When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 75 "A Mother's Choice"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Deniz22
Out of sixes...sorry, or you would have them for this piece. I'm sure there is much here that anyone can relate to who grew up in a family...which is a good thing (your story's common points I mean, not necessarily growing up in a family :()
I pause in my sincere admiration for your honesty and wonderful ability of story telling, to have a little fun with you. " I took my first independent steps at a year and a half" and I would add, and haven't stopped since! :) SM (ducking from expected retaliation)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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Out of sixes...sorry, or you would have them for this piece. I'm sure there is much here that anyone can relate to who grew up in a family...which is a good thing (your story's common points I mean, not necessarily growing up in a family :()
I pause in my sincere admiration for your honesty and wonderful ability of story telling, to have a little fun with you. " I took my first independent steps at a year and a half" and I would add, and haven't stopped since! :) SM (ducking from expected retaliation)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2016
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Show off! Do you dance too? Oh, I forgot, you fly. I do hope this work will encourage families to process issues before they pass over, although it can be done in the spiritual world too. :-) LL
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Comment from CDyer
I am amazed with the detail you provide for your main character. She is a person of great depth, and you develop her persona so well. Just this little bit that I have read makes me want to see how the story concludes. Very well written!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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I am amazed with the detail you provide for your main character. She is a person of great depth, and you develop her persona so well. Just this little bit that I have read makes me want to see how the story concludes. Very well written!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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I'm pleased that you hooked you even though there are many chapters before this-- and there will be more. Always glad to see a new name. I'll review yours too. :-)
Comment from NicciFaye
It's amazing the things we remember from our childhood and the things we don't. I struggled for a long time with the fact that I still can't remember too many things from my childhood before my mother showed up home after work in our Brooklyn apartment with her present husband, my stepfather. It's like patches of memories, but nothing complete. Only pictures I really don't recall. I've always felt that a lot of my challenges I faced in my teenage and early adulthood were due to my childhood. This story, thus far, is helpful. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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It's amazing the things we remember from our childhood and the things we don't. I struggled for a long time with the fact that I still can't remember too many things from my childhood before my mother showed up home after work in our Brooklyn apartment with her present husband, my stepfather. It's like patches of memories, but nothing complete. Only pictures I really don't recall. I've always felt that a lot of my challenges I faced in my teenage and early adulthood were due to my childhood. This story, thus far, is helpful. Keep writing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Oh, I'm so in hopes that this will help others. Find out the truth while your relations are still alive. The next chapter will bring out the importance of that even more. Thank Nicci for sharing your story.
Comment from Realist101
Hello Shari! I don't know if I told you this but my mom didn't want me, I was 18 months old and my brother was an infant. But Dad told her they couldn't break up my brother and I so here I am. A mess. I hate when I see things like this. It's heart wrenching in it's totality. A child cannot ever, un-feel, being unwanted. :/ It still hurts and I'm sixty too. :/ Your family sounds so like mine. x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Hello Shari! I don't know if I told you this but my mom didn't want me, I was 18 months old and my brother was an infant. But Dad told her they couldn't break up my brother and I so here I am. A mess. I hate when I see things like this. It's heart wrenching in it's totality. A child cannot ever, un-feel, being unwanted. :/ It still hurts and I'm sixty too. :/ Your family sounds so like mine. x
Comment Written 22-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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How awful, Sue. Did they discuss it openly where you would hear it. Yes, it would explain a lot! You really should process this with a spiritual counselor. At least, write about it. No need to post. I find it therapeutic to put it on paper. Your muse will help you deal with it too. She/he will give you the words to write.
Love you,
Shari
Comment from Selina Stambi
Short and sweet, Shari, but certainly heightens the sense of mystery and anticipation.
Memories are slippery things - they sure are! The get grimmer or glow brighter, depending on who remembers and why. :)
My heart goes out to Shari more than Babs.
Sonali
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Short and sweet, Shari, but certainly heightens the sense of mystery and anticipation.
