The Quest
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Comment from Writingfundimension
I think some people wonder if people like your grandmother aren't a figment of hte imagination of the writer. Surely that woman had good reason to do what she did.?They have not experienced evil in human form. Some parents are, in fact, out to do as much harm as they can to their offspring. I know, as you surely do, what a terrible impact that can have on the following generations.
This was an excellent chapter, Ulla. I could feel the pain through your words.
Hugs, Bev
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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I think some people wonder if people like your grandmother aren't a figment of hte imagination of the writer. Surely that woman had good reason to do what she did.?They have not experienced evil in human form. Some parents are, in fact, out to do as much harm as they can to their offspring. I know, as you surely do, what a terrible impact that can have on the following generations.
This was an excellent chapter, Ulla. I could feel the pain through your words.
Hugs, Bev
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Bev, thank you ever so much. You are so right in everything you are saying. Well maybe it was hate or the urge to control. I think the latter is maybe the answer. But what has always baffled me is: Why?
I have a daughter and God forbid if I even tried. It has never occurred to me, though. I have to say that my adoptive mother was BAD. Sometimes I've thought evil even. But that's another story for another day. Anyway, Thanks so much for your lovely six. More is to follow soon. All the best. Ulla
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You're very welcome, Ulla. I'm truly enjoying your journey of discovery. :) Bev
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Ulla,
It's a nice piece of Biographical Non-Fiction beautifully depicting its theme.
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth and captivating flow from top to bottom, barring some part in the middle.
"I opened it and started to read." Catchy End, working as an excellent hook!
I'm eagerly waiting for the next part.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Hello Ulla,
It's a nice piece of Biographical Non-Fiction beautifully depicting its theme.
Wording is simple as well as impressive.
Smooth and captivating flow from top to bottom, barring some part in the middle.
"I opened it and started to read." Catchy End, working as an excellent hook!
I'm eagerly waiting for the next part.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for this excellent review. I'll have to look at the middle bit to find out what I can improve on there. I am so pleased that you are following my story. More to follow soon. All best. Ulla
Comment from a.w.brooks
oh come on I wanted to see what the letter said LOL good way to keep me coming back LOL. I didn't see anything that needed any suggestions that for the read and Happy writing I am waiting for the next part so I can see what the letter says.
A.W.Brooks
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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oh come on I wanted to see what the letter said LOL good way to keep me coming back LOL. I didn't see anything that needed any suggestions that for the read and Happy writing I am waiting for the next part so I can see what the letter says.
A.W.Brooks
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much. I am so pleased that you liked it. More is to come soon and I promise the letter will be there. All best. Ulla
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LOL thanks and you're welcome
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LOL thanks and you're welcome
Comment from Ric Myworld
Some things in life we will never figure out, as they seem bizarre or strange, or so unplanned and thought out. Even our own choices sometimes committed in haste and with little forethought, the results unexpected to possibly heartbreaking or life shattering. Thanks for the pleasure of reading another of your fine chapters. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Some things in life we will never figure out, as they seem bizarre or strange, or so unplanned and thought out. Even our own choices sometimes committed in haste and with little forethought, the results unexpected to possibly heartbreaking or life shattering. Thanks for the pleasure of reading another of your fine chapters. :-)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for this. It means a lot to me, and I can only agree with you in your observations. All the best. Ulla
Comment from barkingdog
Ulla, that was truly horrible of your mother to do what she did. Hateful and unfathomable.
George was right to get you out of there ASAP.
What a place to leave us. You're getting so good at these cliffhanger endings. lol
Happy New Year, my friend.
:) e
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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Ulla, that was truly horrible of your mother to do what she did. Hateful and unfathomable.
George was right to get you out of there ASAP.
What a place to leave us. You're getting so good at these cliffhanger endings. lol
Happy New Year, my friend.
:) e
Comment Written 05-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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Ellen, Thank you so much. I'mso plesed that you like it. More to follow soon. Happy New Year to you as well. Ulla
Comment from LiveLoveDie
Oh, the cliffhanger. I haven't read any of the previous excerpts, but I really want to now. Great telling, with a horrible ending (because I hate sitting in suspense). I loved this. Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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Oh, the cliffhanger. I haven't read any of the previous excerpts, but I really want to now. Great telling, with a horrible ending (because I hate sitting in suspense). I loved this. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for this great review. I would be so pleased if you had the time to read what came prior to this. More to follow soon. All best. Ulla
Comment from seaglass
What a vicious woman. I've know several like this, they were diagnosed as Borderline Personality Disordered, but you would think even if deranged, one would feel more maternal towards her one child. I look forward to reading what is in the letter.
