Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 102 "Snow Job"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
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Comment from Scarbrems
A chilling tale in more ways than one. Cold. So coooold. I do like this sort of stuff. The grim discovery of next door's blood and all. A perfect, complete horror. Note to self: Must have another shot at writing this sort of thing.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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A chilling tale in more ways than one. Cold. So coooold. I do like this sort of stuff. The grim discovery of next door's blood and all. A perfect, complete horror. Note to self: Must have another shot at writing this sort of thing.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Sarkems.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story because it's going to be the last Tiny Tale of Terror. I think the series has run its course and worn out its welcome here.
Thanks for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Take care.
~Dean
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Sorry I never read more, but I've only recently returned. I will go and read others posted, though.
Comment from Just2Write
OMG - at least she didn't throw open the sash to see what was the matter. That might have proved to be a bugger.
Seems to me all she had to do was sleep over at a friend's place forever, or at least until her parents had had him over for dinner.
A great little bite of terror, Dean.
Rose.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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OMG - at least she didn't throw open the sash to see what was the matter. That might have proved to be a bugger.
Seems to me all she had to do was sleep over at a friend's place forever, or at least until her parents had had him over for dinner.
A great little bite of terror, Dean.
Rose.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Rose.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
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The last of the tiny tales of terror or the last of spooky stories in general?
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The last of the Tiny Tales of Terror. I'm marking the book as completed once this story has had its run.
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The last of the Tiny Tales of Terror. I'm marking the book as completed once this story has had its run.
Comment from JTStone
I love your polished sense of humor. There never is that amateur Fan Story game of guessing, 'was that an error--or was it supposed to be funny.' I can laugh at your stuff, guilt free.
Fortunately for me, I live in Southern California.
It never snowed in San Diego until the night Roland Meechum showed up looking to cross the border, with a taste for Mexican...
Jimmy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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I love your polished sense of humor. There never is that amateur Fan Story game of guessing, 'was that an error--or was it supposed to be funny.' I can laugh at your stuff, guilt free.
Fortunately for me, I live in Southern California.
It never snowed in San Diego until the night Roland Meechum showed up looking to cross the border, with a taste for Mexican...
Jimmy
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Jimmy.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from Mastery
Hi, DeanO. Saving a six for another piece. any choice? You are definitely a nut case. LOL..this is some harsh bloody stuff. I do like it though. Good images and descriptions, my friend. Bravo! Bob
Suggestion: "leaving me asleep in the house alone." (leaving me to sleep alone in the house)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Hi, DeanO. Saving a six for another piece. any choice? You are definitely a nut case. LOL..this is some harsh bloody stuff. I do like it though. Good images and descriptions, my friend. Bravo! Bob
Suggestion: "leaving me asleep in the house alone." (leaving me to sleep alone in the house)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Bob.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Dean - another great story and the thing I admire about your stories is that you grip the reader right from the start. I like your author notes, as interesting as your story. I did not notice that the l3 year old was a girl until then. Must re-read. I did, however, expect a more gory ending, something to make me go Ugh! But it's the way you tell 'em. LOL. Always well. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Hi Dean - another great story and the thing I admire about your stories is that you grip the reader right from the start. I like your author notes, as interesting as your story. I did not notice that the l3 year old was a girl until then. Must re-read. I did, however, expect a more gory ending, something to make me go Ugh! But it's the way you tell 'em. LOL. Always well. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Dorothy.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from a.w.brooks
Well she better thank her lucky stars that she wasn't killed that night by that nasty man. LOL I didn't see anything that I can suggest to you. The art work very well presented and love the one at the bottom with the moving snow. Thanks for the read and Happy Writing
A.W.Brooks
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Well she better thank her lucky stars that she wasn't killed that night by that nasty man. LOL I didn't see anything that I can suggest to you. The art work very well presented and love the one at the bottom with the moving snow. Thanks for the read and Happy Writing
A.W.Brooks
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, a.w., I appreciate that.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Take care, and thanks for the sixer
~Dean
Comment from Pantygynt
I'd say it might still be too early to relax. I hate to mention this but my radio tells me that the US is under several inches of snow.
I'd be particularly careful about now - it's so easy to slip over on the sidewalks in weather like that.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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I'd say it might still be too early to relax. I hate to mention this but my radio tells me that the US is under several inches of snow.
I'd be particularly careful about now - it's so easy to slip over on the sidewalks in weather like that.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Jim. We well over a foot here.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from SSSoto
Oh creepy! The scary aspect of this is definitely that it is indeed very realistic; no supernatural or fantastical elements to reassure the reader that there's little chance of anything like this ever happening to them. After all, knowing that it could happen to yourself is what really makes the ice creep up your spine, isn't it? Nice job!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Oh creepy! The scary aspect of this is definitely that it is indeed very realistic; no supernatural or fantastical elements to reassure the reader that there's little chance of anything like this ever happening to them. After all, knowing that it could happen to yourself is what really makes the ice creep up your spine, isn't it? Nice job!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, SSSoto, and yes it is.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Take care
~Dean
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Dean,
Good to see you back on the prose trail again! I've been waiting for it!
I 'enjoyed' this one. I think the use of 13 is very clever, which correlates to the number's mystique, the victim and the girl's age.
A couple of bits and pieces - mainly slight formatting.
dad was having severe chest pains - I think dad should be capitalised here as you have done with Mom.
clutching her opened housecoat closed tightly - this read just a little awkward to me - perhaps unbuttoned housecoat?
"Sir, you may want to come and have a look at this," -I feel this should be a full stop rather than a comma at the end.
Blood streaked - delete space at start of line and maybe blood-soaked.
to pay dad a friendly visit - Dad?
It been surmised - delete space at start of line.
Now, whenever it snows - delete space at start.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Hi Dean,
Good to see you back on the prose trail again! I've been waiting for it!
I 'enjoyed' this one. I think the use of 13 is very clever, which correlates to the number's mystique, the victim and the girl's age.
A couple of bits and pieces - mainly slight formatting.
dad was having severe chest pains - I think dad should be capitalised here as you have done with Mom.
clutching her opened housecoat closed tightly - this read just a little awkward to me - perhaps unbuttoned housecoat?
"Sir, you may want to come and have a look at this," -I feel this should be a full stop rather than a comma at the end.
Blood streaked - delete space at start of line and maybe blood-soaked.
to pay dad a friendly visit - Dad?
It been surmised - delete space at start of line.
Now, whenever it snows - delete space at start.
All the best
G
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Gareth.
I appreciate you catching the errors for me.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Take care
~Dean
Comment from Jacob Collins
Something like that certainly would put you off snow for the rest of your life, I can imagine the terror he must have felt when he realised that it could've been him who could've been murdered. An excellent, dark piece, Dean. I couldn't find any faults. Thanks for sharing...Jacob
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Something like that certainly would put you off snow for the rest of your life, I can imagine the terror he must have felt when he realised that it could've been him who could've been murdered. An excellent, dark piece, Dean. I couldn't find any faults. Thanks for sharing...Jacob
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Jacob, I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
This will probably be the last of these stories I will write, so I'm glad you enjoyed.
Take care
~Dean