Memories are slippery things - they sure are! The get grimmer or glow brighter, depending on who remembers and why. :)
My heart goes out to Shari more than Babs.
Sonali
Comment Written 21-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Well, my sister needed the strokes more than I did. She led a tough life. Thanks for the flattering comments.
Comment from boxergirl
I like the sentence that says the memories are slippery things. So true, especially from our youth. Great job of describing the differences between you and Barb. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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I like the sentence that says the memories are slippery things. So true, especially from our youth. Great job of describing the differences between you and Barb. :-)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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You'd never believe we had the same parents! But then, my two children are total opposites too.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You are building this wonderfully and I think the shorter posts actually enhance the telling. Relationships are always complex, especially where childhood and family dynamics are concerned so the shorter reads allow the reader to fully digest each morsel of new information completely before layering on the next piece. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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You are building this wonderfully and I think the shorter posts actually enhance the telling. Relationships are always complex, especially where childhood and family dynamics are concerned so the shorter reads allow the reader to fully digest each morsel of new information completely before layering on the next piece. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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I appreciate that you like the shorter posts. The next one really is hard to swallow. Have to write it yet and hope I don't offend the spirits who have passed on long ago.
Comment from Leen1
I must admit that the last three chapters were "catch-ups" for me as time did not allow me to get to them until now. I must also admit, you did not disappoint as I still cling to each chapter with the same eagerness I found in the beginning. Although awkward at times you and your sister seem to be healing at least in some areas. And yes, the suspense still lingers between each chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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I must admit that the last three chapters were "catch-ups" for me as time did not allow me to get to them until now. I must also admit, you did not disappoint as I still cling to each chapter with the same eagerness I found in the beginning. Although awkward at times you and your sister seem to be healing at least in some areas. And yes, the suspense still lingers between each chapter.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Leen1. Good to hear that you're hanging in there. Trust me, I know the time issue all too well.
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Shari,
Any child uprooted will feel the effect on their lives. We block out some of the most painful memories as a coping mechanism. You are not responsible nor to ever feel the need to take the responsibility for adult choices made.
Words and labels sting, lasting much longer than a physical bruise. You have such a wonderful personality. You are warm, expressive, have an excellent sense of humour and so much more. This is who you are, not a lazy eye, clumsy, or a dragging leg.
Bye, my friend.
Hugs
Rosalyne:)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Hi, Shari,
Any child uprooted will feel the effect on their lives. We block out some of the most painful memories as a coping mechanism. You are not responsible nor to ever feel the need to take the responsibility for adult choices made.
Words and labels sting, lasting much longer than a physical bruise. You have such a wonderful personality. You are warm, expressive, have an excellent sense of humour and so much more. This is who you are, not a lazy eye, clumsy, or a dragging leg.
Bye, my friend.
Hugs
Rosalyne:)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Rosalyne. I hope those who have children read this and think twice before they open their mouths:-)
Comment from TheWriteTeach
Shari,
This is the first chapter I've read in When Blood Collides. I'm hooked. I'm going to try to read the chapters I've missed. This is extremely interesting. You had me riveted to my seat, and I flew through the piece. I couldn't find out what happened next fast enough. You are a very good writer Shari. I found this piece packed with emotion and even tension. Excellent job with this, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter as-well-as the previous ones! My job is cut out for me.
Suzanne
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Shari,
This is the first chapter I've read in When Blood Collides. I'm hooked. I'm going to try to read the chapters I've missed. This is extremely interesting. You had me riveted to my seat, and I flew through the piece. I couldn't find out what happened next fast enough. You are a very good writer Shari. I found this piece packed with emotion and even tension. Excellent job with this, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter as-well-as the previous ones! My job is cut out for me.
Suzanne
Comment Written 21-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2016
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Your review thrilled me. If you can't catch up, just go back to chapter seventy, where the story behind this begins. Thanks so much for the six.
