Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

my goodness, Dean. This is a great story, made even more so by the hilarious author Glad to see you added another story to this great collection. Have a good Sunday, my friend~Debbie

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Thanks, Debbie. I appreciate your comments.
I'm very happy you enjoyed the story. It will probably be my last, at least here anyway.
Much obliged.
~Dean

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I'm glad I'm in the tropics as I read this Snow Job I wouldn't like to be stuck in Washington or New York in the middle of the blizzards reading this and waiting for that knock on the door. Something a little different, with only the pregnant pause still waiting for number 13.

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

I'm glad you enjoyed the story, pearl. I probably won't be writing any more.
Much obliged.
~Dean

Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

Hi Dean, unlucky thirteen, now that's a worry. Good tension as the reader progresses through the plot. Believable descriptions in an American snow time setting.

Powdery snow, caused by very low temperatures. Do you know that there's something like 34 different types of snow? Useless info. day. LOL.

Just seen the news, New York is at a snowy standstill. As a matter of interest I'm on vacation in the Costa Blanca in Spain and the temp. is averaging 16 - 18c with sunny skies and rained only once since the 1st.

An appropriate addition to Tiny Tales. I do hope they catch dear Roland. LOL.

~Mel~

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Thanks, Mel, and I'd wager my female protagonist hopes they catch Roland too.
I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment on the story.
Enjoy your vacation, and stay safe.
~Dean

reply by write hand blue on 24-Jan-2016

Thanks Dean...

reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Yep

reply by Anonymous Member on 26-Jan-2016

Yep

Comment from danpald

Excellent

See how even storms can be a benefit
For the demise it seems to be evident
That the retch met the end of time on earth
Came with the snow falling tenderly to birth

Thanks for the mention in the notes
Still it needs to be corrected of course
Not "dalpald" but "danpald" is the name
That others need to help me come closer in line to yours

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

I'll get on that correction post haste, Dan. It seems my dyslexia has tricked me once again.
Thank you for the poetic response.
~Dean

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Just what I was in the mood for - a very creepy, frightening tiny tale by the master of creepiness himself :)
Something about those bloody handprints on the window. Why didn't he come in? I guess we'll never know...
Nice job! Good fright, Dean :)
Carol

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Thanks, Carol. I'm really glad you enjoyed the story.
I won't be posting many stories this year. My focus will remain on poetry. But, every now and then I might sneak one into the mix.
Thanks again!
~Dean

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Your Author notes are just as entertaining as the story.

A few nits:

A few years ago, dad was having chest severe chest pains, [One too many chests in your sentence.]

The following morning - a Saturday, as I recall - we were awakened [Always use two dashes to separate one clause from another, never one, and no space before or after. This is one of many.]

She looked worried, clutching her open housecoat closed tightly. [Kind of an awkward sentence. Is it open or is it closed? Perhaps change "open" to "opened" to give it a sense of closure.]

this information points back to my aforementioned "bad habit." [Since it's not dialogue, the period belongs outside the quote mark.]

Good read!

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Thanks for taking a look at the story, Jay, and I will get right on those corrections ASAP.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story as a whole, and I certainly appreciate your help.
Thanks again!
With gratitude
~Dean

reply by Jay Squires on 24-Jan-2016

You are most welcome, Dean.

reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

I believe I've addressed all of the nits you pointed out now.
Thanks again. :}

reply by Anonymous Member on 26-Jan-2016

I believe I've addressed all of the nits you pointed out now.
Thanks again. :}

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A close encounter to be murdered indeed. Some one break into my house years ago while my first child and I was sleeping alone. My husband was working nightshift. The following morning discovered my husband's suite was taken from the cupboard where I was sleeping and the refrigerator was raid. They came in through a backdoor where they broke the glass of the door. Anyway I survive with my son no 35 years.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Wow! You were very lucky, Sandra, and God was obviously watching over you that night, as He always does for us.
Thanks again for taking the time to read and review my work. I deeply appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me.
~Dean

reply by Sandra du Plessis on 24-Jan-2016

God is always close by.

reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Yes, He certainly is. :}

reply by Anonymous Member on 26-Jan-2016

Yes, He certainly is. :}

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Handsome :)

Great Tiny Tale about, Roland Meechum, the cannibal who is superstitious and wants 13 victims. Poor boy, who happens to be 13 years old (two 13s, a coincidence? ) he almost became that 13th victim. I like your homographic play on words, you always come up with very clever double meaning words.

check out your first sentence>>>A few years ago, dad was having chest severe chest pains<<<< chest double word

Good job my friend!

~Gypsy hugs :)



Hell-oh

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Thanks for catching that error, Gypsy. I swear, I've probably reread this a hundred times, and I still missed that!
Oh, woe is me...

I'm glad you liked the story. It's my first one of the year. I'll be posting a lot fewer stories than I did last year so I can concentrate more on poetry.
Much obliged for the review!

~Dean :}

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 24-Jan-2016

I am doing the same thing. I want to focus on improving my skills as a poet.
~o~*~o~*~o~*~o~*~gypsy hugs~*~o~*~o~*~o~*~

reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

It's very hard to do both, and the only reason I wrote Snow Job s because someone said that they missed reading my stories. I aim to please, as best I can.
~Dean :}

reply by Anonymous Member on 26-Jan-2016

It's very hard to do both, and the only reason I wrote Snow Job s because someone said that they missed reading my stories. I aim to please, as best I can.
~Dean :}

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

I was just thinking a few days ago that I had not seen a tiny tale lately so glad they are back. Scary on a snowy night.

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 Comment Written 24-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016

Thanks, JoAnn.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean :}