just be me. Nice work.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2016
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I believe in angels and found your poem to be a lovely affirmation to support that belief. I do feel there was an overuse of commas, but that could just be me. Nice work.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your positive feedback. I'll look again at the punctuation.
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You are most welcome!
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I like the presentation of rhyming couplets--
I've always had an open mind about angels and spirits --
as who are we to say they are not all around us
One little typing error, Mary -
So if the questions about [angles] ANGELS are ever asked of you
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Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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I like the presentation of rhyming couplets--
I've always had an open mind about angels and spirits --
as who are we to say they are not all around us
One little typing error, Mary -
So if the questions about [angles] ANGELS are ever asked of you
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Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for the heads up. I fixed the angels,
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is a nice inspirational poem for children about angels. I think you did nicely with the rhyme especially. Also, the rhythm works quite well, too. Best wishes in the contest. Drew
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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This is a nice inspirational poem for children about angels. I think you did nicely with the rhyme especially. Also, the rhythm works quite well, too. Best wishes in the contest. Drew
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the evaluation. It's always nice to hear that a piece works.
Comment from RYME4U
This is well done and is very good at helping a child understand. It holds information and has spiritual teaching. THe rhymes are good and the rhythm makes it easier to understand.
Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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This is well done and is very good at helping a child understand. It holds information and has spiritual teaching. THe rhymes are good and the rhythm makes it easier to understand.
Great job!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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I think literature is a good teaching tool. Thank you for noticing instructional value.
Comment from RodG
I remember years ago when I taught Sunday school classes I was asked, "Do angels exist?" I wish I had your poem then as my answer was not nearly as clear or as well-put. I especially like how you define the role of angels in stanza 3, then go on to clarify/illustrate in the next three stanzas. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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I remember years ago when I taught Sunday school classes I was asked, "Do angels exist?" I wish I had your poem then as my answer was not nearly as clear or as well-put. I especially like how you define the role of angels in stanza 3, then go on to clarify/illustrate in the next three stanzas. Nicely done!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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Thank you for your detailed review.
Comment from Crennan87
I think you did a fantastic job of doing what this contest calls for, which is writing a poem for children. Wonderful, informative work.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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I think you did a fantastic job of doing what this contest calls for, which is writing a poem for children. Wonderful, informative work.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging words.
