Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from elgone
uruk saved Jim again and Soni in the process. But now Soni knows that Littleton is involved with the bad guys, which explains his aggressive pursuit of criminal charges. He wants to get everyone out of the way.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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uruk saved Jim again and Soni in the process. But now Soni knows that Littleton is involved with the bad guys, which explains his aggressive pursuit of criminal charges. He wants to get everyone out of the way.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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It's always wonderful to hear from you. Thank you.
Comment from Ulla
Well another good write and their arguments seems to be thriving still. Okay, Jim shouldn't have waved his hat.
'over the shoulder asked'. Do you mean 'he looked over his shoulder and asked'. Some words are missing. Looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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Well another good write and their arguments seems to be thriving still. Okay, Jim shouldn't have waved his hat.
'over the shoulder asked'. Do you mean 'he looked over his shoulder and asked'. Some words are missing. Looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla
Comment Written 26-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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Yes, I meant to fix that, but I got interrupted and forgot. DARN! Thank you for reminding me.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
Another good solid chapter here, with Soni and Jim eluding the men. Lucky old Jim, saved again.
A couple of bits I noticed
a lado desde la cueva?." - either question mark, or full stop here.
said under her breath, - just a matter of choice here but you could say 'muttered' eliminating the need for under her breath.
The other's thought - no apostrophe necessary.
"Saluting me? What for?"
over his shoulder asked, "When are those dogs bringing our horses? I can't wait to get out of here." He continued walking. - this little bit needs looked at too. line break and feels like a word may be missing.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016
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Hi Barbara,
Another good solid chapter here, with Soni and Jim eluding the men. Lucky old Jim, saved again.
A couple of bits I noticed
a lado desde la cueva?." - either question mark, or full stop here.
said under her breath, - just a matter of choice here but you could say 'muttered' eliminating the need for under her breath.
The other's thought - no apostrophe necessary.
"Saluting me? What for?"
over his shoulder asked, "When are those dogs bringing our horses? I can't wait to get out of here." He continued walking. - this little bit needs looked at too. line break and feels like a word may be missing.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2016
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Off to making the corrections. Thank you.
Comment from pbroussard209
great chapter, as the tension between Soni and Jim continues to build. I feel like the ending paragraph is missing something or needs to be rephrased, also you need a line space after "Saluting me? What for?"
"Saluting me? What for?"
over his shoulder asked, "When are those dogs bringing our horses? I can't wait to get out of here." He continued walking.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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great chapter, as the tension between Soni and Jim continues to build. I feel like the ending paragraph is missing something or needs to be rephrased, also you need a line space after "Saluting me? What for?"
"Saluting me? What for?"
over his shoulder asked, "When are those dogs bringing our horses? I can't wait to get out of here." He continued walking.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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I thought I had already corrected that, but guess I got interrupted. Thank you for reminding me,.
Comment from Bryana
I'm surprised Jim and Soni are fighting
so much, they should be glad those men
didn't attack them.
I hope the dogs bring the horses and
they can get out of there.
I'll be waiting for next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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I'm surprised Jim and Soni are fighting
so much, they should be glad those men
didn't attack them.
I hope the dogs bring the horses and
they can get out of there.
I'll be waiting for next chapter.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. The bear in the dream catcher is unique and I love it.
Your action and dialogue is right on and the action stands up.
like: ""Of course, I'm all right." Soni rose. "I was almost bitten by a rattler. When you waved at the men, the men came close enough I could smell their sweat. Luckily only one man saw you. The other's thought he was crazy. Then a bullet flew over my head killing a man. He's lying right over there. Why wouldn't I be just fine?" She brushed dust from her jeans." (good writing)
Blessings, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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Hi, Barbara. The bear in the dream catcher is unique and I love it.
Your action and dialogue is right on and the action stands up.
like: ""Of course, I'm all right." Soni rose. "I was almost bitten by a rattler. When you waved at the men, the men came close enough I could smell their sweat. Luckily only one man saw you. The other's thought he was crazy. Then a bullet flew over my head killing a man. He's lying right over there. Why wouldn't I be just fine?" She brushed dust from her jeans." (good writing)
Blessings, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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It's always a pleasure to hear from you.
Comment from Crennan87
I enjoyed this chapter a lot! I will now need to read your other works because I am absolutely hooked! All the best to you! Happy writing!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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I enjoyed this chapter a lot! I will now need to read your other works because I am absolutely hooked! All the best to you! Happy writing!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Getting a little snippy aren't they? LOL. Well, it's about time that the pot boils over the they get a chance to put everything out in the open, but for some reason, I just don't think that's about to happen anytime soon. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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Getting a little snippy aren't they? LOL. Well, it's about time that the pot boils over the they get a chance to put everything out in the open, but for some reason, I just don't think that's about to happen anytime soon. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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LOl your review made me smile.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
"I'm tired of your constant insults. I made one mistake. I should have told you my real name, but for your safety I couldn't. I'm sorry for that, but I think my debt's paid in full." - It's funny, but just before I read this, Soni was actually getting on my nerves, and I was thinking 'Give the guy a break already!' So I agree with Jim 100%
:)
over his shoulder asked, - Take a look at this part of your post, Barbara. Something isn't right. It's like a word is missing?
Good post otherwise.
Av
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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"I'm tired of your constant insults. I made one mistake. I should have told you my real name, but for your safety I couldn't. I'm sorry for that, but I think my debt's paid in full." - It's funny, but just before I read this, Soni was actually getting on my nerves, and I was thinking 'Give the guy a break already!' So I agree with Jim 100%
:)
over his shoulder asked, - Take a look at this part of your post, Barbara. Something isn't right. It's like a word is missing?
Good post otherwise.
Av
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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I thought I had repaired that and guess I got sidetracked. I WILL get to it.
Comment from boxergirl
Hi Barbara,
This is a little shorter scene but I like the scene betwen Jim and Soni...I also can feel his frustration with Soni...I like her toughness but she could lighten up a bit...most men would have bolted by now. :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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Hi Barbara,
This is a little shorter scene but I like the scene betwen Jim and Soni...I also can feel his frustration with Soni...I like her toughness but she could lighten up a bit...most men would have bolted by now. :-)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2016
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I agree, Soni is tough. I am wondering if she's trying to act tougher than she is. Hmmm. Thank you for the kind review.