Not sure about this edit...
"that she could have been so (callous)." Since this is written in past-tense, should it be (calloused)?
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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What a vicious woman. I've know several like this, they were diagnosed as Borderline Personality Disordered, but you would think even if deranged, one would feel more maternal towards her one child. I look forward to reading what is in the letter.
Not sure about this edit...
"that she could have been so (callous)." Since this is written in past-tense, should it be (calloused)?
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much. She was callous indeed. I think parents in those days truly believed in their divine right to shape your life. No excuse though. More to follow soon.
Comment from alexisleech
You are such a tease, Ulla! Here I was, all ready to find out what the letter said, and you and your mother are eating and having a glass of wine!
Joking apart, this was an excellent build-up to the moment we're all waiting for. I've made a few suggestions below, mostly language differences, and I hope some of them are helpful!
Alexis xxx
"Mum(,) whatever did you do then?"
He was so angry, (that) he could hardly stop from shaking
This was (to have been) supposed to be one of the happiest days in my life, and instead
For the first time since I'd met Mum(,) I felt a sense of great despair.
I went into free()fall as the enormity of what Mum had just told overwhelmed me. I burst into tears because (realising that) I felt this was too much.
How dare(d) she!
"I am so sorry(,) Mum, but this [just threw] has thrown me
I will never know (why).
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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You are such a tease, Ulla! Here I was, all ready to find out what the letter said, and you and your mother are eating and having a glass of wine!
Joking apart, this was an excellent build-up to the moment we're all waiting for. I've made a few suggestions below, mostly language differences, and I hope some of them are helpful!
Alexis xxx
"Mum(,) whatever did you do then?"
He was so angry, (that) he could hardly stop from shaking
This was (to have been) supposed to be one of the happiest days in my life, and instead
For the first time since I'd met Mum(,) I felt a sense of great despair.
I went into free()fall as the enormity of what Mum had just told overwhelmed me. I burst into tears because (realising that) I felt this was too much.
How dare(d) she!
"I am so sorry(,) Mum, but this [just threw] has thrown me
I will never know (why).
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Alexis, thank you so much, and I have done all the corrections you suggested. I can see that they make so much sense. I learn so much every time. How is your wee grandchild? Did he or she arrive all right? All the best. Ulla xxx
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Ulla. What a wonderful post this is. You are really getting the knack for putting this all together. It's such a heartwarming story and I love it. Some images that stood out in my reading were like this one:
"We brought our late lunch out to the terrace, and ate in silence, each engulfed in our own thoughts, and it was good not having to say anything just yet. It was such a beautiful day, the birds chirping away happily, or so it seemed.The bright sunshine and the gentle heat combined with food and wine warmed my rather chilled heart."
Suggestion: "Part Seventeen." (Put this in Bold type and all caps)
Bravo! Good writing for sure, Ulla. Bob
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Hi, Ulla. What a wonderful post this is. You are really getting the knack for putting this all together. It's such a heartwarming story and I love it. Some images that stood out in my reading were like this one:
"We brought our late lunch out to the terrace, and ate in silence, each engulfed in our own thoughts, and it was good not having to say anything just yet. It was such a beautiful day, the birds chirping away happily, or so it seemed.The bright sunshine and the gentle heat combined with food and wine warmed my rather chilled heart."
Suggestion: "Part Seventeen." (Put this in Bold type and all caps)
Bravo! Good writing for sure, Ulla. Bob
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Bob, thank you so much for this lovely review, and the six stars. It means so much to me. I wouldn't have been able to write like this without all the help I have received throughout. Thanks ever so much again. I will take up your suggestion, good point. Ulla:)
Comment from trumby
Good work.
It must be remembered that parents were young once too. Also that they're only human. It does sound like your grandmother really did the dirty on you.
I started finding out that I had older siblings when I was in my 20's.
I've got 2 older half-sisters & an older full brother.
I went for years thinking that I was the oldest too.
I get on really well with my half-sisters, but my brothers have no time for me because of my brain damage.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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Good work.
It must be remembered that parents were young once too. Also that they're only human. It does sound like your grandmother really did the dirty on you.
I started finding out that I had older siblings when I was in my 20's.
I've got 2 older half-sisters & an older full brother.
I went for years thinking that I was the oldest too.
I get on really well with my half-sisters, but my brothers have no time for me because of my brain damage.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much for your thorough review. I don't know, I think parents in those days thought they had a divine right to shape your life. No excuse though. More is to follow soon. All the best. Ulla
